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Review #1, by MadiMalfoy The Second Meeting

16th May 2013:
Team Bronze, yeah! :D
I've also had a bit of a spot in my heart reserved for Bill and Fleur because of the uniqueness of their love. They married in the middle of a war, they had a child in the remains of the war, they loved through all of it.

I always wanted to know how they really met and got together! This fits into their canons perfectly! :) Great job as always, I love your writing! :) xx

Author's Response: Aw Bill and Fleur are just are awesome. I think it's the way their love for one another always prevailed no matter what. I'm glad that you found it fitted with canon, and thank you for the lovely compliments, I'm so glad that you love my writing :D

-Kiana


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Review #2, by Lululuna The Second Meeting

10th May 2013:
Hello, here from review tag! :)

This was such an adorable little story and gave a really interesting insight into Fleur's mind. I like how while she portrays herself and is seen a certain way by others, she is secretly insecure and feels used and objectified by boys. I've never thought of Fleur being that way before, but it fit really smoothly! The idea of her having a crush on Cedric was sweet as well: it makes sense, since he would understand what it was like to be a champion and wouldn't treat her with the same reverence everyone else gave her.

I loved the descriptions of Bill and Fleur meeting again, and how you set them up in Gringotts. I could just imagine the quiet goblins and Fleur's voice suddenly ringing out in alarm! I think you did a really good job with her accent as well, and it really helped keep her in accordance with canon. The bits of French were a nice touch as well! It was adorable how Fleur kind of asked Bill out first, and how she even secretly moved to England because she wanted to run into him again... a little creepy, and mostly cute! :P The whole thing makes them seem more realistic and equal as a couple.

My one CC is that the flow of the story seems disrupted in a couple places. The second last paragraph confused me for a moment as I thought it meant they hadn't seen each other since the dinner, but I figured it out quickly. Also, the phrase that says something like "Harry gave her a wink as he walked out of the room" confused me a little, because I wasn't sure what room you were talking about and what exactly Bill was doing at the third task and had to search my memory. Then again this could be because I haven't read GoF in a while (my silly sister lost our copy, grr! Sorry, side-note! :P).

Anyway, I really enjoyed this!!! :) Lovely work!!!

Author's Response: Hey there!

Yeah I wasn't too pleased with how other people view Fleur in the books cough Ginny cough, as I think she's more than this brash French girl, so I'm really glad that you liked it too. I'm glad that you liked the cruch on Cedric as it isn't strictly canon, but it seemed to fit in my head ;)

Haha, yeah when I was writing this it seemed obvious that they would meet there, as they both worked there, and it was really fun to do. Yeah I used the books to get her accent, because it wouldn't be Fleur if she didn't have one. Haha, yeah I thought Fleur would be the more forward one, and even if it is a little creepy it's just love!

I'll review that paragraph and see if I can make it flow more easily. Yup I've read the books too many times, so I always assum people remember every single detail like I do, but I'll go back and include which room I'm referring to, to make it clearer.

Thanks for this great review :D

-Kiana


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Review #3, by rogue_bludger The Second Meeting

2nd May 2013:
omg, ths was amazing. seriously, i LOVE how you portrayed fleur and bill- this was so perfect. it felt so right and you had them completely in character. in the words of ron, this was 'bloody brilliant'.
~M

Author's Response: Aw thank you for leaving such an amazing review! I'm so glad that you loved my portrayal of them, as I really love this ship and wanted to do them proud! Wub thank you so much :D

-Kiana


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Review #4, by ginnys twin The Second Meeting

20th April 2013:
This was very heartfelt and overall, great. The French accent was very good, although I think it would add to the story to have the English translations next to the text. For instance, " When she told her sister, Gabrielle, that later, her sister simply replied with, “On peut rêver!” (Dream on in French )"

I know it might take away a bit for those that speak French, but it would add a lot for those of us who don't speak French.

