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Review #1, by Nicte Reigning Darkness

11th March 2013:
Hi there! This is Nicte with your requested review :)

The beginning of your story is very powerful, I really love the way you set the mood by describing things; I particularly LOVE this sentence: "... was filled with the unsubstantial breath of death."

I don't think Voldemort is capable of actually being happy (but that is a matter of perception), maybe satisfied, but I think there is such a void in him that he is incapable of being happy.

And then you bring this other sentence "... whose ruler was himself" Ooh, goosebumps. It is such a great description of what really is in its mind, the craziness behind it all, behind Voldemort.

You use all the elements that you brought in with you quite nicely, like Nagini hissing when the men entered the room, and didn't forget to bring them up again, which is great.

The fact that Voldemort didn't bother with turning around was amazing; I think it showed the power that Voldemort believed he had (and most likely actually did).

Every phrase that you write describing Voldemort's inner motives is just so powerful that it keeps giving me goosebumps.

About the description, I think you are able to set the mood and the scene quite nicely. I really like that you can take the reader thorough the story like they were really there. I also think that you could try and make the reader actually FEEL the emotions that either Voldemort or the man are feeling; while I felt the power I don't really felt the anger or the anguish of the hopeless man. It was like I was an observer.

As for characterization, I think you portrayed Voldemort really well and that his emotions, his INNER motives were accurate; I do believe that Voldemort was someone that killed because it was the only thing that gave him pleasure. As for the men that entered the room, I'm not sure if they'd be awed or simply proud of presenting this new prisoner to their master (but again, that's a matter of perception).

Overall it's a great piece and I really enjoyed reading it! Thank you so much for your request!

-- Andrea.

Author's Response: Hi there,

Aww, thank you so much for the nice words! :)

I'm really happy to know that this story gave you goosebumps! :D Lol, that may sound a little bit odd, but it means that as a writer I managed to create a story that is believable and the fact that you felt as if you really were there... all I can say is that thanks to you now I'm on cloud nine! :D

I'm so glad that you like my characterization of Voldemort! I agree with you that he couldn't be truly happy. Not in the way that normal people feel. But in my opinion, he had his own definition of that word - an equivalent of 'invincible' or 'strong' and an aggregation of the things that gave him pleasure. So I think he was 'happy' in his own creepy way...

About the other man, from my point of view all he felt right then was fear and hopelessness. But I really didn't want to pay that much attention to him, because he was just another victim, like many before and after him... just a toy in the hands of the Dark Lord. That's why I didn't give him even a name - his identity or feelings just didn't matter. My aim was to show Voldemort's lack of respect to the life, the way he was killing people just for pleasure... all I wanted was to emphasize the fact how unfair and simply wrong his beliefs were.

I'm so glad you enjoyed reading my fanfiction and thank you so much for this simply wonderful review! :)

~Kristen


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Review #2, by Lady Asphodel Reigning Darkness

6th March 2013:
This was very good. I loved the sense of evilness. (Yeah I'ma bit creepy - forgive me.) I enjoyed the description of Voldemort's need to kill and the last moment of the muggle to panic and fear.

Happy writing!

From the review above ^

-Asphodel

Author's Response: No need to worry - I guess I'm a little bit creepy too, judging by the fact that I have written such a story... : D
I'm glad that you like this fanfiction and thanks for the nice words! :)
-Kristen


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Review #3, by soapman333 Reigning Darkness

4th March 2013:
Hey, it me, soapman333 :D!

What an interesting one-shot. I completely agree with what you have written. I thoroughly think that Voldemort didn't care for blood supremacy, but he was using the political dispute to gain power.

Not a lot of words, but each word is full of impact. The whole scene you've created seems to only be about five minutes, and within that five minutes you've managed to capture the essence of this man.

The fact that he is depicted so inhumanely really speaks volumes. The tone of the work as a whole was really dark and made me shiver.

Hmm, I liked the unique perspective, but I would have liked a little more, but, eh, it was an interesting read nonetheless.

Thanks for sending me this story, I hope my review helped :D

soapman333

Author's Response: Hi!

Thank you for the nice words! :)

I'm really happy to know that you like my potrayal of Voldemort and that you think that I've managed to capture the essence of him, because he is a hard character to write and he's complex. I definetly agree that Voldemort was using the political dispute to gain power. I think all that mattered to him was revenge, power and eternal life, not that much the blood status.

It is also really nice to know that you think that every word is full of impact, even thought the story is really short and that the tone of the fanfiction made you shiver. My aim was it to be dark and I'm happy that you think that I've managed to do it.

I know that the story could have been better, but I'm really busy at school, so I did this fanfiction probably for a couple of hours and I couldn't managed to do it the way I wished...

However, I'm glad that you think that this one-shot is unique and interesting! :)

Thanks for this lovely review - it was really helpful!

Yours,
Kristen


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Review #4, by patronus_charm Reigning Darkness

1st March 2013:
Hello, itís Kiana from the Mumford and Sons challenge! Iím so sorry it took so long for me to get round and review this, life came by and decided to annoy me, but hereís the long awaited review!

Can I just say before I read this, how excited I am, as I love this quote! You can do so much with it, so I canít wait to see, and judging by the character list itís going to be good!

I really like how you personified darkness and silence, as theyíre such strong forces/things/feelings? That itís fitting that you did it, and it does so well it created really powerful imagery in your head, that Iím still scared that there may be darkness in the corner of my room!

Voldemortís characterisation was great, and you could definitely imagine it was him. He just seemed so cold and emotionless, and I think thatís rather hard to pull off, but youíve done it effectively, and itís rather chilling, how he shows no compassion towards the mudblood.

The quote was used perfectly! It fitted him so well, and especially how you tied it in, with the fact that no one really escaped from him, and even the purebloods should fear him as well. I think the quote also showed how much Voldemort believed in his views, and how he thought that they were right, when in fact they appeared so warped to normal people!

I thought this was an excellent one-shot, as it was so powerful and chilling, and just the use of the quote was great, and I can see how it formed the basis of this story.

Iíll PM or blog the results, but that wonít be for a while!

-Kiana!

Author's Response: Hi! :)

There is no problem,really - when the life decides to tease us, noone can stop it! :D

I'm glad that you like the way I've described the blackness - my goal was it to be realistic and I am happy that you think I've managed to do it! (but my aim definetly wasn't to scare my readers - hope you don't have nightmares! I am starting to feel guilty... xD )

I'm also glad that you like my portrayal of Voldemort and that you think that the quote was used perfectly!

I fell in love with that quote too - it is awesome and I think I was really lucky to have it. When I read it for the first time, I just knew it is for Voldemort. As you said, it shows him in so many aspects - not only as a person happy with his view of the World, but as a person not able to see that other's truth can be correct too and underestimating other's on the whole. I kind of think that that was his biggest mistake - thinking that everyone else is wrong, feeling triumphant withouth any reason behind it and not opening his eyes for the truth.

Thank you so much for the nice words. This wonderful review really made my day! :)

Yours,
Kristen


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