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Review #1, by APerkins The Park

6th November 2013:
Thankyou so much for that happy ending! I feel like sometimes real life just sucks is why I love writing so much- you have some small measure of control over the existence of a happy ending! I thought I had read some of your work before but now I'm not sure. .. That's stunning, heart breaking. . But kinda nice too. (And really really well written)
I think you have an amazing handle on Snape. He is really complex and you nailed it.

Thankyou for writing that piece :) .

Author's Response: Thank you for the feedback!

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Review #2, by Rumpelstiltskin The Park

9th October 2013:
This is lovely!


Author's Response: Thank you!

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Review #3, by FredWeasleyIsMyKing The Park

17th May 2013:
Hi Ral!

If the review appears strange at any stage, check the Gryffie CR and everything will be clear.

This was such an amazing chapter! I think u did an amazing thing here.

This may be the best Snape chapter I've read. Everything seemed in place and his character was perfect. Giving him peace was pretty much the best thing u did and giving him Lily was magical reading. I was really happy he made up with James as well!

Adding in the deaths was really heart-rending, especially Fred as his death is hard. NT being upset with leaving Teddy behind was hard reading!

1 mistake I saw: 'warp' I think u mean 'wrap'.

Amazing chapter Ral! I cherished every bit!

Lauren :)

Author's Response: Such an original review Lauren! :)

Thank you so much for the lovely comments and for choosing to read my story for the task!

I am really happy you enjoyed it!

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Review #4, by Debra20 The Park

7th May 2013: left me truly without words. I never expected something like this and I loved every single word of the story. I can't thank you enough for everything you've done, not only this story but for always being there when I needed to vent off, to share painful moments, crazy fan reactions or just a chat. This has topped what anyone has ever done for my birthday. No one ever dedicated anything to me, even when it wasn't my birthday. So you can imagine my emotion when you gave me the link to a story written in my name...and a Snily nonetheless!! I know how hard it must have been for you since Snily is not exactly your own preferred pairing, and Snape not one of your favourite characters. It makes me treasure this even more.

I don't even know how to start this. Your afterlife is how I dream the real afterlife is. And I really, deeply wish it to be like that. Where there is no negative feeling, no despair or sadness, hate or dissatisfaction, where only happiness and peace rules. And where you can meet all of your loved ones and spend time with them. An eternity with your family and friends just...I don't know the right word that could express how much that'd mean to me.

I'm so glad you decided to give Snape a happy after life. I really feel like he deserved it. He has made many mistakes, there's no arguing that, but we can't judge him by his mistakes. Not more than we could judge other characters by their mistakes. He was a tormented soul while he lived, so I will die thinking that he did deserve to be happy after his death. At least then.

I was positively crying by the moment Severus made up with James. You cant imagine HOW much I waited for a moment in the books, a word from Severus of forgiveness or respect or something that would show us that he put his Potter grudge behind him, not so much for James or even Harry, but for himself because that grudge was poisoning him, was slowly killing him inside. And that's not a healthy way to live your life :(

I am left speechless at the perfection of Lily's meeting with Severus. It was heart-warming to see them reunited once more, in the place where everything started. I LOVED, LOVED your idea that when you die you go to the place where everything started. It's an amazing conception and now I wish for it to be like that haha I wonder what my starting moment would be. Do you know yours?

Thank you, thank you once again for doing this. It's the most amazing gift I've ever received in my life and I will treasure it forever!

Author's Response: That moment when your reaction is better than anything I expected it to be! I'm so happy you liked this! I really wanted this to be special since I know how much you love Snape, even though he isn't my first choice of character.

And the idea of how the afterlife is... I pay attention to our conversations you know :P

As for the starting point, I did think about mine when writing this. When I was 5 years old my late grandfather, who as you know has been the biggest inspiration in my life, had a case at the Palace of Justice in Bucharest. I was too young to go inside but I remember sitting by the door and peering inside as he was speaking, in his robe and the whole room was drinking in his every word. That's when I knew I wanted to practice law and the place where it all started is the Palace of Justice. With my grandfather.

Again, I am so happy you enjoyed it! *hugs*

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Review #5, by CambAngst The Park

6th May 2013:
Hi, Ral! And Happy Birthday! Here is your Gryffindor Birthday Review...

This was one of the best Snape stories that I've come across, no doubt about it. I liked it for what you did do and I liked it for what you didn't do.

What you did do was keep him true to his character. The bitter fatalism with which he accepts his fate sounds like Snape. The condescension and frustration he feels toward Harry felt like Snape, even though the fact that Harry was hiding "under the Dark Lord's nose" made it possible for Snape to complete his mission. The weary nihilism that he feels in his final moments of life definitely felt like Snape. Life was cruel to him in many ways, although some of those he undeniably brought upon himself. But whatever the relative weight of his bad circumstances and bad choices, he was ready to die.

What you didn't do was succumb to that ever-present temptation to have Severus -- you'll notice that I have a tendency to call him Severus when I'm pleased with him ;) -- and Lily declare their unrequited love for one another when they find one another in the afterlife. For me, that's huge. Lily loved James. They were married. They had a child together. He died trying to protect her and she died trying to protect Harry. To me, that doesn't leave much room for a sudden, post-mortem realization that she loved another man all along.

In fact, I loved basically everything you did with the afterlife scene. Lily reacted exactly the way I would have expected. She was grateful to Severus for protecting her son. She forgave him for all of the terrible things he did when he was young and foolish and trying to win the Dark Lord's favor. She genuinely appreciated the enormous sacrifices he made during his difficult life.

Your concept of returning to the place where it all started was brilliant and really heart-warming. After I read her explanation, I spent a good few minutes just sitting here, trying to think of where "it all started" for me. I'm gonna say that it was when I arrived and college and for the first time in my life, I made friends who really understood me and where I was coming from. :)

Ah, Lily! Even in the afterlife, she's still mothering those around her. Tonks is one that I've always felt really badly for. She had so little time to be happy with Remus and their newborn son. It seems just like Lily to feel the need to comfort Tonks and help her come to terms with her loss. It was humanizing, in a way, to see Severus react to the news of Fred Weasley's death. I doubt that he's high on the list of people that Fred wants to see, but the fact that he actually cared enough to ask who had died showed a change on his part.

This was really beautiful, Ral. You had several really great ideas and you wove them together into a great story that took one of my less favorite characters and portrayed him in a positive way without white-washing his whole story. You can't do much better than that!

Author's Response: My birthday was a month ago and I am a horrible person for not responding to this sooner! *bows head in shame*

This made my day! I couldn't stop smiling after reading it! Writing Snape was out of my comfort zone but I decided to take a leap of faith and see what happens!

I never though of Lily as the kind of character that would hold a grudge, especially if she saw (as I believe she did) everything that happened.

The concept of going back is something that is stuck in my head, because I believe that when we die, we are greeted by the one person who influenced us the most. In Severus' case, that was Lily. The man literally centered his whole life around her and so it would only be fitting that she "welcome" him to the afterlife!

Again, thank you so much for the amazing review and for all your constant feedback and support!

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Review #6, by charlottetrips The Park

6th May 2013:
I'm a sucker for Snape stories! Especially stories where Snape gets what he deserves: a break. You're right in the part where he's dying, life's been pretty harsh to him.

There were a few grammar and spelling errors but overall very nicely written.


Author's Response: Thank you so much for the lovely review! :)

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