Well, I don't know what to say except it was great! PS: you said you have a soft spot for Bill and Fleur, you should seriously consider reading Grizzled 15+ by Lululuna

-katty01/ginnys twin

Author's Response: I'm so glad that you found it was heartfelt, and that the French accent was good. That's a good suggestion about having the translation next to the English, I just worry that it may disrupt from the flow of the story. I understand that it can be annoying not knowing it straight away though!

I'm so glad that you found it was great, and I will check out Grizzled. Thank you for this lovely review, and favouriting me as an author as that was a wonderful surprise :D

-Kiana


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Review #5, by slytherinchica08 The Second Meeting

2nd April 2013:
aw I thought that this oneshot was really sweet! It was just so cute to see them both interacting for basically the first time and both be slightly flustered! I like that you included Cedric in this, it was something different and added to the story. It was all really cute, from her mentions of their first meeting to them meeting for a second time to her proposing they go to dinner together! This just made me want to squee a bit over these two and just how cute they were even though they are not one of my favorite pairings, though I have nothing against them either. I think its nice having her painted in this light since in the series she comes off as a bit of an overstatement so to see her here and normal makes me like her more than I had in the series! I very much enjoyed this cute fluffy oneshot! Great Job!

~Slytherinchica08~

Author's Response: Haha I'm glad you found it sweet as that's what I was aiming for :P I'm glad that you liked the inclusion of Cedric as I was worried it would be too unorthodox and that people wouldn't like it!

Haha I'm glad that I made you want to squee over them! I felt for Fleur too, as she doesn't come off all that nicely in the books so I felt bad for her, and wanted to show that she can be shy, and she does have a heart.

I'm so glad that you enjoyed it, and thanks for the review,

-Kiana :D


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Review #6, by adluvshp The Second Meeting

2nd April 2013:
Here for the review swap!

Ah I am so glad I got a chance to read this story. I have never been much of a Bill/Fleur fan, but after reading some of Jchrissy's pieces on them, I have been wanting to explore their relationship, so I was pleased to find a story about them on your author's page =)

I think this was a great one-shot! I absolutely loved your take on the two. We got to see a different side to Fleur - it showed the seventeen (?) year old girl in her and I liked that. Her feelings of anxiety, "love", excitement, were all very realistically portrayed. I also liked how you touched upon her "feelings" for Cedric. In the books, I had always thought that Fleur had had a soft spot for Cedric, so it was great that you highlighted on that.

Then, the way her feelings for Bill came around was very sweet, and the manner in which the entire conversation took place and everything suddenly happened (in the end) was just awesome. It was quite believable as that is how such "encounters" occur.

I enjoyed Bill's characterisation too. I loved the confident air you gave him, and yet he became nervous around Fleur. I also liked how he was kind of rambling in his conversation with Fleur - it was cute, and realistic.

The writing style was really sweet and the narrative flowed smoothly. The grammar and all was good too. I think this made for a very sweet light read and I enjoyed it a lot. Great job!

10/10
Cheers!
AD
(AditiDraco95)

Author's Response: Hi Aditi!

Yeah Jami's pieces about Bill and Fleur made me really love that ship, so I decided to venture into writing them too, and I was really glad that I did, as they're so much fun!

I think Fleur would have been seventeen then, so I'm glad that her feelings of love and angst were realistic. I was so worried about the bit about Cedric as I thought I was the only one who picked up on that in the books, but I'm glad that you did too.

I'm glad that you found the encounter believable, and I think their romance would be one of those fairy tale ones, as they're just so perfect for one another :')

I'm glad that you liked Bill too, as I love his character, and wanted to do him proud! Thanks for the great review it brightened my day :D

-Kiana :D


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Review #7, by marauder5 The Second Meeting

29th March 2013:
I liked this! Very sweet and fluffy :) I really like Bill and Fleur too, because the books don't reveal that much about their relationship. I can imagine that this was how it started... As for your French, I'm no expert, but I've studied French for a few years and it seemed correct to me (not that I'm completely trustworthy in this matter, as I'm not that good at it, but still!) ;)

Author's Response: I'm really glad that you liked this. I've always loved Bill and Fleur but there was so little of them I had to write this, so I'm glad you found it was accurate :) I'll take your word for it, someone corrected something for me, but no one else has said it's wrong!

