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Review #1, by Dirigible_Plums Counterstroke

2nd April 2017:

It's Plums again on jailbreaking duty. Forgive me if I'm not very profound with this review, I'm still half-asleep if I'm being honest.

Jesus, Melanie's in a tricky position, isn't she? She's clearly not the stereotypical Slytherin with a fierce hatred for anything Other, but it is precisely that quality that puts her in so much danger. The rest of the school's instinct is to write her off as yet another Slytherin and Slytherin's instinct is to watch her like a hawk for any traitorous tendencies. I felt nervous just reading this chapter.

I'm really glad she found a friend in Remus though. Partly because I love my Remy boy to DEATH and partly because I think he'll be good for her. And she'll be good for him too, no doubt. It's sad that they have to pretty much hide it though :(

The 'friendly' rivalry between the Gryffindors and Slytherins is hilarious on the Marauders' side albeit humiliating (Snape's massive head and feathers, for example) but it's something that can easily tip into something a lot more dangerous which is worrying. I'm glad that you included it though because it is indicative of the current outside world situation. Inside Hogwarts, it's all fun and games but outside? It's a different story entirely.

What spooked me most was Jasper. To think that he's only a teenager and he's already so cruel. It's disgusting. It's creepy. It's rather upsetting when you think about it. I can't imagine someone being that way.

Anyways, this was a lovely chapter. I'm off to make sure this is seen so Paula can get out when she wakes up.

Plums xo

Author's Response: I feel like this chapter makes a bit more sense when taken in context, but I guess that's the thing about CTF hahaha! Regardless, I appreciate the review and props to you for jumping right in the middle. And yeah, Melanie's not a stereotypical Slytherin. One of my goals with this fic was to upset the stereotype, because it always felt unfair to me that one house just gets labelled as the bad guys when it's ridiculous to think that 1/4 of the school was like, Death Eaters wannabes - even at a time like the first war, they can't all be like that.

Remus I've always figured was the most open-minded of the four Marauders and the most likely to be friendly to a Slytherin, whom James and Sirius would just dislike on principle and Peter would go along with it. But yeah, Remus is a good friend to have. :)

I'm glad you liked the 'friendly' (or at least trying) rivalry between them, as well as how it translates to the outside world. The difference between inside Hogwarts and outside where the war is ends up being a pretty big theme in the story, so it's cool that you caught onto that after just one chapter in the middle.

yeah, Jasper is someone to watch out for. As much as I try to dispel the stereotype of Slytherins, there were some (like Mulciber, etc as well) who give Slytherin the image it has, so there are a few bad ones, and yeah he's pretty upsetting for sure.

Thanks so much for reading and for the review!!

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Review #2, by PaulaTheProkaryote Counterstroke

2nd April 2017:
Hi kristin! Im here to make sure that Ravenclaw wins the Capture the Flag/read your lovely story,

I can't believe it took me so long to come back to this story! I love some good marauder era.

I don't know how friendly their *ahem* friendly competition with the slytherins truly is but we'll go with it. I'd love to see Snape like that. Oh god they kinda do keep stalking slytherins after graduation, don't they? That's hilarious.

Snape has no business being snotty to her considering his relationship with Lily. He of all people should understand, even if he hates them.

And Remus's rescue and the bit about needing his permission really drove Remus's character for me. He's less passive and submissive in your story and I like that characterization a lot.

Honestly those Slytherins are sometimes downright awful. I'm glad she was opportunistic enough to call over to Lily. Especially considering her wrath. I'd like to imagine a hufflepuff fighting and honestly I can't even. I love it though.

Hed taught me Muggle folk songs, and Id taught him some Hobgoblins songs. LOL. Honestly, I love everything you write but you always have these funny little lines that just get to me. Thats definitely one of them. Hobgoblin songs. Really?

YES to Sirius having this hint of caring and even more yes to this sweet little awkwardness at the end of this chapter. I'm in love, I tell you! Love!

Cant wait for the next chapter! :D


Author's Response: Paula!!! Hi, it's good to see you back on this story, I love your reviews!

Yeah... friendly competition was maybe a bit much to ask for at this early point in the story :P They're trying... I guess... sort of. :P

That's one of the interesting things about Snape, I think. Like, he has this whole tragic background and actually impressive loyalty (to Lily), but he's quite selfish and wouldn't recognize that same situation in other people. He had a lot in common with Harry if you think about it, in terms of being kicked around/bullied/neglected as a kid but Snape didn't see that at all, he was blinded by his hatred for James that overcame everything else. /tangent (omg Snape makes me go on such tangents, there are just so many layers to his character)

Yeah, some of the Slytherins are awful. Mulciber was the one who did something to Mary Macdonald that enraged Lily, so I always saw him as one of the worst... (also I thought this was about Mulciber but I just looked back the chapter and realized it wasn't even him XD but he is a friend of his, so there.) And yeah, Melanie saw an opportunity and took it, so at least Jasper got caught :P

Hufflepuff in the 1970s would totally have been like, a hippie commune. My people!

Awkward Sirius is precious. It's still way too early for him to be outwardly caring, but maybe he's starting to differentiate between 'the Slytherins' as not just a whole group he dislikes. I'm so glad you liked that part :D

Thank you so much!!! You're awesome. ♥

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Review #3, by PaulaTheProkaryote Tricks and Treats, But Mostly Tricks

29th August 2016:
Another excellent chapter!

I must say I'll never cross you because these pranks indicate to me that you have quite the mischievous mind. Dare I say you might be the fifth marauder?

This story is nice and chilly and make me feel like fall and so I'm crawling inside it and living in it. It's so cozy.

I completely loved the Remus interaction. Especially how suspicious she was. This was a nice twist from the typical "Oh, but Remus is Remus" response I read in a lot of marauder era fics. It's refreshing and makes me like her even more.

I also like that she starts offering up other Slytherins instead. Definitely not a Hufflepuff.

I love the surprise that the girls were behind it too. Never underestimate Slytherin girls. The prank wars were very fun.

The scarf bit was funny. I wonder if he'll wear it? I'd like to see his face when he explains to the boys how he got it from her. Or will he? He might just be smug about it.

The painting was very fun but the best part is the sheep. I can just imagine Filch going absolutely insane. I'm telling you, you're the humor queen.

