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Review #1, by Marshal Now I Was Gone

25th April 2017:
Regulus! I always love Regulus fics. He is such an interesting character and your take of how he became a death eater is interesting. Yet it is also so sad. You really feel for Regulus here. The romance you built was nicely done and then the loss was equally poignant.

So I am guessing you went a little AU with this?

I ask because you are showing Regulus standing before his now former love and the Dark Lord. My impression from the book was Regulus died in that cave via the inferni. It has been a while since I read the books though. Still, what you have written is strong and powerful and a true hit in the gut that the woman who was his ling time friend and former love is calloused toward him and I believe also ratted on him to Voldemort.

Also your use of the word blink for each scene was an interesting touch. It gave a clear sign that the scene is a new one with out breaking the story and helped tie things together as well as make the memories feel instantaneous and quicker to play in his mind compared to the time to read it sort of a life flashing before a person's eyes scenario.

Overall a very nice job on this story.

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Review #2, by adluvshp Now I Was Gone

25th April 2017:
Oh dear, poor poor Regulus. This totally shattered my heart. As it is, his life was tragic and on top of that you have given him a lost love, poor thing. The idea of him being a death eater alongside a love interest is so sad - and it is worse that in the end she did not care for him and was ready to watch him die alongside her dark lord even though she claimed to love him. I suppose her obsession with the dark magic and voldemort overpowered her love for him, but I wonder if she really loved him or was merely using him. Your phrasing of "candy coated misery" to describe her was perfect and i could visualise her as this beautiful blonde who was basically uncaring and manipulative. The progression of their relationship was shown brilliantly here, using those "blinks" to divide the segments and touch upon one important moment of their relationship where something changed, be it the first time they were together or their friendship or when regulus started disliking what he was being forced to do under voldemort but this girl liking it all and encouraging him to not quit. Kreacher being the last straw tied in very smoothly with canon too and worked well for the narrative at the same time. I also liked your descriptions as they gave the right amount of information and enough to connect with the character and feel for him. The last line was truly heartwrenching, after seven years of love, this is over in this manner, ghosh. Beautiful writing!
-CTF Review by Angie

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Review #3, by melian Now I Was Gone

19th April 2017:
Wow, Erica, that was really thought-provoking.

Of course I want to know who she was, but then again I actually donít need to, do I? Sheís a Slytherin who followed other Slytherins (and those from other Houses, I should add, but they were mostly snakes) into the Death Eaters, and her encouragement led at least one other person into that fate. We know enough of Regulus to know he probably would have joined up anyway, but this might have been the impetus for him. Sex and love will make people do all sorts of things, as we well know.

I liked the repetitiveness of his thought process Ė the blinks. I know what itís like, it feels like you blink twice and another year has passed. But Regulus was too young for the years to pass by so quickly (after all, itís a reflection of how long one year is compared to how long youíve been alive) so that makes it even more effective. That someone so young could be so jaded, especially when he had the feted childhood of the chosen son (post Siriusí departure) speaks volumes for the impact this girl had on him. Blink. Another year, another memory. Yep, it worked really really well in this context.

I will also say that this is the first time Iíve read a fic about Regulus that doesnít mention Sirius. Not once, not even my allusion. And I think itís all the more powerful because of that, to be honest. Great job!

Cheers Mel

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Review #4, by dirtydeedsdonedirtcheap Now I Was Gone

19th April 2017:
Okay I haven't read a story about Regulus in years. To read how enamored he is with this mystery person gives me goosebumps. Gosh, just to think of him as a little first year thinking this girl is beautiful. At that age that's when you have your first real crush. It is exciting and it is everything.

Oooo candy coated mystery. Love that line! Every time I read the words blink I blink as well. I feel like I'm starting an entirely new story or it's like a reel that is playing in my minds eye of Regulus and this girl who clearly means trouble.

Wow. That was simply amazing. I can't believe you were able to give us a progression of seven years and really hook us in.

Or well, me.

