Hey, STG Sagmag here with your review :D

Tonks's voice is funny and sarcastic, but it also has this kind of mature, grown up tone to it, which I think is pretty great. I love that she's besties with Charlie too, who has got to be my third favorite Weasley :) I also like how you've managed to bring in little things, little tidbits about Tonks and her lifestyle from how JKR wrote her.

There were a few grammatical errors, but none that really matter. Something that I'd like to know is whether Tonks has heard of Remus before. She refers to him as "this Remus guy" in her head, like she doesn't know him yet, but calls him Lupin aloud. Sirius himself only called him Remus, so how did Tonks know?

Overall, this was a very well-written chapter (I sniggered like a demented beaver when Sirius asked Tonks whether she was checking Remus out xD) and even though there's not much of a plot at the moment, it has a lot of potential and I'd really like to see the next chapter.

Feel free to re-request for chapter 2 :)
xSara

Author's Response: Hey Sara!

I'm so glad that you liked Tonks' voice, as it's so unique I really tried hard to capture it! It seemed natural that they would be friends as they're natures are so similar it seemed like the only likely option. I enjoyed slipping in the little about her life as it was so much fun :D

Ooh I'll review those grammar errors, they are always some left no matter how many times I look at the chapter :/ Oops I didn't realise that about Remus, I'll go and review that too!

Don't worry about laughing at that point, I laughed stupidly too :P Yeah this was more of an intro chapter than a plot one but I'm glad you saw some potential :D

Thank you for a great review, and I will definitely be re-requesting!

-Kiana

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Hi,
This chapter had a lot of humour in it. I love the bickering between Tonks and Dawlish, it's brilliant! My favourite sentence was "Personally, I would have thought they would have been more shocked that I read, but each to their own." I can't explain why, but I thought it was hilarious. I'm glad you don't portray Remus as too shy and timid, since I'm convinced the years with Sirius and James must've rubbed off on him somehow. Overall, great chapter, can't wait to read your next one!

-Laura

Author's Response: Hey again Laura!

I'm glad that you liked the bickering, it seemed to be Tonkish so I couldn't resist including it. Haha, don't worry I have that problem all the time when things are just funny, so don't worry. Yeah I didn't think Remus would be that shy, I mean, of course he'll be quieter than Tonks but he'll still be lively!

Thanks for another great review, and the next chapter should be up soonish :D

-Kiana

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Hey,
This is a very interesting chapter. At first, I was a bit surprised by how sudden Tonks had told the news about the Order and Sirius to her parents, but then I figured it really suits her and actually makes sense. The rambling is hilarious, especially the part on morris dancing, great details. I forgot to mention last time I reviewed, but I like it that you take things slow concerning the Remus - Tonks relationship and that you're building it up. It makes it far more realistic, I think.

-Laura

Author's Response: Ah and another!

Yeah I wasn't too sure about her telling them straight away either, but like you said, she's rather brash with things like that so it seemed to make sense. Yeah I enjoyed including the morris dancing part, and her ramblings are so much fun to write, so I'm glad that you're enjoying them too. Remus and Tonks will definitely develop slowly, mainly due to Tonks taking ages to realise she likes him, so yay that you liked it!

Thanks for another great review :D

-Kiana

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Hi again!
Great, great chapter! I love Tonks' flow of mind, you've really captured her character well. Some of her comments like "Today it was about how I shouldn't be buying an ice cream despite the fact I was forced to stand in the baking heat" and "Plus that Chinese I ate last night had a weird smell, so that probably didn't help" really got me laughing, it seems so like her. Again, I really admire how fluent your writing and storyline is. It's something I have a lot of trouble with when I write, it just never seems to read easy enough. Good of you to include Bill and Fleur's story, I realized I was actually very curious to how that had went. So, I'm going to continue to the next chapter!

-Laura

Author's Response: Hey Laura!

I'm so glad to see you back again :D Haha, I'm glad that you liked Tonks' thoughts as I was worried they may just come off as innane ramblings. I guess reading through a story a lot helps, as it makes you realise little things you thought you missed. I have a one-shot about Bill and Fleur's story if you wanted to know more about it ;) Thank you for this lovely review, it really made me smile!

-Kiana

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This was super cute, and I really enjoyed this! I love how you show Tonks as super clumsy, rather than just telling it. And I love the way Remus is reacting- you have both of them very in character.
Also the part about Tonks in muggle school made me chuckle- i wish one of my classmates had started changing their nose halfway through class :)
~M

Author's Response: Hey!