Oh, and your Peeves characterization is spot on. I'm so addicted to this story.

Author's Response: Hi Paula!! ♡

bwahahaha we hufflepuffs are not to be underestimated :P The fifth marauder - what a glorious honorary title, I'm honored. If only I also lived in the 1970s and was fictional.

Yay for fall!

Remus may just be Remus, but after 5 years of pranks one can never be too careful! :P I'm glad you liked that bit, as well as her reaction.

Hahaha, yeah. If the Gryffindors are there to hex a Slytherin, well, she has no love for Mulciber.

I had so much fun writing the prank war, tbh. Glad you enjoyed the prank and especially the absurd transfiguration. I almost feel bad for Filch. Almost.

Ah, thank you! It's great to hear that you liked the portrayal of Peeves :D

Thanks once again for another fantastic review. ♥

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Review #4, by PaulaTheProkaryote Business as Usual

29th August 2016:
I do like how much the girls seem to complement each other. I think I like Charlotte most of all only for her cynicism and sarcasm. They are such a well crafted group of girls.

This line is in my top ten favorite lines of all time. I just can't stop laughing at it: "I looked at the alligator, which was currently attacking my slippers. 'We should get rid of that.' All of your stories have really funny lines like that. Humor seeps from you. I hate the words seeps so apologies for using it.

I hate people like Roger Simms. The good ole boy system is corrupt and just not worth it.

I can understand why some Slytherins wouldn't like Slughorn (although I do really like his character). If you weren't part of his select chosen few I bet it would feel awful. I mean it's basically him openly saying he doesn't see any potential in you.

Mandy and Melanie are a little bit Maraudery (IT'S A WORD) themselves. I like that.

This chapter did a really good job of setting up where the girls stand in the whole war thing and to me it foreshadows the idea of the girls fighting for what they believe in like it seems they will. I think you've seriously mastered the art of teenage girls!

Author's Response: You're back! *throws confetti* Thank you for stopping by again to read more of this!

I'm so glad you like the dynamic between the three girls. Ah, Charlotte. I love her. She was so much fun to write! Even if she can be a jerk :P

Hahaha, thank you! To be honest I'd never really thought about that line much. I guess humour happens even when I'm not necessarily trying to write humour :P I'm glad you enjoyed it! And I don't mind the word seeps, so it's all good. As long as you never have the occasion to use the word moist in a review - that one I can't stand :P

yeah, I think Slughorn would be a kind of divisive personality, for exactly the reasons you mentioned. If you were mediocre at Potions and didn't know any famous people, you could be kind of forgotten. I do think he's a really interesting character though as well.

They are, a little! :D And yeah, that is totally a word.

It's wonderful to hear that you think this chapter sets up the story effectively. And, well, I first began writing this story when I was a teenage girl, so that helped :P

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Review #5, by PaulaTheProkaryote Beginnings

28th August 2016:
Advice to myself on stories: Never start with the sorta sequel. I'm already heartbroken about Charlotte and I just met her.

I'm laughing so much at sweet baby little Amanda rambling on about evil Slytherins to two wanna-be Slytherins. I feel like I might be Amanda a little bit. At least she got the hint though.

Poor sweet Lily. I love the Lily/Petunia dynamic. I can't imagine how awful it would be if my sibling got mad at me for something like that. Especially since it can't be controlled.

I think a lot of this early awkwardness is natural and even normal in our current muggle society. I mean anytime you mention anything political it's hard to keep in mind that people didn't come from the same background as you so they may have different worldly views. Thankfully everyone seems to try to be sensitive to that in this story. I like these sweet babies.

Amanda's ability to lighten the mood will be handy in such dark times, I'm sure of it!

Based on the other story I think Slytherin for Amanda was VERY appropriate. She's all ambition. Aw, poor slytherins being bullied already. I hate preteen boys. Rude little creatures.

YES FOR EQUAL PAY, WHAT CENTURY IS THIS? WE'RE STILL FIGHTING THIS? Lily is the love of my life sooo. Of course James would sign.

I find it hard to believe that this was your first fanfic because it's so well developed and absolutely exciting. I can't wait to delve into it! The friendships are already so interesting and dynamic. Especially the girls with James and Sirius. Even though they prank the girls it seems to be more in good fun rather to be hateful toward the Slytherin girls. That's what I'm hoping anyway. I loved the first chapter!

Author's Response: Yep. So. There's that :P I'm sorry!

Mandy cracks me up sometimes. :P Not her brightest moment there.

I know, the Lily/Petunia dynamic makes me really sad as well! Especially how they used to be so close.

yes, that's so true! Everyone's coming from such different backgrounds, and I think it's an interesting dynamic with 11-year-olds, who've heard various things from their families that they might believe just because such-and-such family member said it (in the case of Melanie), but also at that age they haven't necessarily started thinking on their own yet and forming their own conclusions, so the way they encounter people from different backgrounds before they've firmly settled in their beliefs is kind of interesting - at this point they start to become influenced by a variety of different peers.

yay, I'm glad you agree with Mandy's sorting! Less yay about bullying. :(

FOR REAL WHY IS THIS STILL AN ISSUE. Feminist Lily to the rescue!

Yeah, my first fic - it's been pretty heavily edited since then in places, but in other places I think it shows its age. It has its flaws, but it will always have a place in my heart. Ah, I'm so glad to hear you like the relationship dynamics, particularly between the Slytherin girls and the Gryffindor boys. There is a good deal of pranking in the beginning! I like to think the Slytherin/Gryffindor rivalry was exactly that - more of a rivalry than enmity.

Thank you SO much for your review!! ♡

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Review #6, by ReeBee Beginnings

10th December 2015:

Anyway :P now that thats over! hello again kristin! Was this seriously your first fan fiction? like i can see the improvements from this to your writing now but like this is really good??? i thought first fanfics are usually super bad ;)

Anyway, I love how Melanie's sorted into Slytherin! And its super nice because if this evolves romantically, then the Marauders realise that not every Slytherin is evil. And AMANDA I ACTUALLY LOVE HER!!! And its kind of funny realising that she even tried bargaining with the Sorting Hat, because well Slytherins will go to any lengths to achieve their end and it was just super ironic!