I knew she was trouble from the get go and she would bring about his demise or torture. The characterization of Regulus was spot on too. He was never as rebellious as Sirius. He was a people pleaser until the very end and that was what got him killed. When he accepted the reality of the situation it was just too late for him. The same thing happens to him here too. Those rose colored glasses come off and he realized just who exactly he had fallen in love with. Surprising though we don't ever really hear the mystery woman speak she kind of reminded me of Bellatrix. They do say you date who you know. Uh, that hurts me because all he ever knew was really pain and heartache.

Excellent job!

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Review #5, by Very Secret Santa Now I Was Gone

23rd December 2014:
Dearest Slytherinchina,
Here is the very anonymous Santa Claus delivering your first installment of the threefold gift (and just barely in time - sorry about the delay!).. ho ho ho.

While I looked through many of your wonderful stories (to see if you have been good!), choosing one for the first gift became increasingly difficult, because you have obviously been very good!

I finally settled for this one-shot, because it was so touching, I very nearly cried - and I felt that I really needed to tell you how wonderful this story is.

It starts with choosing Regulus as the protagonist. I have never read a story about him, and never spent much time thinking about him either. But your story gave him a beautiful and very sad story to tell. I thought the angle of him becoming a Death Eater, not mainly for ideological reasons, but for love, was very interesting and extremely well executed. The whole framework of the story - the moment of his death nearing and thus reflecting important steps in his life with each *blink* - is perfect.

We never know, until the end, that Regulus is knowingly facing his end, we keep wondering what the big betrayal might be and at what point of his life he is currently standing. At first, we could think that it might simply be a lover`s quarrel, or maybe a betrayal. But as the story progresses, we see where his love has lead him.

How you portrayed Regulus also fits what we know from the books perfectly. He isn`t as strong or rebellious as Sirius, he tries to please others, but he must also be passionate and thoughtful - why else would he risk his life to end Voldemort`s. This kind of passion and thoughtfulness is present in the way he loves her. It makes us feel with him - a boy who didn`t have a reason to break with what his family had always taught him. You also gave Kreacher a very special part - fitting the adoration Kreacher had for Regulus. I love the idea that Kreacher might be an important companion for Regulus, someone with whom he connects good memories from his childhood.

Now she - whoever she might be - is another thing that made this whole story very mysterious and gripping. At first, she almost seems like Narcissa from the description, and then she very strongly reminds us of Bellatrix, the way she is happily serving her master, enjoying the pain of others to a point that is almost insane. But clearly, she is neither of them, just a very well done OC - even more impressive to flesh out her personality by only describing her through the eyes of someone else who tries to graps how much she`s changed (or maybe the way she`s always been).

The details of the time they spent together were very beautiful - the meaning of their first Quidditch match, their first kiss and first time making love and so on.

I thought it was also amazingly done to tell a story of over 7 years, and chronologically at that, without giving the feeling of `chopped-nessī. Quite the opposite; it flowed very naturally and progressed believingly from a young love-story to a truly dramatic, sad story of war. Although the tone of your writing was set right from the beginning (which is also very good), the intensity incresed feelingly and made me hold my breath toward the end.

Overall, your expressions are so, so beautiful. The last sentence, of course, was perfectly dramatic wonderful and hart-wrenching. But also the way you played with the idea of innocence was just great.

All in all, I cannot say that I have any criticism for this story (although some might be disturbed that the way Regulus died is not strictly Canon), only lots of love for you for sharing this story :`)

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Review #6, by wolfgirl17 Now I Was Gone

17th November 2014:
I enjoyed this. It was a good read. =)

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Review #7, by DracoFerret11 Now I Was Gone

7th July 2014:
Hello again! I'm just cruising through these one-shots. I have a special place in my heart for Regulus, so let's go over things:

Plot: Ahhh, Regulus, bby. I love him so much, so this was just depressing to read. I never thought of him having a relationship with anyone, so this was interesting to read. (Side note, at first I thought the girl was Narcissa and I got super grossed out, but then I had to think about that and realized that's against TOS, obviously. But maybe clarify that somewhat.) I loved how you structured it into memories, but I realize that Regulus just stands there blinking at Voldemort ten times, which was a bit odd. The memories themselves progressed well and flowed together nicely. Good job!