I'm really glad that you're enjoying, as this story is probably my favourite to write, mainly because of Tonks. I'm also glad that I'm showing rather than telling as I have had issues with that in the past.

I enjoyed weaving bits about Tonks' past, as I imagined it would be like that. And yay Remus is in character.

Thanks for this great review,

-Kiana

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Hi! I really like your characterisation of Tonks, she appears as eccentric and fun as she's described in the books. Love your easy - going writing style, it seems very natural.

Good luck with writing,

Laura

Author's Response: Hey Laura!

I'm glad that Tonks appears to be as she is in the books as that's what I was aiming to do :D I'm glad that you liked my writing style too, and I find out all of my stories this is often the easiest! Thanks for the great review, and I hope you carry on reading :D

-Kiana

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I love tonks, so anything from her perspective is totally up my alley. this was a great read, and i'm looking forward to reading more. i love how you managed to work with canon so well, and show things (in my opinion) very accurately from Tonks' point of view. One thing that I noticed though- some moments, you make it sound a lot like Tonks from the series, and some moments her thoughts feel slightly out of character. Nothing to stress about too much, but if you did go back to edit, maybe having less 'muggle' slang (like wannabe, and who on earth, etc). Just food for thought though- feel free to disregard! Overall, a great read, and I look forward to reading more!
~M

Author's Response: Haha I love Tonks too, so I'm so glad that you liked it! Haha I'm glad it worked with canon, as that's the thing I was most worried about. Ooh I'll definitely go and check out the muggle slang, but I assumed she would know some from her dad. Oh well, I'll review it anyway!

Thanks for the great review, and I hope you carry on reading!

-Kiana

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I'd stun anybody who takes my romance books too!

Ah, Remus and Tonks finally get a little time together. Maybe Remus is realizing he might like her? I'm not holding my breath for Tonks, she is so chaotic that she'd probably mistake her crush on Remus for dragon pox or something!

I loved the general atmosphere of this chapter. We got to see a little of Tonks' life with the Aurors and the trouble she gets up to there and also her life as a member Order. The tiny details, like her co-worker who was a gossip and a flirt make this story more real to me and I love that!

Amazing chapter, as usual my dear! Keep up the good work!

Author's Response: I'm with you on that too! Tonks was suprisingly possesive over them!

I liked writing that scene, as I wanted them to have some time together too. Yeah Remus is slowly beginning to like her, but like you said, with Tonks it would take a lot more for her to realise her feelings for Remus!

I'm glad that you liked the atmosphere of the chapter. I thought I had to include an Auror scene to make it authentic and it was fun to make up the co-worker!

Thank you for another great review, it really brightened my day :D

-Kiana

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Hello dear! Oh I just love Tonks. With every chapter I just grow more and more attached to her character.

The first part of the chapter with her visiting her parents was really heart-warming. I liked the part about the two of them not expecting to have a child like Tonks. I can feel their pain. If I had a child so accident-prone I'd probably baby proof the baby proofing devices. I also liked the fact that Andromeda didn't just jump on board with the whole "Sirius is innocent" idea. It gave a very realistic approach to the situation he is in at this time.

I was determined not to make a fool of myself in front of Remus. That's when I knew something was about to happen! But really, Molly should know better. You can't just keep the twins huddled up in a big and old and scary house and not expect them to amuse themselves.

Mad-Eye was really kept in character, which is something that I love. He has this air about him, of constant gloom and doom, and you captured it beautifully.

And Remus and Tonks on their first mission together! I'm curious what trouble she'll get into this time around! Great chapter!

Author's Response: Hey there! I'm so glad that you're growing attached to Tonks as I've had so much fun writing her :D

I thought it would be fun to explore her home life a bit more, so I'm glad that you liked it. I think they would need to baby proof everything with someone like Tonks, she's such a danger hazard. I'm glad that you liked Andromeda's reaction as, I agree, it wouldn't have made much sense otherwise.

Haha, yes she really tempted fate by thinking that line. I had to include a prank from the twins, but Molly being Molly was probably too stressed by other things to think of them!

I'm glad that you found Mad-Eye was in character, as he's so hard to write. As for the mission, I would have to quote more than 3 three lines for that scene so I decided it was best to skip it. I hope it worked out ok!