And wow the Marauders are really sort of a douche which is sad because i SERIOUSLY love them but like!!! its kind of sad, and lily is seriously like well Lily on point characterisation as usual ;)

I love the start with the awkwardness of houses like of course that would happen, especially in that time where people had house preferences but people they meet wouldn't have the same one and its super refreshing to see! I honestly don't know why i haven't read that before!

Thanks again for the review swap! Love the beginning of this! And its completed so thats even better!! :D

-Curie xx

Author's Response: YEE I COULDN'T RESIST :D Yay for Feminist Lily! I'm so glad you liked that!

so yeah, this was my first fic, though I have edited it a lot since I first wrote it. A LOT. I could tell you some pretty funny stories about the first iteration of this chapter in 2007, for example I believe I'd originally written Amanda as a Parselmouth for no reason at all. It's come a long way XD

I really wanted to write a story with a Slytherin character, because the books portray Slytherin so negatively, and I was sure that 1/4 of the school couldn't just be evil. And at least before the war and Voldemort became such a big deal, I imagine the Gryffindor and Slytherin dynamic was more of rivalry than actual animosity, which was kind of interesting to explore. Aw, I'm glad you like Mandy! Haha, yes, she is much more of a Slytherin than she realizes! :P

The Marauders... well, they are jerks here, yeah. But at this point they don't have a whole lot to do with Slytherins because they have no reason to. They do get better :P

I'm so glad you like the house preferences - I think that, at eleven, you probably want to be in the house you've heard the most about - Harry being an example, and James, and Ron - it's an impressionable age. But of course you still want to be with your new friends! It's so complicated! :p

Thanks so much for the swap and this absolutely wonderful review! I'm so glad you stopped by this story :D

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Review #7, by MalfoyMannor The Yule Ball

1st November 2015:
I always love reading about the different ways that authors write about the Yule Ball, especially the drama their characters have at it :)

Author's Response: haha ;) True, the Yule Ball is a serious drama generator. No pun intended. (Well, pun kind of intended.) :P Hope you're enjoying the story so far! Thanks so much for reviewing.

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Review #8, by :) Unintended

18th October 2015:
Really great to read

Author's Response: Thank you!! Hope you enjoy the rest!

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Review #9, by Unicorn_Charm Truth and Truce

23rd September 2015:
Hey Kristin!! :)

Oh I'm so curious about that about that watch! I'm still dying to know if it was Snape, from that little tease in the last chapter! Bah!

Holy moly! Mel certainly had an awful accident during that match. I wish in real life we had all those tonic and potions to set bones right and fix cracked skulls and everything night haha.

Hmm. Now I'm wondering about this Luke. He seemed very keen on joining Mel to find out about that watch. Was it because he's a friend of Remus', or is there something more there..? Speaking of Remus. I think I'm totally shipping Mel and Remus right now. I know that's not how this story is intended to go, but Remus needs some love too. :p

I really enjoyed that scene with Dumbledore. I loved how a group of students just barge into his office and he doesn't even bat an eye haha. It was so totally Dumbledore. And the way that he heard them all out and encouraged them, letting them know that he liked the way they thought and that they had interesting theories, yet not giving much away at all. He was just written very, very well. It honestly felt like him. And I LOVED that Mel called Voldemort by his name in front of Dumbledore. That was fantastic!

Oh Peter... He seems so sweet and innocent here. It really makes you wonder how or why he ever turns to Voldemort and betray his friends. :( He really just seemed like he wanted them all to be friends. James and Sirius had great responses to the Slytherins being there. You can tell that they don't exactly dislike them, but there does seem to be just a bit of house prejudice there. I can't wait to see how their friendship develops.

Things are getting real at Hogwarts, aren't they? I'm super excited to continue on and see what happens from here. This was another fantastic chapter!! Love it! ♥

All the hugs,

Author's Response: Hi Meg!! Thank you so much for stopping by again, I feel so lucky to see more of your lovely reviews :)

Ahaha, I feel like I should warn you that the watch mystery doesn't get solved for quite a few more chapters. This section of the story was written in like 2008 when I hadn't figured out how to work multiple plot lines yet :P But it will be answered.

Thank goodness for magic potions and Skelegro and whatever else they have to make the danger of Quidditch not as prohibitive. Cracked your skull? No worries! aha if only.

Hmm.. only time will tell about Luke. :P Haha, feel free to ship away!

Ahh thank you so much! This was my first attempt at writing Dumbledore and I remember feeling so out of my depth as I wrote it, so that is really wonderful to hear that it felt well written and realistic, thank you! As for Mel calling Voldemort by his name - I think that at this point, it wasn't as big of a deal yet as it would be years later - in my eyes at least, the first war was when a lot of things changed, and this is the beginning of the war so some of the things are still in the process of changing.

Peter... gah. Yeah, poor kid. He kind of just wants to fit in and have friends - and here it's really endearing, although as we know, it all goes bad later - which in a way makes his innocence as a kid more bittersweet. And yeah, James and Sirius haha - their trust isn't earned easily. I really enjoyed writing how their friendship develops with the Slytherins.

Thank you so much for reading and reviewing, Meg! Also eee this is my 200th review on this story, so thanks for that! :D

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Review #10, by Unicorn_Charm Quidditch Through the Rages

22nd September 2015:
Hi dear!!

Oh my goodness! Love it!!

I really am enjoying your portrayal of these Slytherins in this era. It's nice to see that not all of them are blood-purity crazy Voldy supporters. I loved that bit with the free treacle tart for life haha. I'd vote for him to be the next Dark Lord, too! :p And I'm dying to know what Snape knows about that watch that hurt Remus. And by the way, again, you're lucky that he was alright!

I would never have the guts to volunteer to play at the last minute like that! Simms seems like a world class jerk. I'm assuming he meant that she was too weak because she is a girl. Grrr. I wish she did smash him with the beaters bat.

You write Quidditch SO well! It felt like something that you could read in canon. It was exciting, vivid and really funny. That commentary was great with the yelling "CHEATING!" the cursing and McGonagall trying to grab the megaphone from Mary. That whole bit had me literally laugh out loud. :D

Uh oh, so Mel was distracted by a pretty face haha. Well it happens. It even happened to Harry at one point. ;) Aww and she was playing so well, too! I hope they at least won and she'll have a chance to play again. It seemed like she really enjoyed herself up there. At least until she was knocked unconscious. It's amazing. They need permission slips to go to Hogsmeade, but not to play a game where people regularly have their skulls cracked open haha. Hopefully she be alright!

