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Review #1, by BKL8008 Unspoken

27th February 2014:
Perhaps the real tragedy of this relationship: she deserves better than me.

Self-esteem isn't something that abused children/teens have much of, and this whole piece just works perfectly. Not a thing out of line with it.


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Review #2, by luvinpadfoot Unspoken

18th July 2013:
Oh. Oh wow. That was just amazing. Everything was so perfect and sad. Severus and Lily are one of my favorite ships and to just see them loving each other so much but finding themselves undeserving of the other's love hurt so much. They were almost there, almost to admitting their feelings.

You handled everything beautifully from the dual point of views to the abuse and the feeling that they were undeserving, both of them. It just all seemed so real. Too real. I was sucked in from the first word.

And that last line from Severus stung so much, that he was glad Lily was his friend. I can only imagine how saying that must have hurt them both.

You descriptions were lovely, especially about the rain when you wrote that it "tattooed the roof in unintelligible morse code" and was "rain-kissed". It was all so beautiful and fit in so well with the scene. It was as bittersweet as their feelings for each other, so beautiful and true but never to see the light of day.

You've evoked so much emotion from me in this piece. It was flawless in every way, I honestly can't think of one critique for you. Wonderful, amazing story! You're an incredibly talented writer!

Author's Response: Thank you so much! I am not really a Severus/Lily shipper, but I wondered what could have happened if she had cared for him before he ruined it with his Death Eater interests. I appreciate your lovely review so much!~GW

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Review #3, by RoseWeasleyGryfindor Unspoken

26th May 2013:
I have read all of your stories and love them all. I am just starting out with a story of my own. I was wondering if you could read it and tell me what you think

Author's Response: Thank you for the review, and I am glad you are enjoying my stories. However, as a senior staffer I have to remind you that reviews are not the place to ask for reviews from fellow authors. Feel free to join us over on the forums and post in the review request threads! ~GW

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