Thanks for this great review!

-Kiana

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This is really good and really funny! Keep writing!!Please!!!:)

Author's Response: I'm so glad that you're finding it funny as I was worried it was only me :D There will be more soon, so don't worry :D Thanks for the great review!

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I like this so far, I hope there will be more soon!

Author's Response: I'm glad that you do and more should be up soonish! Thanks for the review :D

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I think I have fallen in love with your story.
You see, I have always wanted to read a long Fanfic with Remus and Tonks as the main couple so...
THANK YOU A LOT! *hugs
Now about your writing style, I must say that it is very good. You describe very vividly the characters and the setting which helps me imagine the story better. I also like how you show a side of the characters that in the book is not seen very much like Bill. I never imagined Bill the way you describe him but I must say that I like it very much. I also like the way you describe Remus (in my mind he wasn't such a quiet and shy guy).
Tell me are you going to make any POV of Remus? Because that would really be interesting.
And is this fanfic going to be long? Because I would really love it if it were longer.
One last thing, I loved your one-shot of how Fleur met Bill, especially because it was her point of view.
Hope you update soon!
Lots of Love
R.W
P.S: How do you make your banners? They are soo cool!

Author's Response: Hey R.W.!

I'm so glad that you've fallen in love with my story it means so much to me! I didn't know that many people read Remus/Tonks so to hear this is great!

I'm glad that you like my style, and the descriptions as I never seem to get them right! I love adding in minor characters, it's so much fun and Bill should feature more! I never imagined him to be that shy, and I think when you're around someone like Tonks you're bound to be loud.

I haven't planned on writing from Remus' POV, but I may do some one-shots from it! This story should go up to their wedding, as their love story will be complete by then. I'm really glad that you liked that one-shot about Bill and Fleur as I had a lot of fun writing it!

The next chapter is in the queue, so it should be up soonish. As for the banners, I didn't make them, the lovely people at The Dark Arts did them for me :D

Thank you for this lovely review, and I can't wait to hear what you think of the next chapter,

-Kiana

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I love Tonks! Remus is a cutiee. I am enjoying this story very much.
Keep updating.
Em

Author's Response: I'm so glad that you love Tonks as I love her too and that you enjoy the story :D I can't wait to hear what you think of the next chapter! Thanks for the review!

-Kiana

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Hi! I'm here for your requested review. Sorry that I'm bit late, it has been exceptionally busy week. On to the review then (it's super long)... =)

I really like your Tonks. She has carefree personality that I think she should have. Blowing up toilets with Charlie was a nice little detail. I can see them doing exactly that, and then the head boy Bill trying to catch them red-handed. =)

I kind of would have liked to know something about Kingsley's and Dawlish's appearances. Like were they under cover too?

Kingsley's dialogue... Hmm... I kind of feel that it could use little defining to make bit clearer their work relationship, since the dialogue felt more like two close friends chatting, not like boss-employee situation. Also, I imagine Kingsley to be bit more manly when he talks. But that's just my 2 cents. =P

Bill's and Tonks's friendship felt natural. Bill's description felt adequate, since I learned so many things from their discussion. The veela bit was a nice reference to HP books and it was cute how Bill is already smitten with Fleur.

The one thing that was missing was when Bill actually left from table to get more drinks? He was there asking about it, and then he was just gone?

I feel like Tonks and Remus established a tentative friendship here. There wasn't many clues about how they relationship is about to change, but I quite like that they aren't head over heels in love instantly.

Tonks has been tripping over her feet quite many times in these two chapters. While she's clumsy, maybe that characteristic could be shown off with some other method for a change.

This chapter would benefit of beta reading, if you find it hard to spot inconsistencies. There were quite many little things throughout the chapter, like wondering -> should be wandering (the beginning and the end of chapter), there were some words missing from ends of sentences and some phrases didn't quite sound right.

The strongest part of this fic is your Tonks. I like her alot, and I'm interested in reading more just because she's so fresh and funny. =) The details about her life were really nicely planned too, like the primary school detail.

The story flow was maybe bit slow in the beginning but then it began pick up speed nicely once we got into the Leaky Cauldron. This story is one of the most promising Remus/Tonks fics out there, so you're off to good start.

Happy writing! If you need help with beta reading or have questions, let me know. =)

Author's Response: Haha it's fine! Ah this review is so long and helpful I'll try and address all the points in it!