This was another solid chapter. I really do just love everything about this story and your writing in general. I always love when I have a chance to read something of yours. ♥

I'll move on to the following chapter tomorrow!

Tons of hugs,

Author's Response: Hi Meg! ♥ You know I love your reviews so much!!

The Slytherin POV during the first war ended up being such an interesting thing to write. All the snakes kind of get written off in the books as Voldemort sympathisers just because Harry's not on good terms with them, but based on the house as a whole it seemed to me that you get those few who stand out that get all the attention, and then a lot of people who try and stay away from it all.

Thanks, I'm so glad you liked the Quidditch scene! This was the first time I'd ever written Quidditch so I'm really glad it was engaging. Haha, they do tend to pick spirited people for the commentators! :P

I KNOW RIGHT. QUIDDITCH IS SO DANGEROUS. Like you could die from falling/being hit in the head/choking on Snitches. but you need a permission slip to go buy sweets from town. Ahaha, the wizarding world. :P (This exact point has actually featured in one of my parody fics because it's SO ABSURD. XD )

So glad to hear you are enjoying this! You are so kind - thanks for your lovely review ♥

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Review #11, by Unicorn_Charm Deception and Detention

6th September 2015:
Kristin!! I'm here for our swap!! :)

My heart!! You are so lucky that Remus is alright. Or I would have... I would have..? I would have cried! A lot! :'(

Ugh but those boys. They're terrible haha. Hiding under the cloak and letting the girls take the blame for the prank. Not very chivalrous of them, was it? :p But it wasn't anything different than what I would expect from them.

Yeah the last thing the Mel would have needed would be for Filch to find that letter from her brother. I can't imagine that going well at all.

Hahaha I love the boys busting the girls after they got their detention. Sirius flapping his arms all about like Mel trying to find them under the cloak. I chuckled at that. :)

Well the detention didn't seem too bad at first. Music always makes cleaning a little more bearable, I think. At least they had the wireless with them. And by the way, I love the music they were listening to. Classic rock is amazing. :)

Aww Remus is the sweetest thing ever! I love that he came to apologize for what happened and actually joined them in detention. I definitely could not see James or Sirius ever doing anything like that. But Remus is the sweet one, they're absolutely not haha. But then you had me panic when he went out like that! It sounded like he was petrified! For a moment I thought that maybe it was another prank and they sent Remus in to kind of have the girls let their guards down, but then when Poppy and Dumbledore looked that concerned I knew it wasn't.

I'm nervous now! Who put that there? Why? Who was it actually meant for? I'm dying to know!! Bah!

It has been far too long since we've had a swap. I missed going them with you! *hug* Whenever you're up for another one just let me know! Even if you want to PM me sometime or something, I'd be cool with that. :)

I love this story! ♥ Thanks for the swap love!!

xoxo Meg

Author's Response: Hi! ♥

I know, poor Remus :( Probably the last time that he tries to help the Slytherins, haha.

Well, I think chivalry only extends to a point. There's no need for them to be chivalrous to a bunch of Slytherins they don't know that well - plus this is like an additional prank for them!

Music totally makes any chore feel 100x more fun. And yeah! There are so many music references in this fic haha just because this fic is set in 70s, the time period of such good music! (PS - still working on building that time machine so we can go to Woodstock together)

Remus is so sweet! He is definitely the only one who'd be thoughtful enough to do something like that. And yeah - everything's not all fun and games! Scary things happening! Ahh!

Thanks for the swap! I really appreciate your reviews!! ♡

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Review #12, by RaeLane II. In the End

10th August 2015:
It was a great story. I love the way you ended it :)

Author's Response: Thank you so much! I'm so glad to hear you liked it, and thanks for reading! :)

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Review #13, by Astoria_G_M II. In the End

3rd August 2015:
Wow. What a great story. I have been so invested in it since the beginning! Your characters were so relatable and the moment when Sirius and Melanie first kissed I melted! You're a fantastic writer and I'm just sad it's all over now! The way you portrayed Sirius was perfect! Please write another one! Also when Sirius dies and finds Melanie past the veil do they resume where they left off all those years ago? Definitely one of the best fan fics I've read!

Author's Response: Hi! Wow, thank you so much!! This review made my day - it was the most wonderful surprise, and now after reading it I have a permanent smile stuck on my face. Thank you, it means so much to me to hear that you found the characters relatable and that you liked the story and felt attached to it. As for what happens after the ending, I did intentionally leave it a bit open ended, so it's up to interpretation ;) I can't thank you enough for this review and your kind compliments about my writing - I appreciate it so much. ♥ ♥ Thank you for reading!!

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Review #14, by TheFawkesRebirth II. In the End

19th March 2015:
Wow I'm blown away. I came to care so much for your characters - I read the last few chapters before bed, and by the time I was finished I was crying and unable to sleep. Your story inspired me to finally write the story that has been in my head for a few years now. So thanks.

Author's Response: Oh my goodness, wow - this review has left me completely speechless! Ahh, thank you so, so much! I'm incredibly flattered and it means so much to me that you liked the story and characters, and that it inspired you to write your own story - that's about the greatest compliment an author can receive. You totally made my day. I'm thrilled that you enjoyed reading the story - thanks for your amazing review!! ♥

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Review #15, by Unicorn_Charm A Message and a Mess

22nd January 2015:
Hey Kristin!

Have I told you how much I love this story? No? Well shame on me. I LOVE this story! :p

I don't know why, but I found that crazy owl to be really, really funny. That must have been a wonderful way to wake up, with an owl going insane because it couldn't deliver it's letter to the person it was supposed to. :D But then the contents of the letter were very sobering. I can't imagine how difficult that would be to know that your father - and now possibly your brother - are on the wrong side of the growing war. I do admire the fact that she will say "Voldemort" and finds "You-Know-Who" and "The Dark Lord" to be a little ridiculous. It's a little unsettling knowing that her brother has a pretty important job at the Ministry and may possibly be becoming a Death Eater, or at the very least, sympathetic to Voldemort's ideals. Mandy's idea of writing back and mentioning all of the muggle-born friends she had was pretty amusing. She's such a great friend, I really enjoy her. :)

I don't know how you keep coming up with these pranks, but you're brilliant! Turning the entire Great Hall basically into a jungle?! What will you think of next? I loved her thoughts on why James may have had lilies all across the Gryffindor table. I can't see Lily being amused or charmed by that at all haha. And Mel winding up on the floor again! The poor thing!

