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Review #1, by dreamer21 Now I Was Gone

26th April 2013:
Hi I'm here from the review tag.
Okay so wow.
I'm all heartbroken at this. I have a thing for Regulus and I want to write some story on him myself.
You did a great job with describing pain, I dont like sad endings :( But you made me sad which means your writing is effective so you get a balloon, *hands you a balloon*
I don't like this Slytherin Chica. Too heartless for my taste.
Regulus.
I'm just rambling now.
I like your writing style btw.
And one thing i'd suggest is that you separate the "blinks" it'll add a more profound effect. more dramatic. :D
Okay, so surely I'd be paying your stories a visit very soon. Till then Adiosss
Em

Author's Response: Thanks for the review! I'm glad that the emotions were able to come across for you and that you were able to feel his pain! Thanks for the balloon! I'm glad that you like my writing style! I do hope that you will stop by my stories again soon! Thank you so much for reading and reviewing!

~Slytherinchica08~


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Review #2, by marauder5 Now I Was Gone

25th April 2013:
Hi! I'm here for the review tag.

Oh my God. I don't even know where to begin. This story was so brilliant that it has left me speechless.

No, I'm not going to leave it at that, though. I have to let you know how much I love this story. First of all, Regulus! We got to know so little about him in the books, which gives you free hands to write him in fanfiction. And you have done it very well, my friend.

I loved the 'blink' thing. It was a perfect way of separating the flashbacks while still linking them together. I wonder who this woman is. Is she an OC or someone from the series? I'm guessing OC. Either way, you've portrayed their love perfectly, and it was so sad that he did all of it for her..

The last line is fantastic- 'I was eighteen and now I was gone.' So simple, and yet a very strong and beautiful sentence. I absolutely love it.

I hope that you're really proud of this story, because it really is brilliant! Thank you for writing it :)

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Review #3, by ChaosWednesday Now I Was Gone

22nd April 2013:
Hey, it's Whiskey from the forums :)

Ah, Regulus! A fascinating character that deserves more attention in the fandom, for sure! I like how you try to answer many of the questions about his motivations and his story by connecting them with his intense and somewhat childish love for a girl. The way you describe the events has a detached yet poignant tone to it makes them believable even to someone like me who just isnt into shipping :P

The *Blink* structure is a nice choice ;) It adds a fast and unsettling rythm to the story, which never really lets us leave the actual event of his approaching death. In fact, I would make the segments even shorter, or maybe have them get shorter as we near the end? Just a thought...

I really do love how you managed to evoke vivid images with such little description...I couldn't do that! Him pretending to be surprised to see her at the Quiddich game, the broken nose, her waiting for him after the mission and a few other moments really helped me picture both Regulus and your OC, despite the limited information. I also liked this sentence: "Blink. Death, blood, and screams, those were the rewards for a Death Eater." After all the black and white depictions of Death Eaters we are used to, one forgets to really picture their life and just accepts it as a fact in a desensitized way. But that sentence managed to remind me of their sadism - you refrained from telling the reader that Death eaters= bad directly like most others seem to do and instead explained why.

Great job, basically. And thanks for the swap :)

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Review #4, by PolyJuice_ Now I Was Gone

14th April 2013:
See now, I never know what to say when I get a story like yours. It's quite obviously well-written and I've not much criticism (and by that I mean none at all).

Instead I'll just rave about how fantastic this is.

The emotions just about killed me. "I was eighteen and now I was gone." The way you brought the whole blinking thing in was genius, it added so much; it felt so tragic.

Wow, this is a super unhelpful review, isn't it? *despair* It's not my fault I've nothing to say other than to squee..

Before I dig myself into a hole here I'll leave you.

I absolutely love LOVED it. One of the better stories I've read in a long time,
Liz

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Review #5, by fanfictionwriter Now I Was Gone

11th April 2013:
Dang, I thought it was a book. I didn't know that it was a one-shot! haha sorry :P

but how do you make your own banner? yours is really good. :)

Author's Response: Well I appreciate you stopping by and leaving a review. For information on banners and how to make them you can check out the dark arts a sister site of here. I made mine in gimp. Thanks for reading and reviewing.

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Review #6, by ShelbyBlack Now I Was Gone

10th April 2013:
ERICA!
I LOVE YOU I LOVE YOU I LOVE YOU AND I LOVE THIS! Ee, I'm so happy! You're so great, I'm glad I have you as a friend!

Day...week...month...YEAR made!

Love lots ShelbyBlack.
xxo

Author's Response: Aw sweetie I'm glad you enjoyed this! It was a fun piece to write and I'm glad I've got you as a friend too! Thanks so much for reading and reviewing.

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Review #7, by CambAngst Now I Was Gone

10th April 2013:
Hi, Erica!

That was a really interesting and very different take on Regulus's short and tragic life. Being one of those tall, dark and brooding sort of guys, he's not exactly a rare commodity in stories around here. This was the first time that I'd seen a story where he became a Death Eater for love rather than his parents' twisted sense of values, however.

This is probably horrible to admit, but when you described his relationship with the mystery female character the first thing that popped into my head was the whole discussion of "friendzone" that presaged the April Fool's Day prank. The second thing was the sham marriage that Rodolphus Lestrange shared with Bellatrix. Whichever one you want to hold it up against, I think the point is the same. This girl never really loved Regulus the way that he loved her. In the end, her only true love was for the Dark Lord and the power that he represented in her mind.

I know you said that this chapter hasn't been beta read, but I really didn't see very many things that need to be fixed. Here was the only typo I spotted:

Now here I was her standing before me, with the Dark Lord next to her. - here she was standing before me?

This was a neat idea and you did a good job of executing it. The only thing that struck me was that it isn't clear whether he's already taken the locket horcrux when he confronts his former love, and if so, whether she was part of the reason that he decided to betray his master. I thought that would have added something, but then again I'm a stickler for completeness. ;)

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