Reading Reviews for The Motorcycle Incident
  
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Review #1, by bri_5_stars Something New

1st October 2013:
I do love a good Lily and Rose messing about fic. This was very cute and made me smile lots. I did get a good chuckle at Lily's immediate need to touch and use James' motorcycle. And I thought Rose was pretty dang funny. Good job. :D
brithewriter from the challenge, I'll be posting results soon. Good luck.

Author's Response: Hey there! I'm so glad that I actually made you chuckle (just look at me cheering behind my computer screen). I always worry that I fail at humor because I never laugh when I write most of my humor stories.

Thanks for reviewing!


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Review #2, by Fan of a fan Something New

26th June 2013:
Oh my, Lily is certainly a bit of a daredevil I must say. I like this side of her though, she seems really fun and a perfect Slytherin I might add. And I love the family dynamic. They're all so close that no one questions why anyone is over at their house.

Anyway, this was simply hilarious and I loved it and if I remember I'll take time to look at everything that goes with this.

Author's Response: Someone had to be the overly reckless one in the Potter family! Why thank you on the Slytherin comment, I try to make her seem like a Slytherin. The family dynamic wasn't hard to write considering that's how my family is but I'm still glad that you liked it.

I'm glad that you liked it and if you do read the stories that go with this then I hope you enjoy them!


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Review #3, by Calypso  Something New

9th June 2013:
Here from the Ravenclaw Review Battle!

Oh dear- it looks like Lily's in a bit of trouble!

The title was definitely what initially attracted me to this- it looked very intriguing, so well done for that! I enjoyed the way you wrote the beginning, with James' warning to Lily, and the way that even as he's telling her to keep away, we know that she's probably going to try and ride it!
James having a motorcycle reminded me of Sirius a bit, which was a nice connection, just like Rose and Lily ending up in the tree was reminiscent of Harry and Ron crashing into the Whomping Willow!

I thought that you wrote the friendship between Rose and Lily well- they were both quite developed, which in about two thousand words is impressive! I also liked how Ron just accepts that Lily's around his house a lot- it showed as nice relationship between the two families!

Ahh Lily and Rose's bike ride did make me giggle- and it was really gripping too! You definitely brought across the suspense in that part, and at one point I was genuinely quite worried for their safety :P But I should have known to rely on some quick thinking from Rose!
I have to say I feel a bit sorry for James, but hopefully some magic can sort the bike out?

I've just noticed a typo: "You've ruined your brothers bike." I think there needs to be an apostrophe before the "s" of "brothers."

Haha, Lily's last line was just perfect! It sort of summed up the whole one-shot for me, and was a great, rather humourous note to leave it one! This was a great story, and it did make me laugh- well done!

-Bethany

Author's Response: I thought the title was actually quite blah and uninteresting but less is more seems to be the case here!

I was actually thinking about Sirius when I have James the motorbike and I was hoping that someone else would think of Sirius as well!

And thank you very much, it means a lot to me to hear that the character development was good. Since the Golden Trio are such good friends, it made sense to me that their kids would be barging into their houses without knocking. It's how my family is anyways.

The bike ride was actually the most difficult part to write as I didn't know how to go about it. I was actually really worried that the way I'd written the scene didn't work and people would point it out to me.

Thanks for pointing out the typo, I must've missed it when I was reading through the chapter.

Thank you for the feedback, it was very appreciated, thank you for reviewing and I'm glad that you enjoyed the one-shot!


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Review #4, by rogue_bludger Something New

21st May 2013:
Ravenclaw Review Tag!
this was incredibly entertaining and very gripping. I love how you describe Lily--you can tell she's related to the twins and Ginny :) And Rose is the perfect mix of her parents--brilliantly smart but going along with crazy ideas for the ride and complaining at the same time. So yeah- this was a great story and I really enjoyed it.
~M

Author's Response: Hello there! I'm glad that you found it entertaining as that was what I was aiming for so this is good news for me! Anyway, I really enjoyed writing Lily and Rose because there's nothing more that I love than making my characters a little quirky but like their parents at the same time.

Thanks for reviewing!


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Review #5, by RosieQueen Something New

18th May 2013:
Oh my gosh, this was just hilarious! It's only natural to do the opposite of what your older sibling tells you to do, right? ;) I loved Lily's characterization--adventurous and mischievous, exactly how a younger sister should be. I loved how light-hearted this was as well. I had a smile on my face the whole time reading this!

My favorite part was when Lily said she regretted nothing. I laughed so hard at that line! Definitely a wonderful piece--I think I might just have to check out your other stories featuring Lily now! Great job! :)

~Rosie

Author's Response: I'm happy to find that you found it funny! If there's one thing that I've learned with my younger brother is that, yes, apparently the rational thing to do is the opposite of what your older sibling tells you to do.

I always pictured Lily as the slight oddball in the family and I just always figured that she'd take after Arthur because she was the youngest and probably hung out with him a lot.

Anyway, thank you so much for reading and reviewing!


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