Ahh! We've got to see a little bit of cheekiness coming from Sirius! There is nothing I love more than cheeky Sirius. ♥ You want to slap him, but you can't help but to like him all at the same time!

Loved it! Love, love loved it! Thank you for doing the swap with me and I can't wait to read on!! ♥

xoxo Meg

Author's Response: Hi Meg!

Hehe. I think you've mentioned it on occasion ;) Siriusly though, thank you :D

That owl was strongly influenced by Pigwidgeon if I remember correctly. Inept owls make me laugh. Yeah, definitely some sobering things in that letter - she really doesn't know what to believe anymore. As for the Voldemort vs You-Know-Who thing, I figured that at this point the extreme fear of the name Voldemort wouldn't be as ingrained as it came to be later, so it's not as much of a fear thing as it will become within a few months/years. Haha, I'm so glad you like Mandy! She's a lot of fun to write.

Ehehe. Teachers would have hated me at Hogwarts. And eh, no, I don't think Lily would be particularly amused. :P

Glad you liked that ;) That side of him does show more as they get to know each other better, so at least you have that to look forward to. :P

I'm absolutely loving hearing your thoughts on this story! Thank you so much for the review ♥

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Review #16, by Unicorn_Charm Counterstroke

17th January 2015:
Hey there!

Wow, so this chapter became a little dark! But, during this time period, you can't expect everything to be all pranks, laughter and sunshine unfortunately.

Yeah, I can absolutely and easily picture James and Sirius doing that to Snape, in the beginning of the chapter. I love how Remus and Mel just kind of watched it happening, too. I mean, she did kind of speak up about it, but it seems like mostly everyone knows not to get in their way when they're behaving that way. Probably better off haha.

I am enjoying the friendship that is developing between her and Remus. It's nice to see, especially with the first war looming ahead, a little bit of inter-house friendship. It's so easy to take the "All Slytherins are evil and Death Eaters" approach during the Marauders Era and I love that you're not doing that. It makes for a unique and enjoyable read.

That Jasper seems like an absolute creep! Your stereotypical Slytherin (I know. After I just finished saying how I like that you're not doing that, but it's still the reality of that era, too). That spell that he put on her sounded horrible and exceptionally painful. Good thing Lily and Sirius happened to walk by!

Your description of the 'Puffs made them sound like a bunch of hippies! And I mean that as a total compliment! It made me want to travel back to that time and be sorted into that house! If love to sit around, play guitar and sing songs in the common room!

So maybe Sirius' attitude is changing, regarding Mel, just a bit? Hopefully he lets his brother and his friends have it. The slimy jerks!

Another awesome chapter!! I adore this story! :D Thanks for doing the swap!! ♥

xoxo Meg

Author's Response: Yeah. Although a significant portion of this fic is silliness and serious/Sirius puns, it does get into some heavier stuff because of the time period and all that comes with it in the wizarding world.

I'm so glad you like the friendship between Melanie and Remus! And yeah, Melanie's not really sure whose side she is on at the moment, so she doesn't stand up for anyone. :-/ But yes inter-house friendship! Slytherins too often get painted as the house where all the mean, future Death Eater people are, particularly during the wars, and while there are some unpleasant Slytherins, there were good ones too and friendship is powerful!

Hahaha! Yeah, I mean, given the (almost nonexistent) qualifications for being sorted into Hufflepuff, the house that takes everyone, it seems like the one that would be most about equality and full of activists and civil rights and nice people and especially since this is the 70s yeah, basically just a lot of hippies. I love my house, yo. :D

Sirius... well, I don't know that his attitude is changing yet, but at least he's not openly being a jerk. :p

Thank you so much ♥

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Review #17, by Unicorn_Charm Tricks and Treats, But Mostly Tricks

14th January 2015:
Hey Kristin! Finally here for our swap! Basement is finally dry haha.

So I love your characters. They are brilliantly diabolical. Almost like female Marauders in a way. That first prank, with the students sticking to the wall was hilarious. I bet the boys wished they could have thought of something that brilliant! :) And it's great that Filch doesn't even suspect them and assumes it's James, Sirius, Peter and Lupin. Sneaky Slytherin girls. ;)

That bit with Lupin in the Three Brooksticks was perfect. I could absolutely see Sirius putting him up to something like that and it was really cool of Mel to go along with it and spend the day with him. I loved her questioning the fact that Dumbledore made him a prefect, when he so obviously causes mischief with his friends. And the admiration that he had for her, when she confessed it was her and her friends who pulled those pranks, was priceless. I could actually picture the look on his face and was cracking up. :)

I cannot wait to see this prank war that is going to happen. So far the pranks have been fantastic and I cannot wait to see what else these girls (and the boys for that matter) have up their sleeves. Although, I do almost (key word, almost) feel bad for Filch. He's going to go nuts! :D

Ahh! You have Peeves in this!! And you wrote him so, so, so well!! :D I'm uber excited to see him in this story and hope that we see more of him!

Oh my goodness! That whole prank at the end was fantastic! I loved the paintings on the wall spitting and spewing paint on the passing students. But the best part of it, was Filch's cat transfigured into a grey sheep. Again, you had me laughing out loud with that one!

This was such a great chapter! I am really, really liking this story and I cannot wait to see what else happens. It is all just fantastically and brilliantly written. I love it! Thanks again for doing the swap! I'll be back to read more and review again soon! ♥

xoxo Meg

Author's Response: Hi Meg! So glad to hear your basement is fixed :D

I am so thrilled you like the characters! Haha, kind of like female Marauders but not as good :p They're definitely sneaky though. I'm glad you liked that prank - the pranks were so fun to write in this :D

I figured Remus, as probably the friendliest of the Marauders, would be most likely to branch out to an unlikely friend. Despite their distrust of one another, they're realising they might have a lot in common! :p

Poor Filch, yeah. It's gonna be a mess :p

Ahaha, thank you, I'm so glad you liked that prank with the painted wall! :D And yay, so glad to hear that you like the story and the writing. Thanks so much for the swap and your lovely review!! ♥

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Review #18, by ExpectoPatronum1229 Holmes for the Holidays

27th December 2014:
Oh gosh... Full moon? The suspense is killing me :) Love this story so far, it's great!

