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Review #1, by nott theodore Cho

14th May 2013:
I'm back for some more of your lovely writing! This was a really touching portrayal of Cho and the effects that the war and Cedric's death especially had on her.

One thing that I thought worked really well in this story was your use of the present tense. I felt like I was really living through all the emotions with Cho and her grief came through strongly. In a strange way, I love the idea of her visiting Cedric's grave even when he's died and she's trying to move on with her life. Even though she's started dating a muggle, she can't help but remember the Hufflepuff hero as her first love and that is something that will stay with her through the rest of her life.

Another aspect I enjoyed was the way that Cho had 'survivor's guilt'. She feels like she wasn't as brave as the Gryffindors like Harry and Ginny who she mentions, but especially Cedric, and that makes it harder for her to deal with his death. Despite the fact that she was brave and fought in the Battle of Hogwarts against Voldemort and his (mostly) Slytherin Death Eaters, Cho still can't help feeling that she doesn't deserve to live.

The contrast that was evident in this chapter between the former Cho and the present Cho was very effective. Just the mention of her being the popular Ravenclaw seeker was enough to emphasise the differences to what she is like now. I loved this sentence: "her eyes once a deep shade of brown that once caught the attention of Harry Potter himself are now dull and flat, rarely showing any expression." I felt that it really illustrated her grief; it seems as if part of Cho died along with Cedric.

I just have a few bits of constructive criticism. I think that this sentence "She married Harry Potter a couple years back" sounds quite American, and maybe if Cho said 'a couple of years back' it would fit in better with the rest of her English speech. I also think that the sentence beginning "This is a journey she has made before..." sound a bit too long when you read it, and I'd be tempted to put a full stop after 'before' and continue with a new sentence.

Overall, a really effective and moving chapter, and I'll be back soon to read the next one!

Sian :)

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Review #2, by missclaire17 Cho

1st May 2013:
Wow. So, let me just say that you wrote Cho SO beautifully in this chapter about her.
In one of my college classes, we are talking about how Asian women are portrayed in literature, so obviously Cho was brought up. So many people (apparently) seemed to think that Cho fit right into the stereotype of an Asian woman lamenting over a white man and being so utterly helpless, etc etc.

Obviously, I had to have my input about how there was so much more to Cho than what people think of her, and I think you did an excellent job portraying how Cho became like she was in OotP and onwards.

The fact that she's still lamenting Cedric's death and the fact that it affected her that much because he was her boyfriend, her first love, her everything just makes it so much different than just some woman lamenting for a man. I love how you wrote that Cho thought it was unfair for Cedric to have to die when the others, like herself, who are less brave lived on. I think that really speaks to what Cho was and what Cho is now.

She wasn't inherently a brave person; she wasn't sorted into Gryffindor for a reason. In her "prime" youth days, she was surrounded by laughter and was a wonderful athlete. Then, all of a sudden, her boyfriend is dead, no one believes the truth about his death, she is thrown into the start of a War much bigger than herself, and somehow, no one seemed to remember that she was still so young when everything started.

Cho wasn't brave, and she isn't brave, and I mean that in the best way possible. Being brave isn't one of Cho's strengths and it really affected her, having to go through this War and having to see all of the horrors.

It makes so much sense for Cho to marry a Muggle because then, he would not have been present for all of the things that she had to go through, and I think she really needs that break, something that you portray really well in this chapter.

She can never forget Cedric, never forget what happened, so if she's with someone who was tied up in everything that happened, she can never try to move on from her life. You portrayed her pain so well that after reading this, it really clicked in my mind why J.K. Rowling wrote that Cho married a Muggle.

Honestly, I think you did a WONDERFUL job portraying Cho. (:

Author's Response: Thank you for the lovely review, I appreciate all of your thoughts. I found Cho to be a really interesting character and I think because of Harry's interaction with her we get a very subjective view of her in canon.

She obviously cared for Cedric very much because she became involved with him after the Yule Ball and they were still involved when he died. For a fifteen year old girl that sort of tragedy must be absolutely horrifying.

I agree with what you say about Cho marrying a muggle, it just seems to make sense really. But I think she will always have a place in her heart for Cedric, and that's what I wanted to convey here.

Thanks so much for your review!


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Review #3, by RavenclawSorceress Cho

8th April 2013:
The emotion in this is breathtaking.

"The boy who hadn't lived".

Perfect!

Author's Response: Thank you so much, I appreciate it and I'm delighted you liked it. Thanks for reading and reviewing!

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Review #4, by ScarletEye158 Cho

7th April 2013:
Hey there! This was a very beautifully written story and it had me nearly in tears by the end :')

I'm not a big fan of Cho, but you really made me feel for her in this chapter. I couldn't imagine losing the first boy I ever loved :( the poor girl went through so much and you put really good emotions into her character!

I liked how you didn't tell us exactly where cho was going right away. I was very curious to see what Cho was doing and I really liked the fact that you wrote this like we all knew what was going on and let us piece it all together :)

Her conversations with Cedric were so sad and beautiful! I know she felt silly talking out loud like that, but I think it probably did help her move on :)

I'm really interested to see where the rest of this short story collection is going to go and I'll definitely be on the look out for it!

-Amanda

Author's Response: Thank you for the beautiful review. I'm glad you think it was well written, and confession time: I actually started crying while I was writing it! I was all "Oh poor Cho! Nobody thinks about Cho!" *sob*

I have to say that the start of this chapter surprised me, I was actually really proud with how it worked out and I feel like it really does serve the purpose of drawing the reader in. Thank you for commenting on it!

I've never really written a monologue like that before, but it really seemed to fit in this situation and hopefully the 'conversation' built up slowly to the emotional parts.

I've got another six instalments planned, I'm about halfway through the next one so hopefully it will be up soon!

Thanks again for the beautiful review! :)


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Review #5, by lilylunalover Cho

7th April 2013:
This is really beautiful. You are an amazing writer, and I hope you add more chapters from others' points of view. I'm not sure if you were planning on doing that, but it would be nice.

Again, this is really beautiful, I think I cried a little when I read it.

Keep up the amazing work. And note that I very rarely give out perfect reviews.

kthxbi

Author's Response: Thank you so much! I'm so touched you liked it so much, I'm not sure where this story came from, but it seems like such a real thing, something Cho would actually do (we know from OoTP that she was quite an emotional person). I really enjoyed writing this too.

I am definitely planning to write more, there will be seven stories in total, each focussing on a different character at a different point in time during the 19 years before the Epilogue of Deathly Hallows. So keep an eye out for updates!


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