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Review #1, by soufflegirl99 Decisions

15th August 2013:
This chapter was just as awesome as the first! I love the way the family motto was in latin, and I love the family motto! (Not for my family of course, but it's rather fitting for theirs!) This story has such an interesting view on the high society of witches, that I've never seen done before! Bellatrix's dad sounds really scary, and not very loving, and very formal and selfish. I can see why Narcissa and Bella turned out like they did! The latin bit in the final bit was also a very creative touch, and added to the kind of pride and blood theme that's going on through out the story.

It's an awesome twist that Bella married Rudolphus just so she could become a death eater. That sounds just like the sort of thing she'd do! The last paragraph was quite frightening though, and I wonder what sort of strings Bellatrix is going to pull. I feel so sorry for Rudolphus -- mind you, if he's the kind of person that can fall in love with her at the start, he must be not really nice himself. The way you put her looking back at her memories at the wedding really showed how unfocused she was on the actual romance, and how dedicated already she was to Voldemort. It was also really interesting to see Narcissa and Lucius in Bella's eyes, and she has the foresight of how Lucius could be weak and betraying right from when she first sees him. The word "raw power" seemed to really apply to Voldemort and Bellatrix, and sets the tone for the kind of darkness they create. The way they have this kind of connection through hate and dark magic is really well described, and it's going to be fascinating to see where it leads them later on. I'm also kind of looking forward to seeing how Bellatrix goes so insane, and also how she got caught for Azkaban.

Another brilliant chapter, with some incredible advancement on Rudolphus and Bella's behalf on their relationship, and again, awesome detail!

-Sophie :D

Author's Response: Hello! :)

The way I see it, the wizarding society is very... medieval, so to say. Everybody has a place, everybody plays a part. More so in high society, where everything is just a power play. If we look at the evidence in the books, Narcissa was very high up in Voldemort's inner circle, yet she never took the mark. Her son was forced to take it as punishment for Lucius' mistakes. So, it's quite possible that at the point in time when Voldemort was coming to power, he needed the influence and gold of the old families. It's also possible that he respected them, because they had everything he valued but lacked himself: social position, money, history, purity of blood.

As for Rodolphus, I don't think he knew what he was getting himself into, when he married Bellatrix. Her cruelty and blood lust are unique, even among the Death Eaters. Something must have triggered that, and this is what I wanted to explore.

I'm very happy you like my story! The review made my day, even though I am ages late responding to it! Thank you!


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Review #2, by soufflegirl99 Mirage

15th August 2013:
Firstly, the whole title and chapter title for this story is completely and utterly awesome and I had no choice but to check it out. It sounded way too fascinating, and I'm pleased I did, because this is such an original and awesome interpretation of Bellatrix and her life.

Bellatrix is such a complex character to portray and write about, so lots of kudos for tackling such a tricky character! I love the way you characterised her of not always being evil and bad -- it makes much more realistic and believable as a character, and it makes a nice change from all the other Bellatrix stories :)

I've never really thought about what happened to the Black family when Andromeda went off with Ted, and I think all the characters acted accordingly. The way you describe Bellatrixs' reactions and her feelings towards her sister seem to all make sense, in comparison to the Bella we know now. When you described; "steaming waves of white, hot rage in her throat" that was beautiful and summed up the feeling of anger perfectly.

It was very, I can't think of another way to say this, but english narrative. It worked amazingly in third person, and the way you went in to such brilliant detail, and the way you described the suitor, how the suitor acted, and everything really reminded me of the way Rowling spoke about Harry and everything, and the combination of great detail, engaging range of sentences, and the way you structured it made it very english and such a riveting story to read! It just makes this chapter so addictive!

I think pride played such a big part in Bella's life -- the way her family treated bloodlines, and the way Bella dealed with people, like the first thing she noticed in a person was their bloodline. And the characterisation from the beginning of the chapter even, you see her thinking all these things but not taking action, compared to what she's like at the end which is even more proud, and acting more wildly. She's come some of the way towards the full death eater Bellatrix already! I love the way Bella analyses things a lot...that's a really inventive thing to make her do, because I'd always imagined her to be quite rash. It kind of makes her even more evil in that case, knowing fully and wanting to kill someone.