Author's Response: Cliff hanger! :P I'm so glad you like the story so far, and thank you so much for reviewing!!

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Review #19, by Unicorn_Charm Business as Usual

21st December 2014:
Hi there! Here for our swap! :)

I'm already in love with this story. Two chapters in, and I'm smitten. ♥ Melanie is such a wonderful character. I truly adore her. She and Mandy are just such typical teens; talking about boys and begrudgingly doing their homework. I laughed out loud when then were attempting their homework and turned the desk into an alligator! And I can't believe they overheard the password for Gryffindor! That's is beyond awesome!

So this little prank war they've started is highly amusing. I loved how the first thing Mandy did was turn Sirius' girlfriend's hair green haha. :D They definitely stepped it up a notch by hanging all the Slytherin banners and levitating the boys' beds. I bet their reactions were priceless! But of course the Marauders one upped them with turning the tables into hay, and the cow and everything.

I have a feeling that Mel and Mandy weren't chosen for the team because they're girls, more than any other reason. It seemed like the Slytherin team - in canon - was the only one that was mainly boys. But with how behind Mel is on her homework already, maybe it's better than she didn't make the team. ;)

I loved the fact that she stuck up for that little Gryffindor boy! Even though she didn't intend to, the fact that she did was just wonderful. I know that I was just as impressed as the boys all were. What she did to Mulciber the previous year was pretty funny. I liked how Peter brought that, that made me chuckle. I also got a kick out of the whole boa constrictor/lion around her neck comments that were made. Your dialogue is always just so natural and really well done. :D

Oh there is really nothing worse than when your friends try to set you up with someone. It almost never goes well. I totally feel for her here. I really can't wait to see how that all plays out.

Another awesome chapter! I love Mel and Mandy a lot! I am really excited to continue with the story and see where it all goes. Thanks so much for doing the swap!! ♥

xoxo Meg

Author's Response: Ahhh! Thank you so much! I am so thrilled that you love this story and the characters - seriously (Siriusly), that really makes my day. I'm glad they came across as average, that's really what this chapter was aiming to show. And yeah, Mel's Transfiguration skills could use some work :p

I had way too much fun writing the prank war. I mean, it's pretty well known that Slytherins and Gryffindors are rivals, but I wanted to make it fun, so there's a lot of this sort of thing in the story :D And of course the Marauders one-upped them. They aren't the school's most infamous troublemakers for nothing. ;)

Hehe. Well, Mandy didn't get picked for the team because she's bad at Quidditch and chose instead to flirt with that guy, but Melanie is decent at it. But yeah, there may have been some favouritism on the part of the Captain. As you mention, in terms of timing it's probably best that she's not on the team though!

Mel isn't brave enough to stick her nose out and stand up for someone ordinarily, but she has a good heart, so she made the best of a bad situation. I enjoyed writing Peter in this story actually - despite the miserable rat he became later, he was a good friend at the time. Ah, thank you so much, I'm really glad you like the dialogue and that it feels natural, that's so wonderful to hear!

Mandy is a little ridiculous sometimes :P Ahh, I am so glad you're enjoying the story! Thank you so much for your review! ♥

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Review #20, by Unicorn_Charm Beginnings

15th December 2014:
Hi there!! :)

I've been meaning to read this for a while now actually. It's been on my reading list. I'm really glad I started it finally.

Your writing is honestly just fantastic. It has a way of drawing the reader in immediately. It's just effortless the way that it flows.

I really enjoyed the introduction to the main characters. Melanie seems like a decent kid, not what I would come to expect from a Slytherin. Especially a Slytherin in the Marauders Era. Even though she did think the term Mudblood quite liberally in the beginning, she honestly doesn't seem to have any prejudice against Muggle-Borns. I really got a kick out of Amanda when she first came in. I laughed out loud when Melanie was thinking that she was going to die if Amanda didn't stop talking. I can totally relate to that. My best friend is very Amanda-ish and never shuts up. Sometimes it's a bit much haha. Charlotte seems a little more Slytherin-ish to me. She has that aloof aura about her. I thought it was really cute when Lily and Severus joined them and how Severus became all excited hoping they would all be in Slytherin together.

I loved the sorting. It was pretty interesting to see how she was considered for either house, but got to choose Slytherin, but it didn't work for Amanda. I'm sure Amanda begged the hat to put her in Gryffindor, but obviously it did not. Melanie was really sweet with how she comforted her about being in that house. She's right, just because they're Slytherins, it doesn't automatically make them future Death Eaters. I loved how you made put that in there.

One little detailed that I really, really loved was how, when we flash forwarded 5 years, she thought of Amanda as Mandy now. Just that little of a name change shows how close the girls had become in that time. That was a really clever way of showing that. It was nice to see that James and Sirius were capable of being somewhat decent to them, too. Even if they are in their rival house. It also seems that Lily is still friendly with the first friends she made, which is pretty cool. I expect her being so close to Severus, up until the previous semester, would have kept her in contact with them.

I really loved how Melanie had developed within those 5 years. She's a little snarky now, isn't she? My kind of girl haha.

I absolutely loved this first chapter and am thrilled that I've finally got around to reading this. I can't wait to read the rest and see how the story developed. I'm excited to read this one!

Thanks for doing the swap! I'm up for one any time! ♥

xoxo Meg

Author's Response: Ahhh! I am both really excited and kind of nervous to see you reading this fic, haha! It was my first fic and it shows, but it is also one of the closest to my heart. So I'm kind of flailing excitedly after you said that you like it! :P

Gah, thank you so much, that is the sweetest compliment that you like my writing! ♥

I've gotten several comments before stating that Melanie doesn't seem to fit the Slytherin mold, but that was one of my goals in writing her, I think. I don't believe in molds. Even though I'm the most Hufflepuffy Hufflepuff ever, I do have some Slytherin qualities, and these characters are meant to be an example of how not all Slytherins during the war were Death Eater wannabes - many of them were decent people. Well, some were. :p She definitely has 'typical' Slytherin traits though which (hopefully) will be clear! ;) I'm really glad you like Mandy and that she reminds you of your own friend, that's great :D

I'm glad you liked the Sorting too! How I see it, Amanda was trying to make all sorts of deals with the hat and manipulating it to put her in Gryffindor. And the hat thought that was very Slytherin of her. :P

I think Snape was a special case in terms of the rivalry. Certainly Gryffindors and Slytherins are rivals, but I wanted to project it as a mostly good-natured rivalry.

