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Review #1, by Beeezie And Then There Were Two

28th December 2016:
Oooh - wordless magic wasn't a thing then (or at least wasn't widespread)? That's fascinating - it shows both how the Elder Wand was able to genuinely change the rules and how once Pandora's box is opened, sometimes it stays open for good. It's all about changing what one already believes is possible. Excellent job there - I love it when people work canon in like this. ♥

I'm not sure how to interpret Antioch here. Did the wand truly corrupt him beyond the arrogance and malice he showed before they met Death, and once he'd lost it, he was free of that influence? Or, was he just a frightened man about to die knowing that all his bragging was bluster? It's so hard to know, and I love how open-ended you left it. I also really enjoy how nuanced you're continuing to make Cadmus as a character - based on what he's saying here, he really wants to do the right thing, but knowing the tale, it seems likely that he'll succumb to the same temptation that led him to ask for the stone in the first place. That's so wonderful and so well-done.

I also love how complex the relationship between the brothers is. Ignotus and Cadmus really clashed in the previous chapter, and it's clear that Ignotus is quite frustrated with both his brothers. However, when push comes to shove, it's also clear that Ignotus cares deeply for them - and I have to wonder whether he'll be able to feel so philosophical about death with the loss of Antioch.

I wasn't quite as sure about Death's characterization here, though. While I liked the idea that Death never intended for his hallows to remain on the mortal world, I was confused about how Death could possibly know who killed Antioch but not that Antioch no longer had the wand. It would have felt more natural if Death had raged about Antioch losing the wand from the start, rather than after asking for it back. I also would have liked to see more of an explanation for how the cloak could doom Ignotus, since avoiding that was explicitly part of what Ignotus asked for.

Otherwise, though, this was another solid chapter, and I'm very sad there isn't more yet! Happy holidays! ♥

Author's Response: Thank you SO much! Yeah, looking back at everything now, sometimes I wish I had expanded more on Antioch before killing him off, but I think I ultimately decided to do it when I did because I have so much planned for the story with Cadmus and onward.

That is also awesome feedback to hear about Death's characterization! I actually had not considered that take on it, and that seems the more logical approach!

You provide such excellent feedback!! I cannot tell you how much I've appreciated your reviews. :) Thank you so much, and happy holidays!


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Review #2, by Beeezie The Demise of Ganon Blackthorn

28th December 2016:
Back for our holiday wishlist event! ♥

Yeah, so I really like what you're doing with Ignotus here. You're showing the first cracks in the kind, patient exterior we've seen over the past two chapters, and it's a really nice illustration that the effects of the hallows can spread far, far past the people who actually possess them. Ignotus should be snapping - his brothers are being foolish, and Cadmus is neglecting his son on top of it. That's a really awful thing to do, and my heart went out to both Ignotus and Tyrion. I can only imagine how Ignotus would feel if he saw how Antioch was behaving - it's like he's taken getting a wand from Death as an open invitation to be a terrible human being, and I'm finding myself wondering whether he was always like this, or if his hallow is corrupting him as well.

A little CC, though: while I felt like the interaction between Ignotus and Cadmus was very believable and fit in well with the story, I did feel like you did a little too much telling as opposed to showing in the scene. You emphasized that Ignotus was Tyrion's favorite uncle and that it was so out of character for Ignotus to talk to his brothers in this way so strongly, and while I think both points have a definite place in the story, I wish you'd showed them in a more subtle way (if that makes sense).

In general, though, this was another solid chapter. Amazing job!

Author's Response: Another!! :) You really committed to that wishlist. :)

Thank you for that CC! That's very, very helpful. I feel like I, at times, can overtell the situation. I know it is a fault of mine to not give people the benefit of the doubt and think that they will be able to put two and two together, so sometimes I feel like I have to really write out my point, but that's an excellent point about going about it more subtly! I will definitely consider that in the future. :)

Thank you again for your incredibly review!