Haha yeah I have to say I really love writing Tonks mainly due to her general attitude to life, it's just so lovely and you almost wish that you can be like her, as she doesn't tend to take all that much seriously which makes me envious.

Yeah I realise now that I need to address the thing about Dawlish and where Kingsley stands with Tonks. I have a habit of making men sound like girls and it's really annoying :/

I'm glad that the friendship with Bill and Tonks worked, as that was probably the part I was most worried about, as it's not strictly canon! I'll go and place him in the scene too!

I'm glad that the change in their friendship was good for you, and that it's not too obvious now, and building slowly. I realised that when writing it, but it was mainly due to a lack of a better alternative, so I'll brainstorm some more ideas!

Well, I've already let you know about the beta thing, and I just want to say another massive thank you for pointing out blindling obvious things that I and other people have missed!

-Kiana :D

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Thanks for writing this. I am very much enjoying this story and am looking forward to the next instalment!

Author's Response: I cannot express how glad I am that you like this, I haven't had much feedback on this story so I was worried everyone hated it! Thank you so much :D

-Kiana!

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God I love this story. Seriously, this is one of the few good Remus/Tonks works out there. You best keep updating, or else I'll pester you! Not really, but you know what I mean.

Tonks is just as awesome as she's depicted in the books. Seriously, I fancied the living day lights out of her when I read the series, and she's just as spunky and hilarious as I remember her to be.

Great job. Snap, I'm still geeking out about it.

Kingsley is awesome. It's all just...perfect. I wish I could pick you up from the inside of my computer an d hug you!

Remus...I could die with how perfect this all was. I can't even think of CCs for you.

Update soon, please!

Look at that, I'm begging for another chapter :P

I hope I flattered you into an oblivion, my dear!

Author's Response: Haha I'm so glad that you love it, I can't explain how much it means to me! There's no need to pester me at the moment, the next chapters in the queue so it's ok for now!

I'm really glad that you think my Tonks is similar to the books Tonks! I love her too, and I really didn't want to ruin her character, so I was so excited to read that :D

Hahaha you're actually the second person who said they want to pick me out of my computer! Yay for Kingsley and I'm so glad that you liked him!

Please don't die, but I'm glad that Remus was good enough for you!

You did flatter me, but the chapter should be up soonish :D

Thank you for this wonderfully awesome review,

-Kiana :D

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First of all yay for the wotcha! It's just makes everything more Tonks so good on you for getting one in there!

I think her hate for Dawlish is very much deserved as Dawlish seems to be one of those guys that everybody really hates at least a little bit anyway. So with Tonks being Tonks I can defiantly see why she wouldn't like him.

The hints bewtween Tonk and Remus where lovely. Nice and light little hints to what may happen in the future to keep the reader interested. I especially liked the smiling one with Remus as you described it beautifully.

The pub scene flowed very nicely and seemed to fit in very well with the story so far as it's a good communal place to have different characters meet. So it made the second part of the chapter very enjoyable to read.

Bill. well I loved how you portrayed him as even though there isn't too much said about in in the book I still feel like it fit with his character. I also loved how he was offended that Remus claim to Harry bested his own as it just seems to make him a Weasley in that way as Ron is like that too.

Keep up the good work and feel free to re-request!

~Hallows!

Author's Response: I'm glad that you liked the wotcha I agree that it does make everything more Tonksish, and I can't believe I forgot to include it in the last chapter!

I'm glad that you liked her hate for Dawlish, they just seem to be the type of people who would just clash straight away!

I'm glad that you liked the hints about Remus/Tonks, I wasn't sure if the smile was too obvious so I'm glad that you found it fit :D I try to include them every chapter, as I know the reader loves them!

I'm glad the pub scene worked, as I didn't know how to bring Remus into the story, and I thought it would be a bit weird if it was just the two of them, hence Bill was brought in.

I wasn't too sure about Bill, as like you said he doesn't feature much so I was just guessing really, but I'm glad that you liked him, and the way he got offended :P

Thanks for the great review, and I will re-request when the next chapter's up:D

-Kiana :D

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Hi! I'm here for your requested review! =)

Tonks is one of my favorite characters in HP. So this story should be really fun to read.

You gave us quite a lot of backstory in the beginning of the chapter, but once I got past that, story's pace picked up really well. The rest of it was nicely action oriented, and the whole Guild scene felt natural, although admittedly you could have used the incredible environment JKR has created for Grimmauld Place more vividly in descriptions. The ending was bit abrupt, maybe it could have had some kind of hint to what might happen in next chapter.