I am SO glad you loved this chapter, and I'm thrilled you're reading this too! You're awesome and thanks for the swap! :D

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Review #21, by Aussie hp lover II. In the End

14th December 2014:
Omg I am actually crying! This was possibly the best fan fic I have ever read! Although necessary, I hated how things turned out... WHY MUST THEY ALL DIE?? But apart from that this story had no flaws. You are an amazing writer and I would love more than anything else to read more of your work, possibly an alternate ending where she doesn't marry Luke, but marries sirius instead and they have beautiful babies. I should probably stop now before things get more weird so I will finish with saying that this story was perfect and that you should never stop writing! xxx

Author's Response: Wow, thank you SO much, this is such an incredible review! Very sorry about the tears *hands over tissue* but I am so flattered that the story connected with you that much. (Gah, I still think it's so unfair that JKR killed off Sirius in OotP!) Thank you for your kind words - I appreciate your review so much! ♥

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Review #22, by Rumpelstiltskin Discoveries

11th December 2014:
*Confetti* My first review since having the baby! It has been way too long.

I don't know if I've mentioned it before -- and, if not, I'm a very bad Rumpel -- the flow of your sentences are awesome (you use punctuation within the sentences extremely well). :D

Anyway, on to the madness.

D'aw.. Mandy asked Remus out! That's just adorable! ♥ Mel will get the courage to ask Sirius out eventually. Maybe. Hopefully. *Cough* Sirius and his moodiness -- so much to love ;).

Uhoh, Vanessa with a love potion...that can't be good. Unless she uses it on Filch (then, THAT is hilarious)! Bahaha. Of course, then we find out her mom died, which was a perfect transition back into the reality that their facing, with Voldemort and whathaveyou. I do love that you're leaving that shadow hanging over everyone's heads while they continue -- most of the time -- to act like normal teenagers (as they would do, because they ARE teenagers).

Carol's trying way too hard (which is a good thing, because the primary objective is not to have Carol dating Sirius anyway). Oh goodness. Must. Not. Make. Eye-contact. Don't do it ;).

Fleeing the country seems to be a suitable choice in the wake of the war. I have the feeling that she will not be doing that, however, but who knows. Maybe this ends with Mel living happily ever after in Iceland with a pack of krups in a fortress made out of rock. Or not, who knows.

An Obliviator...that actually sounds like a fun job.

Whoo! James Potter's impressive Patronus-casting skills to the rescue! To be fair to Mel, casting a Patronus charms seems difficult enough, never mind casting it when there's a creature designed to suck the happiness out of its surroundings in front of you.

Mystery parcel...I WANT TO KNOW WHAT'S IN IT! :( Heheh, poor Peter, continuously left out of things. Well, we can't feel too bad for him, can we? Nope. :D And poor Octavius as well. Sirius is just jealous, kind of like how Mel is jealous. Maybe they just need a shove in the right direction ;p.

Oh yes, and then Remus with the werewolf complex. :( it must be frustrating to feel as if he can't get close to anyone, and it must be frustrating for Mandy as well, not being able to know why.

Heheheh, of course Lily doesn't like the lack of attention ;). I think the girls are right, I don't think she'll be able to resist going out with him for much longer ^.^.

Owl steeds! :D That made my day. ...and then the winterized corridor prank just made it even better.

Bahaha, Sirius almost let it slip in Potions, didn't he? Those two crack me up, not to mention the frustration as being the reader, and knowing that they both do have some sort of feelings for each other. It's all about timing though...and, it is quite funny watching them make fools out of themselves ;). Oh, I don't think he'd give Mel tuba feet :D.

Aaand an exciting game of Quiddich to end a lovely chapter! Thanks for some great reading upon returning to HPFF :D. Hopefully I'll be able to make an appearance every now and then!


Author's Response: omg, congratulations!!! ♥

Ooh, thank you! I am a huge fan of punctuation. Sometimes I think I go way overboard on commas and semicolons because I love them, so I am glad to hear they are reasonable ;D

Yep... Mandy is a go-getter, and there's no way that Remus was going to put himself out there on his own. Sigh. Fingers crossed for Mel! ;)

Bahaha that would be hilarious. And disturbing. Yeah, I wanted to show some sort of background to Vanessa because there'd been nothing particularly sympathetic about her so far - but she does have a reason for being how she is. :-/ And I'm really glad that feeling came across, of the shadow hanging over the heads of otherwise normal teenagers.

I think that most teenagers wouldn't be all "I'm so awesome I'm going to join in this dangerous fight against Voldemort!" Besides, as Mel is not necessarily brave and has a tendency to avoid her problems, escaping would be exactly her sort of thing. Ooh, I wish I'd gone the Iceland and krups route, that sounds like the best outcome. ;)

Harry was good at the Patronus charm, but it's definitely supposed to be a really difficult one, so I figured not everyone can do it under pressure!

Well, I think that Sirius kind of underestimated Peter, so he just didn't think before he said that (as he's not particularly tactful either, is he..)

Remus... ugh. Love him, but he can be so frustrating!

Oh Lily... it's too obvious to EVERYONE around her that she likes James, but... haha. I think you can understand Lily a lot better than she can understand herself at the moment! ;)

UGH, I know. I think this chapter is them at their most frustratingly obtuse, haha!

So glad to see you back, your reviews always put the hugest smile on my face. There are exciting things coming up in the next few chapters so I'm excited to see what you think ;) Thanks so much for your review!! ♥ And congratulations once again :D

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Review #23, by Felpata Lupin II. In the End

17th October 2014:
Hi again, Kristin!
I just finished reading this and, well... I really don't know what to say!
All the story was amazing, just as usual. And this ending... I'm not sure if I'm supposed to cry or smile... I mean, I always knew where this was heading (it's always a bit cruel in this kind of stories to grow so affectionate to all the characters and then be reminded in the end of their cruel fates... I didn't really expect Melanie to die that way, though... That was so sad...) but I'm somehow glad that they're going to have a bit of the happiness they deserved at least in the afterlife, if this even makes sense...
Anyway, lovely work, just as always!

