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Review #1, by Rintunes Chapter 2

23rd June 2013:
Sorry it took me so long to check back for your next chapter! I've been way too busy for my liking lately. Anyway, I loved it! Yeah, it was short, but there are always short chapters at some points, so it's fine.

You're so descriptive with Hermione's emotions and you backed her emotions up with reasons. Her feelings were valid; they weren't over reactive or under reactive to her situation. She had so many different things roiling inside of her that it made her seem more real as a character.

What surprised me was how bad it sounds between Ron and Hermione. I usually imagine their relationship as being a bit rocky, since they never got along at Hogwarts, but I never imagined it like this. It's great though, I love your take on how they would become after the war.

The only constructive criticism I have is that the dialogue is kind of choppy. I know that it's supposed to be very blunt and angry because they're fighting, but even when characters are angry the dialogue should seem natural.

Overall, this addition was superb and I'm really looking forward to the next update. Thank you so much for writing!

~Rintunes

Author's Response: Thank you so much for reviewing again! It means a lot - and I'm glad you enjoyed it! And thank you - I hope this portrayal of them doesn't make people made! I back it up more in the next chapter from Hermione's POV, so I hope people will understand!

I'm almost done with the third chapter right now - I have one 'scene' left in the chapter to write before sending it to my beta and posting it! I hope to hear from you then!


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Review #2, by Rintunes Chapter 1

16th June 2013:
That was an excellent chapter. Really, a great beginning to the story. I love Draco so far; he's believable, has endless character flaws with emotions that we can relate to, and doesn't want to talk in therapy (I thought that was funny in a tragic sort of way).

Because I've had issues with drinking in the past, and I don't know if you've had issues with it or not, I appreciated the way that you portrayed Draco's emotions while he was drinking, then the flashbacks that he had. His emotions were just so real, they weren't two-dimensional; you could tell that he needed the escape that alcohol can sometimes bring you. So thank you for making him seem more real as a character.

To add more on the flashbacks, those were very good too. I don't know if Voldemort would have sighed or dealt with the old man himself, but that's just your interpretation of the character. It was awful that you had Draco killing children, but it just showed how merciless and cruel his time under Voldemort's rule was.

I also liked the fact that you didn't make Hermione like, trust, or even attempt to be tolerant of Draco in the first chapter. Though the war is over, they haven't needed or wanted to find trust in each other. Now, maybe they'll have to.

The fight between Hermione and Ron was intriguing. Since we don't know if they're a couple in your story, we don't know if it's a couple fight or if it's because the broke up or if it's something to do with their friends... sorry, rambling, but I'm super interested in what conflict you're going to put between them. And if Draco is going to help Hermione or not.

Gah! I'm really excited to read the next chapter and I hope you update soon! Thanks for writing!

~Rintunes

Author's Response: Thank you! Draco has always been one of my favorite characters, so portraying him in an accurate way is important to me.

And I did write from experience there - I used alcohol to escape from my mother's illness (cancer), so I understand everything about that. And you are welcome - I'm glad we have both been able to over come our problems.

Thank you so much for this review! It was very detailed and means a lot - I have my own secrets up my sleeve for this story =) And I already have ideas for a sequel to this story - I'm afraid it'll leave a lot of things up in the air.

The next chapter is waiting for validation! It isn't quite as long, but I hope it is still as good! I'm working on the next chapter now.

Cassie


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Review #3, by MargaretLane Chapter 1

10th June 2013:
You've talked about a sleeping drought at one point. I assume you mean a sleeping draught.

Really like the way you portray his flashbacks. It makes sense that he'd be affected by what he was forced to do and what he witnessed.

I also like the fact that he was forced to see a psychologist because the Ministry wants to make sure he can be trusted. Considering how they trusted people like Lucius in the past and turned out to be badly mistaken, that makes a lot of sense.

I'm not sure how the wizarding world works, obviously, but the comment about him planning on going to "school" seemed a bit out of place. After all, he's an adult. He's finished school. I know that in the U.S., people sometimes use "school" to mean "college", but I don't think they do in England and the wizarding world doesn't really seem to have universities exactly. Percy went straight into the Ministry from school, after all. I'd be inclined to say something more like "eventually he hoped to train to do something more in the wizarding world".

It's interesting that he's taking Muggle sleeping pills, but I think it works well. It kind of indicates another change in his thinking.

I also like the way Ron and Hermione don't trust him immediately. I'm guessing they'll begin to see he's changed as time passes, but it's the sort of thing that should develop gradually and it looks like it will. Or of course, I could be wrong and they might never come to trust him at all, which would make sense too, considering everything he's been involved in over the years.

Author's Response: Thank you so much for the review! I had not caught those and thank you so much - I'm waiting on my beta to read the story and get back to me, but I wanted to begin posting the story because of the length it takes to validate them at times. Again, thank you so much for the review! It means the world.

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