Thank you so much for the review,

-Kiana :D


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Review #8, by Bobby Dazzler The Second Meeting

26th March 2013:
Hello there lovely! Here to give you a belated review from my review request thread. So sorry about the delay, had some technical difficulties (ie. daughter spilling water on my laptop and now it wont charge - HEARTATTACK!!!) Anywho... :)

I too am a bit of a sucker for Bill/Fleur stories, and since they're so rare, they're even more special and enjoyable, especially when they're well written, which this was. I thought you did the characters justice and it was a nice fluff piece, which sometimes is all that's needed to let the whole story fall into place. We don't need to know how dinner went, because we know how it would've went thanks to canon. So I like that you kind of left it open to canon to fill in the blanks, wish more people did that sometimes :)

There was only one thing I wanted to point out in this that just struck me as a little... well, breaking with the writing style I suppose? It was from Fleur's POV, but there was one or two instances there where you broke from that and went to Bill's POV, which although it was lovely getting a little insight into his thoughts as well, I kind of think it didn't justify what you were trying to acheive with the rest of the story, as Fleur's narrative voice was strong and said it all anyway. Rather than Bill's narrative voice needing to be heard, it would've been nice, in my opinion anyway, if it was Fleur making observations about Bill's character to explain how she interpretted him to be thinking and feeling towards their encounter in the bank, so it all stayed in her POV and her narrative, as it was her story to be told, not Bill's.

That would be my only bit of criticism, as I really did enjoy it otherwise. I thought it was engaging, clever and amusing. And I liked how you told us about her experiences of the tri-wizard tournament and the other champions. I thought that was really good reading that, and poor Cedric :(

I thought this was great, and as I said, that would be my only thing to think about. Aside from that, it was great! Thanks for asking me to read it, loved it :) Bobby xx

Author's Response: Hi Bobby! Don't worry about how long it took, I now what happens when you spill liquids onto computers.

I'm so glad that you thought I did the characters justice. I've always had a soft spot for them both too, so I really wanted to write them well :) I'm glad that you liked I didn't include the dinner scene, I just felt it was unncessary as it would just be them looking dreamily at each other ;D

Yeah I didn't really know how to handle that part, as I didn't particularly want a POV change as I thought it would be odd. I do love your suggestion so I think I'll go back and edit it in :D

I'm glad that you liked the bit about the Triwizard Tournament as I was little unsure about that, and then the thing about Cedric. I did feel bad for him when writing it.

Thank you so much for this review, it was so useful, and I'm glad that you loved it :D

-Kiana :D


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Review #9, by aquabluez17 The Second Meeting

23rd March 2013:
Hey Kiana!!

Okay this is just soo cute!! I really loved it. I don't really see a lot of Fleur/Bill but this really made me happy.

Things were kinda glossed over in the book about how they got together though this was just so cute. Poor Fleur, always being looked as a object. Im glad she found someone who would notice her as a person.

One CC, sometimes it was really hard to understand exactly what Fleur was saying. Although it really added to her character, maybe having the proper sentence in a bracket following would help?

See ya soon Kiana :P You should totally write more on this!

Author's Response: Hey Mya!

Hahaha I'm so glad that you thought it was cute, I don't see much of Bill and Fleur either so I guess that's why I decided to write it!

Haha yeah I wanted to draw on the fact, as I did feel sorry for Fleur to, but she has Bill now!

I'm glad that you found it hard to understand as that was the idea, but I'll see if I can make it clearer:)

When you check out Against All Odds, you'll see how it ties in ;D

Thanks for the review!