Tonks's character was really well written, and Remus sounded quite believable as well, although we didn't get much out of him yet. You forgot to place Sirius before his first line. I mean that there wasn't any description of where he was standing and what he was doing before his first line. In fact, you could add bit more description to all guild members, since they didn't have many lines each in this chapter. That would make them act more naturally.

The dialogue was excellent in most parts. Sirius felt bit out of character, especially towards the end of the chapter. He sounded far too housebroken considering he's a man who has been forced to be inside his parents' weird house that he hates 24/7.

There were some small typos and inconsistencies in this chapter, but nothing major. All in all, it was excellent start for a fic, and most imporantly left me wanting more. =)

If you have questions about this review, you can PM me in forums. Happy writing! =)

Author's Response: Hello there!

Yes I realise know that I probably gave too much backstory at the beginning of the chapter, but I have such difficulty trying to find a place to weave it all in. I'm glad that the rest of the chapter balanced it out though, as I would hate it if it was all slow!

I know I tend to lack description a lot of the time, so thank you so much for pointing out where I could include more. I just always wonder whether I'm boring the reader but including it, so I'll add some more in :)

I'm glad that you liked Tonks' character, and as for Remus I didn't want him to feature too much in the first chapter as I thought it might be a bit odd if she paid him so much attention and didn't know who he really was. I hopefully make up for it in the second chapter ;D

I'll sort out the Sirius issues, it's just hard trying to estimate what he'll act like as he's such an unpredictable character, I'll definitely go back and include some of the pointers about him.

I'll re-read the chapter and get rid of the errors, they always seem to appear no matter how many times I read the chapter, and it's so annoying!

I'm glad that you wanted to read on, and thank you for such a helpful review, I'm definitely going to go back and edit in the pointers :D

-Kiana :D

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HEYYY Kiana!! This was the Remus/Tonks story you were talking bout!!!


Well I really loved the beginning! I loved the way you described Tonks and how you had them meet as well. In typical Tonks fashion, meaning for her to just fall all over him ahah.

I was sad to know that Andy didn't know if Sirius was innocent. It's always so sad when Everyone thinks Sirius is a murder :(

Anyway, I would love to see some more Remus / Tonks interaction!! But the character development is amazing really lol

Great work :)

Author's Response: Hey Mya!

I'm so glad that you loved the beginning and thought it suited her! I mean I couldn't have her meet him normally, of course she would have to fall!

Yes that is always so sad, but hopefully Tonks will get round to telling her mum that Sirius really is innocent.

You get to see them together in the next chapter, well Bill's there too, but they're together!

Thanks for the great review,

-Kiana :D

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I must say that this is quite a interesting idea for a story as I do love the pairing of Remus and Tonks. I'm glad that you have decided to give a go at showing how they came together as the book didn't really give much information about how or when it happened. So it will be very interesting to see what you have come up with here. I can see you have some real fun with this storyline.

Your characterization of Tonks is wonderful as you can defiantly tell that it is her character. Only thing I might suggest is to through a 'Wotcha' or two in as it's kinda like her catchphrase in away. Though other than that I think your wrote her really well. The flow is rather nice with maybe a few grammar slip ups here and there but nothing too distracting. Keep up the good work!

~Hallows!

Author's Response: Yes I do love that pairing too. I think that's why I decided to write it as it was just sprung on us in the books! Yes this story is proving to be rather fun!

I'm so glad that you found her in character, as that was my biggest worry, I'll try and add in some 'Wotcha', but it was rather hard to find the right place!

I'll try and find those grammar slip ups they always seem to get the better of me!

Thanks for the great review,

-Kiana :D

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Oh I love Tonks! She is so... Tonks. I can't find just one word to describe her. I guess if I tried the word would be "supercalifragilisticexpialidocious". Back to her (and you, lovely author).

Your humor really shined in this chapter! The part about her breaking the Statue of Secrecy as a child made me crack up. This character you've built has a very fine sense of irony regarding her own person and I love to see that in fiction, since it's something I do and I love in other people. Hey, if you can't laugh at yourself, you're going to have a boring life!

Also, I really liked how she vaguely remembers something in the papers about a Tournament. Trust Tonks to vaguely recall one of the most important moments in all of HP fandom!

