Hello there! This is sweetlovelygirl from the Choices Challenge. I really like what you have done with the choice and character you were given. It fits into the real world of Harry Potter, just as JKR had wanted it. This story really just shows how adorable Neville is. It is so sweet that he would like to give up his last bit of money just to make others happy!
Your story contains a few errors and sometimes your sentences are a bit confusing and long. Your descriptions are nice though I think some things are unnecessary.
I really liked reading this story!
-Xxx- sweetlovelygirlAuthor's Response: Hi there! I'm so glad you liked it, and I'm really happy that I made second place! I will read through it and correct those, and hey, you never know what might become necessary ;)
I really enjoyed coming up with the idea for this challenge entry, it was a really cool and interesting one, so thank you!
Really inspired me to keep writing more often(or as often as I can!)
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