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Review #10, by Aphoride The Second Meeting

20th March 2013:
Hey there! I adore Bill/Fleur, so of course I had to read this. In response to your comment at the bottom about the French - I wouldn't worry about it! It seemed perfectly fine to me and I studied it for a long time, but if you're really unsure there's quite a lot of people who speak French fluently on the forums, so you can always ask them to check it over. I'm sure none of them would mind! :)

I loved how you brought up her noticing him at the Triwizard Tournament and her idea that they were meant for something more, her certainty that she would see him again. It's something almost naive, really, but I think so many people do it, you know, 'fall in love' with that person they've only met once/seen on stage or whatever. It's nice as well, because it adds another side to Fleur, making her somewhat romantic as well.

I really loved how you wrote her here. In the books she was always such a strong, determined and independent character and I felt you really brought that to life here. The only thing I would say about her characterisation is that she was very close to her sister, though we don't know so much about her parents, so I would have liked maybe just a bit more of a mention of Gabrielle and leaving her behind in France to go to England as I'm sure that would have had an effect.

Bill was lovely, of course. I liked how you didn't make him totally immune to her Veela charm, what with him being nervous, but didn't make him completely gormless, like Ron was in GoF, either. It's a great balance to get and really suits him well.

Haha, I also have to say that I loved how you made Fleur the one to ask Bill out to dinner, in 'payment' for English lessons. I've never really thought about that scenario, but it works really, really well! I almost feel sorry for Bill because she's so determined to get what she wants, you know? But then I remember that he falls in love with her and everything's good, lol.

The only other thing I'd say is that it's perhaps a little bit short. Maybe some more description would fill it out a bit more? Like more description about the office she's in, what Bill's wearing when he talks to her, etc. The picture feels a bit blank at the moment. But you don't have to take this too seriously - I tend to put in too much description so it might just be me ;)

I really enjoyed reading this! :)

Aph xx

Author's Response: Hey Aph!

Yeah WTM corrected some of my French ;D I forget that a ton of people speak it, so if I do need help I'll remember your tip!

I'm glad that you liked the whole falling in love at first sight thing, because I do think it can happen. And I don't think many people pegged Fleur to be romantic, so it was fun to twist this!

I'm glad that you found her strong and determined as that's one thing I always admired about her in the books! I'll try and draw more emphasis on Gabrielle though, as they were really close :')

Hahaha I didn't think Bill would be susceptible to the Veela charm ;) I thought if he was nervous it would be fun!

Of course Fleur would ask him out, but I think Bill wanted to date her just as much as she wanted to date him, so he probably had no problem with it!

Yeah I need to work on my description as I really should include more, when I edit this, I'll add more in!

Thanks for the great review, and I'm glad that you liked it!

-Kiana :D


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Review #11, by Jess the Enthusiast The Second Meeting

12th March 2013:
Hi there! This is Jess the Enthusiast from the forums, here for your review from the Review Tag! :D

Aww, this was so sweet! I've never really read any Bill/Fleur stories, but I have always thought they were a nice couple. And I think you did them justice; they were very sweet together and I really liked the way that you had them meet for a second time (and thus leading to the eventual serious relationship and marriage). I thought you had really great characterizations (Fleur's was particularly refreshing - I really liked how she wasn't stuck up or snobby because I don't think she was actually that way) and it was a really fun read. My only constructive criticism would be that I thought I saw some grammatical errors, but perhaps I am not the correct person to look to for that sort of thing.

Really great job! I loved how you wrote Fleur's accent into the dialogue!

10/10

~Jess :D

Author's Response: Hello there Jess!

I always thought they were a nice couple as well, and I hadn't really written or read many stories about them, so I guess this was a sort of experiment for me!

I'm glad that you liked Fleur's characterisation, I don't believe that she was stuck up or snobby, I think that was just the Weasley's perception of her, as she was unknown, and they didn't know how to react.

I'll review the chapter, and see if I can weed the errors out!

Haha I had including her accent as well!