The interactions between her and Remus are so sweet, it's like she's testing the ocean's temperature with a toe and he's well...Remus!

As for Remus, you described him really in character here. We all have this image of Remus, the professor, the Marauder, but I was reminded reading this of the part in the books where he says Harry (and us, by extension) has only seen him at Hogwarts or with the Order. I think prejudice against werewolves is so. unjustified. He goes through a transformation once a month in the night time. He might need a day or two off if it doesn't fall on a weekend. And come to think of this, why isn't anybody selling Wolfsbane Potion? You're all a bunch of full grown wizards, wands and all, scared of something you have the ability to control, yet in the whole of the series, only one guy knows how to make the potion that control this illness and that people would gladly take?

Y'all deserve for old "Noseless" to take over.

I'm done with my rant on werewolves rights!

I look forward to reading more of the Tonks/Remus relationship as it develops. Especially since I'm sure she'll offer us more comic relief in the mean time! Good job dear! A very good chapter! Please request again when you update!

Ral

Author's Response: Hey Ral!

I'm so glad that you love Tonks, I can't describe how much that means to me! I'm really glad that you liked the funny parts, as I don't tend to write comedy so I was a little unsure about them! I guess with the irony, I tend to do it too, so it was easy to fit in!

I thought it was important to slip that part in about the tournament, as it does seem like something she would do! I'm glad that you liked the little interactions between the two as well, as I loved writing them!

Yeah I was tempted to go into werewolf rights in this chapter as they make me angry too, but then I realised Bill and Tonks didn't know he was one, so it might be a bit weird!

I enjoyed reading your rant though! I hope you enjoy the next chapter too :D

Thanks for another great review,

-Kiana :D

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Hey there! Thanks so much for doing the swap - and I'm glad to see this is being updated! A bit of Remus/Tonks is always great ;)

I have to say that I love how you're intertwining the two worlds together - you know, like Bill from La Deuxieme Rencontre is the same Bill as he is here and the two events overlap, etc. - because it's so clever. Like world-building inside a world. Mind-blowing stuff, lol.

I love Bill's character, as well, and how you wrote Remus. Bill was so cocky - I could totally see him skipping off to Egypt in search of treasure of adventure, etc. but yet being a sensible, down-to-earth older brother figure as well. I liked the comment about him giving Charlie and Tonks detentions, as well, it added a sort of fairness to him which was nice :) And Remus... well, he practically was Remus from the books, lol. I liked how he was somewhat happy in this - I know he's often tired/ill in the books due to lycanthropy, but the poor bloke can't be exhausted all the time, so it was nice to him be sort of happy for a while :)

Tonks is wonderful, of course. I loved how she doesn't get on well with Dawlish - he always seemed like a sensible, mature, focused kind of person and definitely not like the kind of person who'd get on fabulously with Tonks - because people don't always get on well with everyone at their work, you know. The bit I liked most, though, was when you mention that she doesn't really want to talk to Sirius, etc. It just seemed so true - you would feel a bit odd about talking to a long-lost relative who you thought was a mass murderer, knowing that you should probably tell your parents, but you know it's going to be one of those horribly awkward conversations no one ever wants to have to have, and yeah. It's just such a human thing to think and feel - it really brought her to life.

Also, I loved how you included the 'fan-girl' bit when they're talking about Harry. It was really true to the books - I think I remember her being a bit like that in the fifth one, at the beginning - so it was so nice to see.

The one thing I would say is that perhaps you could put a physical break or something (like the line bar or just a star or something - I use 'X' personally) between the segments where it jumps in time/scene, just to make it a little clearer? It's not overly confusing, but it would make the breaks more obvious and easier to follow :)

Thank you for the swap! I really enjoyed reading this! :)

Aph xx

Author's Response: Hi Aph!

I didn't purposefully mean for both of the stories to come together, it just sort of happened because I wrote this chapter after the one-shot, and I thought it would be a fun thing to include!

I'm glad that you liked Remus and Bill. I always imagined that Bill would be a little cocky, and of course he would give those two detentions, probably partly because he wanted them to suffer *evil laugh!* Then I had to give Remus something to be happy about, it would just be cruel otherwise.

I'm so glad that you liked Tonks. I thought it would be fun to include Dawlish because they would be polar opposites. The thing with Sirius as well, just seemed natural for her, and I think anyone would think the same.