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Review #3, by Beeezie The Eldest Foe

28th December 2016:
So this chapter has zero reviews? And I don't understand that at all? This is wonderful. What the hell is that nonsense about? Oh, well. I'm here to remedy that ridiculous misstep by silly people with another review for our wishlist event! ♥

I love the way the brothers are continuing to fall on a spectrum. I think there's a very real temptation to simplify the hallows to the wand and the stone being bad and the cloak being good, and you're continuing to resist that telling and show the nuance of it. Cadmus gave into the pain of grief, but he's entirely not void of common sense - he wants to handle their gifts in a quiet and pretty sensible manner. It works really well with how he ultimately meets his end (as opposed to Antioch), and it does absolutely give Death a more sinister air. I still think that you showed nuance in him, but Death did trick Cadmus to lead him to his death. There are no easy answers there, and since the stone really is so complicated, that fits well.

Antioch's personality is also continuing to remain consistent and thoroughly unlikeable. He's all about overt power and status - it's not enough to just have something that's powerful, he has to be able to control people with it and brag about who he hurt to get it. That's a very dark way to approach something so powerful, and it fits with the hallow he took possession of. I have a hard time mustering up sympathy for him, but that's not actually a bad thing - I always root for the heroes, and in this story, that's absolutely, without a doubt, Ignotus.

Great chapter!

Author's Response: Eeek!! You continue to make my day!! :) Thank you again for your feedback! Yes, I absolutely adore the Ignotus I've portrayed here, so I'm glad to hear that he's coming off the way I want him to! :)

Thank you again!!!


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Review #4, by Beeezie The Tale of the Three Brothers

28th December 2016:
I'm here to spread some cheer for our HPFT holiday wishlist event! ♥

So.

So.

Oh how I enjoyed this, LET ME COUNT THE WAYS.

First off: I've got a massive soft spot in my heart for other era fics as it is, so this is right up my alley and I'm super excited to read it on the basis of that alone.

Second: You did such an amazing job at making this genuinely feel like it was straight out of a very different time period. You did it with the dialogue, and you did it with the prose. I ended up getting completely absorbed in it, and I loved that to a ridiculous extent.

Third: Omg the three brothers. Even before they met death, their personalities were so, so distinct. I could see how Antioch would be so foolhardy and intent on beating Death from the start. To me, it came across that Cadmus made an incredibly foolish decision for reasons that were... I'm not sure if pure is the right word, but at least not malicious? But Antioch was about humiliation. That's a different and much darker animal, and it fits their respective hallows.

But Ignotus. Ignotus had the right of it, and you managed to make that clear without falling into tired cliches. Ignotus's request felt genuine and honest, and I really adored him for it - and I feel like that allowed you to show a side of Death that wasn't focused solely on tricking people and hurting them, however Ignotus characterizes Death's laugh as they ride away.

Great job. ♥

Author's Response: Oh my goodness!! Your review has just left me feeling all warm and fluffy inside!! Gosh, thank you so much for your kind words! I can't tell you how much I appreciate your thoughts. I really wanted their characterizations to be clear, and I really wanted to capture what the written story describes and stick true to it, so that really helps me out.

Gosh, thank you so much!! :)


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Review #5, by pattybuns_hpf The Tale of the Three Brothers

18th July 2013:
This is an interesting rendition of the tale. I do like where this is all going, but I can only guess where it will all go after their encounter with Death. You tell me because I am intrigued and would love another chapter of this. I also like how you've written the three bothers. It's great that you've established the differences between them like you've experienced something like it before. And the era in which you're writing. I do love those stories that have that medieval/olden times feel on them.

There were a few bumps on the flow of the story but it did get me to the end wanting for more. There were a few sentences that didn't quite make any sense and I thought weren't so necessary to a paragraph. BUT overall it was a good read and a good start for the adventures of Ignotus. As this is my first story about him I would really love to see how you go about this story.

And I don't think I'll be able to keep my eyes off from your story's banner and chapter image. They're truly beautiful and eye-catching for many miles around. Nice choices on the brother's faces, I can totally see them playing the Peverell brothers if ever there was a movie.

Anyway, I'm definitely following for another chapter. See you around. :)

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Review #6, by HufflePuff_Blitz The Tale of the Three Brothers

17th June 2013:
I can't wait to see how this story twists without Dominique in it... and is the the same chapter as the first in and love prevails?

Author's Response: Thanks for showing such interest in it! I do hope you like the way it goes without having Dominique in it! And it is not the same. While it's similar, there are a lot of different aspects to it. ;)

Thanks for the review! I hope to see you back for the next chapter!


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