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Review #1, by ReeBee Broom Cupboard Kisses

30th December 2013:
Hi there! I'm here for HPFF's 12 days of reviewing competition!

Okay, so here we go.

Characterisation: good! You definitely made Rose come off as conceited in front of Malfoy. But, in front of Ben, she didn't really seem shy, she seemed quite confident. I'm not saying it's a bad thing, I quite like it, but since u wanted her to seem shy, I'm just saying :)

Plot: interesting! Flow was a bit stilted, so maybe adding more description! :) but the basis of the tutoring idea is really strong and a good base :)

Description: as mentioned above, a bit more description would be good for smoothening the fliw :) especially from breakfast to the library. Just a bit on the setting would be good :)

Grammar/Syntax: overall good. Better than I can say for my stories anyway! But, there are commas missing in some places. Other than that nothing major: no typos, grammar errors, etc.

Anyway u have a strong base here! Great job!


Author's Response: Thanks, I was taking a break from this story for a while but have lately been considering coming back to it. Thanks for the advice :) xx

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