Characterization: I loved that you captured Regulus's naivety. That's such an important part of his character. That's what got him into his situation in the first place. And I liked how you described his inability not to love her, despite all she'd done to him.

Descriptions & Emotions: I liked the small details you added about Regulus's past and his progression from innocence to Death Eater. It was very believable and I liked that I could see the important changes he went through. I loved the dramatic moment at the end (and the line "I was eighteen, and now I was gone.") when he realizes she's just going to let him die. Ahh, sad.

The ending only bothered me insofar as Regulus not dying how he did in canon. ;) But I'm a freak like that. (Even as a Dramione fan, I know! Weird!)

Anyhow, well done! This was well-written, and I loved reading about Regulus. Good luck to Hufflepuff in the House Cup!

--Emily (House Cup 2014 Review)

Author's Response: Hello! Thank you for stopping by and leaving a review! I'm glad that you thought this was an interesting read. I guess I never really thought about the fact that he's basically just standing there in front of Voldemort blinking, maybe I should come back to this oneshot and fix it up a bit. But I'm glad that you felt the memories progressed and flowed really well. I'm also glad that you liked his characterization. I feel like if he was willing to follow her down this path than he would have a really hard time not to still love her. Last last bit, I'm particularly proud of. I feel like it does a really good idea of capturing the whole feeling of the one shot. I'm glad that you enjoyed it! Thanks again for reading and reviewing!


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Review #8, by dreamer21 Now I Was Gone

26th April 2013:
Hi I'm here from the review tag.
Okay so wow.
I'm all heartbroken at this. I have a thing for Regulus and I want to write some story on him myself.
You did a great job with describing pain, I dont like sad endings :( But you made me sad which means your writing is effective so you get a balloon, *hands you a balloon*
I don't like this Slytherin Chica. Too heartless for my taste.
I'm just rambling now.
I like your writing style btw.
And one thing i'd suggest is that you separate the "blinks" it'll add a more profound effect. more dramatic. :D
Okay, so surely I'd be paying your stories a visit very soon. Till then Adiosss

Author's Response: Thanks for the review! I'm glad that the emotions were able to come across for you and that you were able to feel his pain! Thanks for the balloon! I'm glad that you like my writing style! I do hope that you will stop by my stories again soon! Thank you so much for reading and reviewing!


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Review #9, by marauder5 Now I Was Gone

25th April 2013:
Hi! I'm here for the review tag.

Oh my God. I don't even know where to begin. This story was so brilliant that it has left me speechless.

No, I'm not going to leave it at that, though. I have to let you know how much I love this story. First of all, Regulus! We got to know so little about him in the books, which gives you free hands to write him in fanfiction. And you have done it very well, my friend.

I loved the 'blink' thing. It was a perfect way of separating the flashbacks while still linking them together. I wonder who this woman is. Is she an OC or someone from the series? I'm guessing OC. Either way, you've portrayed their love perfectly, and it was so sad that he did all of it for her..

The last line is fantastic- 'I was eighteen and now I was gone.' So simple, and yet a very strong and beautiful sentence. I absolutely love it.

I hope that you're really proud of this story, because it really is brilliant! Thank you for writing it :)

Author's Response: Thanks so much for reading and reviewing! I'm really glad that you liked the story! That last line is one of my favorites as well. I felt that it really delivered a bit of a punch.


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Review #10, by ChaosWednesday Now I Was Gone

22nd April 2013:
Hey, it's Whiskey from the forums :)

Ah, Regulus! A fascinating character that deserves more attention in the fandom, for sure! I like how you try to answer many of the questions about his motivations and his story by connecting them with his intense and somewhat childish love for a girl. The way you describe the events has a detached yet poignant tone to it makes them believable even to someone like me who just isnt into shipping :P

The *Blink* structure is a nice choice ;) It adds a fast and unsettling rythm to the story, which never really lets us leave the actual event of his approaching death. In fact, I would make the segments even shorter, or maybe have them get shorter as we near the end? Just a thought...

