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Review #1, by Chazzie Marigold's tale

4th May 2014:
I really like it so far! Your characters are rather 3D and brilliant, and I'm looking forward to seeing what happens :D
Chazzie

Author's Response: I'm really sorry I haven't updated in ages. I'm trying to get inspired to write more, I'll do the best I can and write more of this story.

Thanks for reading and reviewing it means a lot to me!


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Review #2, by Leannadrobisforever Rain is like memories

1st August 2013:
Hey, I think the chapter was a pretty good start to the story. I can't wait to read how Gwen's and Sirius's relationship came to be- I'm guessing it will be pretty interesting. I hope you a good day of work for your other story which I hope will get published. Please update soon and I'll be on the lookout for the next chapter. Bye.

Author's Response: Thank you so much for reviewing, I'm sorry I didn't reply sooner. I'll try to get some more background on them in chapter four. Chapter two is up, and three is waiting to be posted. Thank you again, for reading.

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Review #3, by Quill_Pixie Rain is like memories

16th March 2013:
I'd like to make this very clear right off the bat: You've set up a wonderful story here. The brilliance in how you tell of a scene is very vivid. And the character you have presented so far is quite interesting. However, almost made laughable by some of your spelling errors.
Especially if you're working to publish your original work, this must be presented to you.

Half of the words here that you have incorrectly used would be given light to if you simply searched it on google.
"Your." is addressing a thing you own. "You're." is something you're doing. ex: it's "You're welcome." NOT "Your welcome." The person does not own a welcome.
I sure hope Remus doesn't own a Late.
"Grate." is shredding things to pieces, or the GRATE of a fireplace. "Great." means "immense."
I would go on, really. But they're everywhere in this chapter.

My best bet is for you to get someone to look over your work. Have them point out to you the words you've gotten wrong and such.
In the mean time, look up the meaning of the words you are not sure you've spelled correctly. Or at least search through a dictionary to make sure it's even there!

I'll be waiting for the next chapter. Looking forward to some hopeful improvements.

... I really hope "Purson." in your comment section was on purpose. If not, "Person."

Is English, by any chance, not your native language?

Author's Response: Hi :D I'm so happy you reviewed, I was getting cold feet for a little wile and almost deleted the whole thing. (Well, I would keep my copy.)

This was very helpful, I've been working on the 'your' and 'you're' thing for a while now, most of the time my editor sets it right, but maybe in my travels I've messed with the settings.

As for the others I'll have to read though it again, some times when I'm writing, I'll pick the one that looks like it, in the spell check and then go back and make sure. I have several people who read/edit my work, the one I'm publishing. This however was just for the pure joy of it, I had an idea and went with it. But this one I'm going alone, mainly because I really would like to read reviews. I'm not really sure where this story is going, I'm letting it play out the way it wants, for now I'm in the dark as to how it ends, but hopefully I'll get there.

As a matter of fact, it is. I got a giggle out of that comment, not sure why. But yep, born and raised. I've been meaning to learn other languages but haven't gotten to it yet.

Thanks so much.


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