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Review #1, by ginnys twin Chapter One

26th May 2013:
Aww, that's so sweet!

I like how so far this has started off sweet and slow, yet steady. I like the way you wrote Sev, as he is perfectly in character. I would suggest adding a bit mor of a problem, but I'm sure that's coming soon. I would also suggest going through and re reading. I know that capitals and grammar slow everything down, and cutting the grammar out gets chapters in the que faster, but trust me, the extra minute is worth it. I liked how you gave us a bit of how Lily's life is, and I also thought that your description of Sev was great, but don't forget to add his greasy hair! :) Can't wait for the next chapter!


Author's Response: Hiya Krissy,
Thank you so much for the review! I know there are still a few tweaks that need to be made but I can assure you that the next chapter will have better grammar, I hadn't realized how bad it was before:3
This review really has made me want to continue this story and the next chapter should (fingers crossed) be up by Monday:)
Again thank you for taking the time to help me improve:)

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