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Review #1, by NinthHorcrux Secret Tears and Mischievous Plans

13th January 2014:
Whoa please continue! This story is very good so far, I like how are are building up all the drama and giving little hints of things! Good job! Please keep writing please! Hehe :) good job!

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Review #2, by typewriter Weird Encounters and Secret Glares

18th July 2013:
Your chapters keep getting longer and longer! I love it! I find that when I write, as I get further into the story more ideas pop up and make for more in-depth plot ideas. When you look at my latest George/Hermione story, you can see the word count rising with each chapter! Do you feel that that's what's happening with your story? :)

I really like the switching of points of view. It is a great way of capturing the story through both character's eyes. I don't think you necessarily need to write "Hermione POV" and "Fred POV" at the top of the chapter, though. It's implied by how you've written the story out. Just a suggestion, though! Do what you think gets the point across best.

All I could think about when Hermione was staring at Fred instead of studying was that he must really be good looking for her to choose him over a book! Very un-Hermione! I loved it! A grammar error I found was "quieten down" should be "quiet down". Also, I'm so happy Fred made a move with her! I wanted to dance up and down! But then my sympathy for Ron got in the way.

~Amanda

Author's Response: Thank you! Your reviews are making me really happy, knowing that someone is enjoying my story thoroughly and actually wanting to continue reading it! :)

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Review #3, by typewriter Train Rides and Ministry Surprises

18th July 2013:
I loved that this chapter was a smidgen longer than the last. It was surprising to see Fred Weasley break down and cry over a girl, yet I found that it was a nice surprise. I figure, if he's going to let anyone see him at his most vulnerable, it would be George. They mean the world to each other - family is everything when it comes to the Weasleys. I think you really did well at portraying that by showing how Fred feels regretful and badly about having fallen for a girl that his younger brother fancies. I think that is very believable, because they are family, after all. Grammatically, this chapter was a great improvement, so excellent job! I'm excited to read a 5th year fic since this year is when the twins really get up to no good. :) I'm crossing my fingers that Hermione and him realize they're both crushing on each other very soon! I'm surprised no one around them has noticed it's mutual yet! Off to the next chapter!

~Amanda

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Review #4, by typewriter Grimmauld Place

18th July 2013:
I think this is a cute idea. I love Fred and Hermione together, because I think he compliments her cleverness and makes her more free-spirited. I think she grounds him and makes him more reasonable. They're the perfect ying and yang match! I will say that your story isn't perfect when it comes to grammar, as much as I enjoy the plot. Minor things can be corrected with another skim over it for editing. Another thing to note is that when we start a paragraph with a number, it is always written out. So, instead of 20 it should be twenty. Also, in your third paragraph you ended it with "what George and Ginny." I assume it should be "with George and Ginny". ;) I thought it was adorably problematic that she was sitting in between the two brothers in the car. I love stories where Hermione is with Fred or George while Ron pines after her. It's the perfect love triangle since it's with brothers. So much drama! Off to the next chapter!

~Amanda

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Review #5, by Kookie Jar Grimmauld Place

26th May 2013:
Wow this fanfic is awesome! I mean, I just read the first chapter and I already feel like this is going to be far greater than I thought! LUV IT! :)

Author's Response: Thank you so much! I sincerely apologize though about the late update, but once it's validated you can read on! :)

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Review #6, by MissesWeasley123 Grimmauld Place

22nd May 2013:
This is my first time Fremione a chance... And I think it was a good idea! Well written! Looking forward to the next!

Author's Response: Thank you! Although I highly apologize for the late update, I hope you enjoy chapter two when it's validated!

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