Thank you for this great review,

-Kiana :D


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Review #12, by Athene Goodstrength The Second Meeting

11th March 2013:
Hi Kiana!

So, this was really sweet! Your characterisation of Fleur is really thoughtful, and it makes perfect sense. I've never thought of her as being an outsider, but it really works. She's the most beautiful, the 'champion', the foreigner... and actually she's treated with disdain by a lot of people, and with fascination, as you so interestingly point out, from the boys.

I always wondered how she and Bill could come to be together, apart from the fact that hey, they're both gorgeous. But this story is a really believable explanation - she sees in Bill something refreshing, something 'cool' (that Harry notices the first time he meets Bill!), and then there's that inexplicable, irresistible attraction.

You do a really good job of writing that sort of gut feeling, this is The One, I-need-to-be-with-him, strange thing that sometimes happens. The way Bill's presence makes Fleur react differently to how acts around anyone else is interesting, as she's often described as arrogant or haughty and that doesn't seem like something any Weasley would find attractive. So maybe he's a good influence on her - I think he helps her relax and let down her defences, and that's certainly the way your writing makes it seem.

It does seem very Fleur-y to decide to just move to England because she'd found what she wanted. She's very headstrong, and that really comes across here, even when she gets nervous around Bill!

Your exploration of her relationship with Cedric was really interesting. I love the way she seems to like polite, friendly boys who are possibly not interested! I'd definitely be interested in reading more about her time at Hogwarts.

I liked the way Harry kept popping up throughout the story like a weird little cupid! And Fleur's frustration at the British press made me laugh - how very topical! Although, it is the French who publish naughty photos of our royals *shakes head*
I liked the bits in French, too. Nice to see!

The only thing I thought odd was the fact that Fleur's English is actually very good. I know you don't want her to be stumbling all over her words as you don't want the dialogue to get clunky, but I think her words roll a little too easily off her tongue. Maybe she could pause or stumble over a word if you wanted her language to be an issue she and Bill would talk about, and he could help her? Or, if it's in fact a ruse so that she could spend time with Bill, make that clear! (although this Fleur doesn't feel manipulative like that at all to me!)

This story was really sweet and enjoyable, with an interesting glimpse into Fleur's life at that particular butterfly-inducing, heart-beaty time.

Also, Visenya did you a really beautiful banner for this! It really caught my eye.

Author's Response: Hi Sarah, thank you so much for stopping by, and leaving me such a long and lovely review!

I’m glad that you liked Fleur’s characterisation, as I always thought that she would be a bit of an outsider, due to her being the ‘champion’, as most people envy the person who holds that position, so I thought it would fit, and yes I always thought it was horrible how the boys viewed her.

I’m glad that you liked how Bill and Fleur came to be, as I thought Bill may have helped calm down Fleur’s girliness, perhaps made her into the strong character we come to see at the end of HBP :)

Yes I thought it would be funny to make her interested in the one person who’s not interested in her, as it shows that even though she was one of the most beautiful people around, she still can’t get everything, and that not everyone would fall in love with her, so she shouldn’t be envied so much.

Haha I didn’t think of Harry playing cupid, now I just have images of him running around with a bow and arrow! Yes our press don’t have a great reputation right now, but I completely forgot about how naughty the French were! How dare they be mean to Kate :O

I know it may sound strange, but it was hard to make her English bad. I looked in the books, but that was after he helped her, so of course she would be good then, but I will definitely go back, and add in the stumbling. I don’t think Fleur would be manipulative she’s too lovely!

I’m really glad that you liked the story, and yes Visenya did do a wonderful banner!

-Kiana :D


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Review #13, by Jchrissy The Second Meeting

10th March 2013:
Hi m'dear! This was a really sweet portrayal of Bill and Fleur. I love getting to see anything about their earlier days. Their courting, their first few years of marriage, anything along those line. I've read something that hinted at her and Krum, but never her and Cedric! Though it makes sense that she would care for him, or at least develop a crush on him. He was an attractive boy who was as well known as her to Hogwarts as she was to Beauxbatons. So it really felt natural that she would fall toward him.

