4 Reviews Found

Review #1, by Holly Confusion

22nd June 2013:
I liked the end of this chapter but I need more chapters :p

Author's Response: thank youuu,
yeah I know, I haven't had a lot of time to work on this story, i'll try to upload more chapters soon!
-rickmanfanatic


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Review #2, by roarlikejello4 Back to School

8th June 2013:
Really good i think you should still continue it!!

Author's Response: Thank you! I'm unsure whether I will or not. I'm unhappy with what the outcome to this story was going to be, it seems silly. I may leave this one and start writing another Dramione story. Thank you for your support anyway!

-rickmanfanatic


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Review #3, by ginnys twin Back to School

25th May 2013:
Nice! One thing you did really well was making this relate able. A lot of the things in here from the droning class to unwanted pity are something a lot of people experience on day to day bases (or at least I do.)

one thing I would work on would be putting something between time changes. A lot of stories on this site have little markings like *** or or &&& to signal time change or setting change. Since I'm used to that, I thought Hermione had lessons straight after dinner. So my suggestion would be to add those marks in.

You might also want to seperate people talking. Just make each person talking a new paragraph. It makes it much easier to follow the conversation without saying who said what every time.

I also saw you are a bit new. Feel free to ask me any questions you have via PM. I go by katty01 on the forums. Hope to see you around!

-Krissy

Author's Response: Thank you so much for reading and reviewing, it really helps me a lot! yes I am a newbie, so if I could ask you some questions on the forum that would be great. when I re-do this chapter I'll add all the tips you gave me. Btw I have not abandoned this story, I've just been away for a few days!

rickmanfanatic :)


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Review #4, by MeMe Back to School

21st May 2013:
Interested to see where this goes, hope you continue writing it. Only comment is maybe distinguish between thoughts and actual words, perhaps use italics for thoughts. That's just me personally but I feel it gives the reader an easier way of distinguishing between the two!

Author's Response: Thank you for spending the time to write a review! yes... I was thinking about that when writing it, so in my next chapter I'll definitely try to do so :)

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