I really do love how you managed to evoke vivid images with such little description...I couldn't do that! Him pretending to be surprised to see her at the Quiddich game, the broken nose, her waiting for him after the mission and a few other moments really helped me picture both Regulus and your OC, despite the limited information. I also liked this sentence: "Blink. Death, blood, and screams, those were the rewards for a Death Eater." After all the black and white depictions of Death Eaters we are used to, one forgets to really picture their life and just accepts it as a fact in a desensitized way. But that sentence managed to remind me of their sadism - you refrained from telling the reader that Death eaters= bad directly like most others seem to do and instead explained why.

Great job, basically. And thanks for the swap :)

Author's Response: This review is really wonderful! Thank you so much for swapping with me and for looking over this piece! I'm glad that you liked the blink structure of the story and found it to help cement the reminder of his death!


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Review #11, by PolyJuice_ Now I Was Gone

14th April 2013:
See now, I never know what to say when I get a story like yours. It's quite obviously well-written and I've not much criticism (and by that I mean none at all).

Instead I'll just rave about how fantastic this is.

The emotions just about killed me. "I was eighteen and now I was gone." The way you brought the whole blinking thing in was genius, it added so much; it felt so tragic.

Wow, this is a super unhelpful review, isn't it? *despair* It's not my fault I've nothing to say other than to squee..

Before I dig myself into a hole here I'll leave you.

I absolutely love LOVED it. One of the better stories I've read in a long time,

Author's Response: Oh wow this review! Thanks so much and honestly just telling me that you loved it and that its one of the better stories that you've read in a long time is amazing! I'm super happy that you liked it! Thanks so much for taking the time to read and review!


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Review #12, by fanfictionwriter Now I Was Gone

11th April 2013:
Dang, I thought it was a book. I didn't know that it was a one-shot! haha sorry :P

but how do you make your own banner? yours is really good. :)

Author's Response: Well I appreciate you stopping by and leaving a review. For information on banners and how to make them you can check out the dark arts a sister site of here. I made mine in gimp. Thanks for reading and reviewing.

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Review #13, by ShelbyBlack Now I Was Gone

10th April 2013:
I LOVE YOU I LOVE YOU I LOVE YOU AND I LOVE THIS! Ee, I'm so happy! You're so great, I'm glad I have you as a friend!

Day...week...month...YEAR made!

Love lots ShelbyBlack.

Author's Response: Aw sweetie I'm glad you enjoyed this! It was a fun piece to write and I'm glad I've got you as a friend too! Thanks so much for reading and reviewing.

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Review #14, by CambAngst Now I Was Gone

10th April 2013:
Hi, Erica!

That was a really interesting and very different take on Regulus's short and tragic life. Being one of those tall, dark and brooding sort of guys, he's not exactly a rare commodity in stories around here. This was the first time that I'd seen a story where he became a Death Eater for love rather than his parents' twisted sense of values, however.

This is probably horrible to admit, but when you described his relationship with the mystery female character the first thing that popped into my head was the whole discussion of "friendzone" that presaged the April Fool's Day prank. The second thing was the sham marriage that Rodolphus Lestrange shared with Bellatrix. Whichever one you want to hold it up against, I think the point is the same. This girl never really loved Regulus the way that he loved her. In the end, her only true love was for the Dark Lord and the power that he represented in her mind.

I know you said that this chapter hasn't been beta read, but I really didn't see very many things that need to be fixed. Here was the only typo I spotted:

Now here I was her standing before me, with the Dark Lord next to her. - here she was standing before me?

This was a neat idea and you did a good job of executing it. The only thing that struck me was that it isn't clear whether he's already taken the locket horcrux when he confronts his former love, and if so, whether she was part of the reason that he decided to betray his master. I thought that would have added something, but then again I'm a stickler for completeness. ;)

Author's Response: wow thanks for this wonderful review! Honestly, I love receiving reviews from you as you are a fantastic author and the only way to grow is to be critiqued by great authors. So thank you so much for taking the time to read and review this. I'm really glad that you liked the concept of the story and how different it was from what most people portray him joining Voldemort for. Thanks again for reading and reviewing!


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