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Review #1, by SassySlytherinGirl Try to Remember

6th November 2013:
Some constructive criticism here. It's a nice idea and it could work but there are some things that need to be fixed. First, make sure you proofread. Several times you spelled Granger and Grander which can be very distracting to a reader. Also the paragraph/sentence spacing was terrible for this chapter and I couldn't even finish it out of frustration. You also repeat information a lot. Half of each chapter could be omitted. For example, when Dumbledore and McGonagall are arguing over whether or not to tell Harry and Ron. It was too much repetitiveness and it makes the reader want to skip.

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Review #2, by Marni Try to Remember

17th June 2013:
Interesting. I look forward to the next chapters. Hermione seems a lot more angry than in the books, but essentially the same.

Author's Response: Thanks for the review, I decided to make Hermiones character angrier so far because she has no idea what is going on. Its not so much a mad angry but more of a scared angry.

But I hope to have a new chaper up in the net little bit.

Thanks again, I always love hearing from my readers!!

HD


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Review #3, by Hermionetwin In the Dark

23rd May 2013:
Once again, great story that could come out of this.
Just needs little tweaks :)

Author's Response: yeha my spacing is not working at all ive tried putting 6 spaces between the paragraphs and its still screaming at me so that one i cant change hehe.

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Review #4, by Hermionetwin A New Day

23rd May 2013:
Hey:) so im totally here to help. This story could really become something but to get there it is going to need a lot of help. First of all you have a lot of grammar issues which make it hard to read and your spacing makes the story flow hard to follow. Would you like a beta? because as long as your willing to work for this story I am willing to help out. Let me know what you think.

Author's Response: yeah i would totally be willing to work on it; ive been writing while im at work when i have nothing else to do lol. I hvae noticed that the spacing turnes out funny on the website but it makes me do the double space in between the paragraphs so i dont know how to fix that one ;)
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