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Hi! I'm here with the review you have requested! :)
So, I thought this was quite good, despite its brevity and the word changes that have taken place on the site since yesterday. I actually think that you've managed to squeeze in enough meaning and emotion for just a few words, which most people can't do, especially if they are verbose and fond of run-ons (I'm guilty of that, sorry!)
The juxtaposition between lonely Hermy-one (sorry, I don't want to put her real name, just in case!) and Harry and Ginny's happy relationboat was very sad. She's all alone, and though they don't mean to, they are rubbing their happiness right into her purse (again, just in case... If you don't know what I'm talking about, a purse is the thing that houses your talking/eating-box and your eyebrows.)
...And now you probably think I'm insane. :p
But, in brief, this was a fantastic chapter!
~UnluckyStar57 Report Review
An interesting pairing. Even with a challenge I don't think I would have been able to come up with anything. You know I always like your style of writing, this chapter was no different.
It's also always interesting to see how people write Hermione when she hasn't succeeded in everything she achieved. I like how you did it here. She was always quite the perfectionist and not succeeding at something would bring her down, I believe.
The idea that she would go look for some adventure is also very believable. After all it's how she lived for so long, ever since starting Hogwarts. It makes sense she would go back to that in order to move forward.
And Harry hiding his sadness the way you described, even if it was such a small thing, true to the character.
I am very curious to the rest of the story. So far you've stayed true to the characters even in the smallest details. I wonder what happened to Hermione, to have be all alone now. Where is Ron? And how was she robbed of the life she wanted?
Again very curious to see where you will take this!
Small typo: "Why the had felt the need", they felt the need. Report Review
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