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Review #1, by Rintunes Now.

30th June 2013:
That was such a great start to your story! You gave Lissa so much emotion that came through as genuine instead of cheesy, as it sometimes can. You really put into perspective how much of a friend Lily was to her and how broken Lissa is now that she's gone.

The detail that really helped drive Lissa's brokenness home was how you said she'd been in love with Lysander for years, but then she didn't kiss him. I just thought that it was valid that Lissa thought that kissing is childish after you've witnessed a murder.

I love how you were so focused on details. We already learned so many things, physically and emotionally, about the characters you are using in this story. And the way Lissa narrates is great.

I'm really looking forward to your next update, even though it might be awhile because of the staff vacation. Thanks so much for writing!

~Rintunes

Author's Response: Hi! I can't describe how amazing this review was to read. I wasn't expecting such great feedback from this chapter, because I rushed it a bit. But you give me too much credit! Originally I was going to have a kiss between Lissa and Lysander, but then I thought that it was probably a bit too early on in the story for that, and I simply thought up a reason why Lissa wouldn't kiss him.
Thank YOU so much for reading! You've really made my day :) I will have the next chapter in the queue as soon as it reopens.
-LWG


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Review #2, by G Now.

29th June 2013:
I really like your writing style it drew me into the story right away. I have to say that this chapter was dark and sad and I know it probably will get darker but I like it. Please keep writing and update soon

Author's Response: Hello! Thank you for reading and reviewing, it's made me so happy :D :D
The parts set in the present are going to be very dark and sad, but every other chapter will be set in the past in the days when Lily was alive and most of that will be fluff/happy. So there's a bit of both!
I will have the next chapter in the queue as soon as it reopens! :)


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