Author's Response: Hi Chiara!
Wow, thanks! This was actually the first story I ever wrote - although it's not as well written as some of my more recent work, this story will always be close to my heart. It means a lot to me that you liked it that much and felt attached to the characters! :)

That's exactly what I was going for with the ending. While I wish they could have had a happily ever after, there wasn't really a way to end it happily and still canon... and besides, I just love bittersweet endings ;)

Thank you so much for your review!! ♥

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Review #24, by hermionehero I. Epilogue: Sixteen years later

5th October 2014:
Loved your story! What a treat to read! You are a good writer. Hope you write more!

Author's Response: Thank you so much! I'm so thrilled you enjoyed the story :)

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Review #25, by Rumpelstiltskin Carry That Weight

18th September 2014:

Wow, Mel's all about asking Sirius questions that he doesn't exactly want to answer: first about Remus, then the nicknames, and then Regulus -- she's on a role! At least Sirius seems to be opening up to her a little bit, what with actually having a conversation with her about his brother. (Also, I'm sure that Sirius' claw hand looks absolutely fabulous, because he's Sirius :p .)

The world is not split into good people and Death Eaters, Sirius, -- That's actually a very powerful line, in my opinion. Not only does being a Death Eater seem to define a person's good or evil status, especially in people like Sirius' opinion, but there are also people who aren't becoming Death Eaters who aren't necessarily good people. Mel's ability to see this, influenced slightly by Nathan's involvement, is a strong show of her characterization as it conflicts Sirius'. Though, there is that strong bond of similarity between them, as both of their brothers are either Death Eaters or soon-to-be Death Eaters, so that element alone provides an essential commonality. Which, of course, means, queue awkward hand-holding meant to be a gesture of friendship ^.^ hahahah. Teenage love.

Speaking of, I love James and Lily's interaction here. That tentative dancing that Lily's doing around her feelings, while showing the desire to speak to James and be around him is absolutely fantastic. Her denial of actual feelings towards James I think is not only for everybody else's benefit, but for her own, like she's trying to convince herself that she really doesn't show an interest. However, it's almost as if she's partially admitted to herself that she's developing feelings for him, already. ♥

Yes, I would think that learning how to dissuade Peeves from his pestering would result in life at Hogwarts being just a tad more tolerable. ^.^

Gah, wow Mel...*cough* thinking before she speaks isn't exactly her strength, is it? Baha, it made ME laugh, though, even if it was a little bit horrifying for her. I do love her rationale when she decided that she was never going anywhere near Sirius ever again -_-...poor Mel. I can imagine that she's quite embarrassed, even though her cover was oh-so-suave.

Of course, it didn't help that Vanessa assisted in the revision and spreading of the tale. I think that, in her position, I would have just locked myself in a cupboard and refused to come out for the remainder of the year...or until someone did something so embarrassing that everybody forgot about the incident. Yeah...

What was he going to tell her?! Stupid, giggling girl *hmph*. I'd like to hex her, myself, to be quite honest. Luckily, Sirius took the events of the previous day lightly, overlooked the rumors, and was able to maintain his friendship with Mel. You've really nailed this charismatic aspect to him that I really just love about him, and would expect him to be like.

You know, theres nothing going on with me and Carol, he said cautiously. Were just friends. -- His justification proves, to the readers, that Sirius might have actual feeling for Mel. Of course, with both of them being teenagers and dancing around the subject like teenagers do, it leaves Mel feeling worn out because these kids refuse to process their feelings O.o! So, yeah, the main topic of this review is teenage love (don't mind me). Obviously, they're just both very confused by their feelings, and don't know how to handle those feelings, so they just play this back-and-forth game. It fits perfectly into the story, building up tension to the point where you want to scream 'Just kiss, already!' -- which is an absolutely fantastic thing.

I'm rambling.

Well, isn't Mandy the romantic ;). Though, Althea doesn't seem to mind the soup incident, and that she does, in fact, have a crush on Hector. ♥

I think one's own personal ghost would be a pretty neat thing to have.

Oh boy, Death Eaters inside the castle...that's going to start a panic. Well, yes, actually that's exactly what happened. Parents (as well as students) will be wondering if Hogwarts is a safe enough place to be.

Ouch, Althea, that was pretty harsh. Though, Slytherin House DOES seem to be under fairly constant speculation...poor Slytherins ;). The war is happening...and it just seems to be escalating! Things are really going to hit the fan when they're OUTSIDE Hogwarts...

:D Great chapter!


Author's Response: Rumpel! You're such an amazing reviewer, like where do I even start with this review other than "bkjasjhkd"

That conversation was one of my favourite parts to write about this chapter as they finally TALKED about important stuff and connected on a deeper level. I really like the connections you drew here between Melanie and Sirius - although they do have the commonality of having brothers involved in the other side, they have very different perspectives of it. I do like that line in particular - Sirius said something to that effect in OotP when talking to Harry (and in my mind at least, he was recalling this conversation with Mel :P)

You hit the nail on the head with what I was trying to convey with Lily, and I'm so thrilled it came across that way. That's the way I imagine it too - she was trying to deny it to herself for a while, but her shell is cracking by this point!

Well, Melanie does usually say what's on her mind, which in this case is unfortunate when things like that are on her mind. Maybe it would have been easier if Sirius actually picked up on it, too. :P

Aw, thanks! That really means a lot to me that you think I've done the characterization well with Sirius.

Hmm.. does he actually have feelings for her? Who knows, because as you said - like teenagers do, they just get awkward about it. Ughhh sometimes I just wanted to yell at all the characters :p I'm glad you like that dynamic and all the building tension though!

Mandy is too much of a romantic! :P Sometimes when writing her lines I was just doing these huge eyerolls at how absurd she is.

Panic indeed. That would be super scary.

That was definitely harsh from Althea - she's normally quite a nice person but as you can imagine she's under a lot of stress, and that does sometimes crack even the nicest people. Poor Slytherins indeed. The war must have been a bad time to be a snake.

Thanks so much for your amazing and thoughtful review!! ♥

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