The idea that she felt a certain spark just by seeing Bill was very romantic. I love it. We have to know that she must've felt very strongly about him to end up dealing with everything she does. His family disliking her, his attack, the fact that he and his family are some of Voldemort's most wanted... the girl really shows courage. And having her love for him start so magically with that one look just fits so well.

I also enjoyed that she realized with Bill's entrance, that Cedric had been more of a crush than anything. It felt like she came to terms with the fact that he was an attractive boy but that she really didn't like him. It was a really good way to go, I think, as opposed to her using Bill to get over him or something along those lines.

The only thing that felt odd was when she mentioned her financial situation. From what we learned of Fleur and her family, they are an extremely proud family and well off. Even if something happened to financially strain them, I don't think that Fleur would mention it to anyone. Maybe just changing that to her not knowing where she can get English lessons would keep her in the awesome character you've built? That would open him up to offering to help.

But that took nothing away from this sweet little piece. I still really enjoyed it and found myself smiling all the way through!

♥ Jami

Author's Response: Hi Jami, thank you so much for stopping by!

I'm glad that you felt it made sense for her to develop a crush on Cedric, as I was a little unsure about that, as even my head it didn't make entire sense, so I'm glad that you found it did. I always wanted to know how they started dating as well, so I guess that's what inspired me to write this :)

I'm glad that you liked the whole love at first sight thing, as I knew it was a little cliche, but then I thought of how she protective she was of him when he was attacked by Greyback, and I knew that she must have felt some very strong emotions towards him, so it could work.

I know what you mean about the financial situation thing with Fleur. I knew that there had to be a reason as to why he gave her English lessons, I just couldn't think of any other reasons, and I can understand why it appeared odd. I really like your suggestion though, and I think I may go back and edit it in :)

Thank you for this great review Jami, and I'm really glad that you enjoyed it,

-Kiana :D


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Review #14, by Carolynn The Second Meeting

10th March 2013:
Here's your review!
I really liked it. You did a good with changing Fleur a bit, It got me hooked from the beginning and great job with writing in third person!

Author's Response: Hello and thank you for the review!

I'm glad that you liked it, and the changes with Fleur as I wasn't too sure about it!

I'm glad that you thought the third person was fine, as I really wasn't sure about it!

Thanks again,

-Kiana!


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Review #15, by academica The Second Meeting

9th March 2013:
Hey Kiana! Team Blue, Team Blue! -cheers-

I really like Bill and Fleur and think that they're somewhat underappreciated, so it was good to see that you'd written a one-shot about them. I liked your characterization of Fleur a lot, especially the part where the other girls from her school seemed to think of her as being something special, but she just wanted to fit in and viewed herself as normal. It was nice to see the more insecure, unsure side of her.

A couple tiny things stuck out to me as potential ways for making this even better. For one, I felt a little confused during the transition from Cedric to Bill; it seemed like Fleur cared about Cedric, but then when she met Bill, she realized her feelings for Cedric hadn't really meant anything at all. It's romantic to see her fall so readily for Bill, but at the same time, I think it would be more realistic for her to have some trouble reconciling her hurt at losing Cedric with her newfound attraction to Bill. I hope that makes sense to you.

The only other thing was the transition from Fleur's recollection of her journey toward the scene at Gringotts into the actual present-day scene. It took me a minute to figure out that the Gringotts scene was playing out in real time, and I think part of it was some awkwardness in the flow and phrasing. You might just want to go back and re-read it again.

Overall, this was really nice. I liked how you drew in lots of elements from canon, like the way that Fleur and Bill connected over their faith in Harry. This was a very cute, fluffy little one-shot :)

-Amanda

Author's Response: Haha hi Amanda! *joins in cheering!*

I'm glad that you liked the unsure side to Fleur, as I wasn't too sure if anyone would like it, considering how brash and bold she can be in real life! I guess that might have been done to show that she is insecure at times!

