Hii. I'm Em, Thankyou for the swap.
I like how you are able to describe love. I kind of get what you are saying.
I would have liked if this story was longer, there was A LOT you could have added.
Everything happens in seconds and I'm just like wow, it ended already.
The character of Tonks reminded me of Bella, from Twilight. Remus's reaction and all that. I for one do not think that is a bad thing. I'm not really a twilight fan either but it had its pros and cons.
I would like to see more depth in your stories. Your writing style is fine don't worry much about it. You just need to work on your sentence structure. I have issues with that too. It goes away with practice. I'm sorry I did not mean to be harsh. Just helping you out. Thanks for the swap!
EmAuthor's Response: LOL thanks:)
Yeh I know what you mean thank you for your advice. I haven't written in a while so I'm a bit rusty:(
I'll review your story straight away:):)
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