There's such much more I want to say about this chapter, but I'm exhausted, so I'm just going to cut it short. This chapter was so original, immense fun to read, and I loved everything about it from the format to the characters (Rudolphus sounds cool!) The last lines were really suspenseful and tense, and I can't wait to see what happens next! :)

-Sophie :D

Author's Response: I have no words to tell you how much your review means. I am so pleased and humbled that you found the whole narrative appropriate for the situation, especially since I am not English and I've never been to England.

I don't think all people are born evil. I think people are born good and they have evil come into their lives and take over. And for Bellatrix, I think she needed a trigger. Because we have three sisters, brought up the same way. One ran away with a Muggleborn, one married a pureblood and one ... well, one became the poster child for mental illness.

Bellatrix is such a complex character and it was challenging for me to do this. I'm happy the results were good. Thank you so much for reading and reviewing! It means a lot! :)


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Review #3, by Jchrissy Mirage

10th April 2013:
Ohh what a terrifying way you've started us out, m'dear!

I've never read something that showed what happened the moment she'd decided to take ranks among the death eaters, and I love the irony of it being Rodolphus that led her there. I'm sure if he understood how enamored his young wife would be with Voldemort he'd never had made that first step of connecting the two.

The idea of Bellatrix enjoying that someone has the power to look into her mind and see the things that maybe she doesn't want to admit or doesn't want to accept is really creative as well. I can't imagine the impression she must've made on Voldemort as well as the present company to be asked a private moment with him... and of course to actually walk from that private moment alive :P

I love how everything in this first chapter tied into one another. Andromeda leaving, Bellatrix being unable to standing being in the house with her moping sister, her heightened distaste for Mudbloods because of Andromeda, and finally all of that forming together and creating some of the puzzle pieces that got here where she is.

This was a really interesting start, dark and creepy just like the woman herself!!

I'm excited to see what's next :)

Author's Response: I'm so happy you enjoyed the brief excursion into the dark and twisted mind of Bellatrix. I gave myself the creeps writing it, I'll tell you!

I wanted to explore what happened in the exact moment when she first met him, because as I imagine it, Voldemort was rather charming back then. Nothing like a pretty face to get you to commit mass-murder. And I also thought of a trigger. As seen in the books, the purebloods don't really care about much as long as it leaves them alone. And since none of the Blacks besides Regulus were actually Death Eaters, something needed to have happened to throw Bellatrix of the deep end.

Again, thank you for the lovely comment. Coming from you, it's the best compliment! Thank you lovely!


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Review #4, by patronus_charm Mirage

8th April 2013:
Hey Ral! Apologises in advance for my no doubt typo ridden review, I'm doing it on my phone :/

I can't tell you how pleased I was to see this was about the Black family, I've always loved them, as they're so fascinating and complex. I really liked how you explored Andromeda and bellatrix's relationship, as I always imagined them to be close do it was nice to see it done here. I was glad that you chose to make bellatrix feel emotion towards her leaving as that's more realistic.

I really liked how you showed bellatrix's and Rodolphus' early courtship as it was rather sweet and innocent and different to what it becomes later on. I thought it was really interesting that he was the one who introduced her to Voldemort and the best has to be her saying how very muggle he was!

I liked that she viewed him with disdain at first and was rather impertinent towards him, it was so unexpected for her to be like that, yet so fitting too. I liked the instant connection they had, as it shows where her obsession she had with him later on may have stemmed from.

It wad almost scary to see her quickly she went over to his side, and how dedicated she was to him. You could see why she would would do that by tying it in with Andromeda.

Overall I thought it was q very thought provoking one shot, and I'm glad I clicked on the link ;)

-Kiana :D

Author's Response: Thank you so much for being the first to review!

Bellatrix just wants to get revenge for the shame her sister brought on the family. A bit far from the blood thirsty psycho she becomes. But more on that in later chapters. Right now, she wants power and he saw that, he saw that she was not easily impressed and wanted to show her that he wasn't a "Muggle" like she thought.

Thank you so much for reading!


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