I wasn't really sure how to show the transition from Cedric to Bill, and tried a couple of things, and none seemed to work. So I left it how it is and hoped for the best! I really like your suggestion though, and I think I will work it in some how :)

I didn't realise that I missed a time phrase out, I meant to go back and include one, as I realised it would be a little confusing, so I'll actually include one this time ;)

I'm glad that you liked the canon elements, as I can't help but include them! I'm glad that you liked it, as I tend to avoid writing overtly fluffy scenes, as they make me cringe, so it's good to find that people liked it!

-Kiana :D


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Review #16, by WeasleyTwinMom_staff The Second Meeting

9th March 2013:
"Dream on" would be "Tu reves!" or "On peut rever!" or "Tu peux toujours rever!", but it would not be "Reve sur" :) (and the review box doesn't like the alt code accents, so imagine a circonflexe above the first e in each form of rever)

Very sweet and fluffy story! I liked it. Everyone was in character, you handled Fleur's mangled English well, and it sounds like it's going to continue so yay! Good story.

Author's Response: Thank you for pointing that out! My Mum's my usual translator, but she doesn't know that I write fan fiction, so it may have been a bit awkward asking!

I'm glad that you liked it, and found it flufy as that's what I was aiming for!

I'm glad that you liked Fleur's English, as I didn't know whether I had over/under did it!

I guess this will sort of tie in with my Remus/Tonks novella I'm writing, as Bill will probably feature a lot in it!

Thanks for the review!

-Kiana :D


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Review #17, by dreamer21 The Second Meeting

9th March 2013:
Such a cute story! Aw.
Em.

Author's Response: Hi Em!

Thank for the review, and I'm glad that you found it cute, as that's what I was aiming to do:D

Kiana


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Review #18, by teh tarik The Second Meeting

9th March 2013:
Hiya Kiana :)

Thought I'd drop by and read this after seeing the link on the forums.

Gah! Such a lovely fluffy oneshot. I do have a soft spot for Bill/Fleur as well, and can I say how much I love how you've portrayed them here? They contrast each other so nicely; there's Fleur who is quite outspoken at times, and pretty impulsive too, which is fitting since she's a Triwizard champion and all. Yet she has her quieter and more vulnerable moments, when she finds herself a little isolated from the other students because of her status as Champion. And then there's Bill, whom you've chosen to portray as slightly more introverted - shy and awkward Bill :D Gah, they're both adorable.

Love the hints of Fleur/Cedric. It's so interesting that Fleur had feelings for him. And I'm glad there was none of that petty rivalry between her and Cho; I love how Fleur immediately steps back from Cedric without any resentment toward Cho (I'm a big Cho fan ♥ but this is sort of irrelevant...).

Anyway, loved that final bit where it's Fleur who actually asks Bill out for a date. That's completely believable, I think, how bold and unselfconscious she is. Your Fleur is just perfectly in-character.

Alright, well, I think you did a lovely job writing a few moments in Fleur's life and showing how her and Bill got together. I really enjoyed reading this :) Great work.

-teh

Author's Response: Hi teh, thanks for stopping by!

I'm glad that you thought they contrasted at times. I wanted to show that Fleur had a softer side, and I thought she might have been a bit isolated, as whenever some is ranked higher than others it's bound to happen! I'm glad that you liked the more introverterd Bill, as it's rather different to how he's usually seen, so I wasn't too sure!

I didn't intentionally mean to include Fleur/Cedric, it just happened when I was writing it, and it seemed to fit, so I decided to include. Of course Fleur would stop, I'm a big Cho fan too, so I thought it would be the right thing to do:D

Haha yeah well Fleur seems like a modern woman to me, so I thought it would be fun to turn the tables and make her ask him out :D I'm glad that you found that she was in character!

I'm glad that you enjoyed reading it, and those moments fitted in, as I really love these two, and wanted to do them proud!

-Kiana:D


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