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Review #1, by Georgia Cold

9th April 2014:
Haha,I love this story! There are so many Sirius/OC stories on this site that are pretty much along the same lines but this one seems quite different from a lot of the others. Can't wait for the next chapter!

Author's Response: Thank you! I hope that this one is quite different. Will be updating soon! :)

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Review #2, by blue_splash Cold

27th March 2014:
Very curious. Cant wait to read more and I'm interested in finding more about Louise and Cassandra. Please update soon!

Author's Response: Will do! Just finishing up Bulldozer first :)

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Review #3, by blue_splash Confusion

27th March 2014:
Hmm I found this story very interesting with all three points of views. Will it be like this the entire time? Cant wait to read the next one and find out more!

Author's Response: Thanks, and for the moment yes (though in the future they might be split across two or three chapters instead of one)

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Review #4, by rich_blonde marauder23 Prefix

11th March 2014:
Hola amiga!

Seems very interesting! I love the no-nonsense approach of this chapter. It's brief, explaining everything and yet really making you curious at the same time.

A few spelling mistakes, though!

"Her sister was the girlfriend to Rabastan LeStrange" I think you should write "was the girlfriend OF Rabastan LeStrange" instead.

"But his past was as twisted as anyone else." I think it would make more sense if you said "But his past was as twisted as anyone ELSE'S" And maybe change up that part a bit?... cause not everyone's past is twisted... maybe "But his THOUGHTS were as twisted as anyone else's"? It would be more convenient, I think. And because thoughts are often more twisted than people's pasts... But it's up to you!

You can't really say "water off his back", because the saying is originally "water off a duck's back", so I think it's a bit weird... maybe just stick with "water off a duck's back"? haha it would be simpler!

" as no real relationship and been sighted since his third year girlfriend who lasted one month."- I think you meant "no real relationship HAD been sighted"?

"After all, feelings are for sissys" First of all, I think you should stick with the past tense, as you use it all throughout the chapter, so say "feelings WERE for sissies". It makes more sense. And also, it's "SISSIES", not sissys. Plural noun conjugations and all that.

Alright, well that's it! Great start and really interesting idea! I wonder where it will go!

x
Sofia

Author's Response: I'm glad you liked it, and will definitely check up on those mistakes later :) Keep reading (and reviewing)!

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Review #5, by SiriusGal Prefix

6th June 2013:
Great prefix! I'm really interested in how this story will turn out, please update asap!

Author's Response: Will do. I just need to update the others first. Thanks for reviewing! :D

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