Ooh that is a good idea, I'm usually unsure about what to do, so I just leave it bare, but I think I will add something :)

Thanks for the great review,

-Kiana :D

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well, i would like more of it, update soon..and msg me if u can!! please.

Author's Response: I'm really glad that you liked it means so much to me! The next chapter should be up in 1-2 weeks:) I'll message now!

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Sorry I'm so late on getting your review done...

Right from the first line, your Tonks makes sense. I've never imagined her to be self-assured and assertive about the reasons she'd be a part of the order, so wondering why she's there is perfectly coherent with my idea of her.

I like that you've made Tonks and Charlie just friends, because they're paired in a lot of fics, and I just can't imagine them as such, for some reason. Of course he'd look like he was going to faint, who wouldn't at such news?

I didn't even really feel the pain of the impact. Falling over was such a common occurrence for me, that it seemed as if my body had become resilient to the pain of it all.

As well as having appalling balance, I also had a terrible sense of direction, so I wasn't even sure if I was going the right way. I would have used a locator spell, but given how crowded muggle London is with all the kids on school holidays, I would be breaking the Statue of Secrecy by doing so. Getting called to report to the Ministry for that, would be pretty embarrassing, to say the least.

Kingsley would have a field day if that happened. He's supposed to be my boss, but he's more like an older brother in reality, and spends most of the time teasing me. He's such a lovely person, Kingsley.

In just a few lines, you've got so much expressed: the relationship with Kingsley, that is so fitting with what we know from cannon, Tonks' legendary clumsiness -- for the record, it's very well done, and not just 'oh let's give her a fault and make her clumsy' Twilight-clumsiness.

Haha, the jab at pureblood family ties with cousins and second cousins everywhere! It's actually something I can identify to easily, because I have twenty something direct cousins and something nearing a hundred second cousins on both sides of the family, so yeah, Tonks' confusion really made me laugh!

FIRST MEETING WITH REMUS! Of course she'd fall on top of him, of course. I liked the inclusion of Andromeda as well.

Sirius, you irritating human being. Stop seeing things where they're not.

Your portrayal of Moody is very well done, I'm just slightly surprised that he isn't more snappy, though of course snappy!Moody wasn't really Moody, was it?

Just one tiny thing. At the end, Sirius says 'It was nice meeting you' but hasn't he said a couple of paragraphs previously that he'd already seen Tonks as a toddler? Nothing big, just me being picky...

Overall, I think this was a great first chapter, and very accurate in all your characterisations :)

Author's Response: Hi there, and don't worry about how long it took, at least you did it, I've had some swaps where people don't review back *grumbles in corner*.

I'm glad that you liked the reasoning about why Tonks was there, she never seemed that confident to me either, so it was nice to see that you thought the same.

I've never actually read any stories with Tonks and Charlie paired together, but I just thought it would be natural that they were friends!

Haha I'm glad that you liked those few lines. Tonks' clumsiness is a cute one, not Bella clumsy which is just annoying quite frankly!

I thought it would be fun to include the pureblood link, as I'm with you two on this, I have far too many relatives to know who they all are!

Sirius is just trying to play cupid I think ;) Even if it is in a very in-direct way!

I'm glad that you liked Moody, he's such a hard character to write because in the book he featured in the most, it wasn't even him!

I guess with that line from Sirius it was just he never really knew her before, so this is his chance at getting to know her properly!

Thanks for the review,

-Kiana :D

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Hi
Em here.
Okay so I am not much of a writer when it comes to reviews. So please don't mind the length. I really like Tonks. Her clumsiness and actions are very believable.
I LOVE Sirius in this. He seems so different.
Most importantly I really can't wait for some Tonks and Remus action.
So excited.
I don't like cliff hangers, they just seem to get to me.
I am impatiently waiting now.
Its a great start. I look forward to it.
Em.
You give amazing reviews. I suck at them nevertheless Thankyou for all your help in my story! :)

Author's Response: Hey Em! My reviews were one word when I first started giving them, the more you write, the longer they get :)

I'm glad that you liked Tonks and thought she was believable it means so much to me. And that you liked Sirius too!

Haha I can't wait for the action either, but it may take a while. You will see them talking in the next chapter! Haha and it should be up in the next few days, I just have to finish writing and editing it then it's done!

I'm so the cliffhanger got to you, but I'm glad that you liked it! And it was no problem helping you with your story :)

-Kiana :D

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