Hey there, it's THG from the forums here with your review. I was so happy to discover that this story was told from the point of view of Remus Lupin. He's probably my favourite character in the entire Potter universe. I also cannot continue without commenting on how stunning the banner is.
Ok so your writing style is actually making me drool right now. You. Are. Seriously. Talented. Is it possible to say that your writing was so good that I found myself not actually taking anything in at first because I was just like 'why can't I write like this???'
To start with I really enjoyed the linear chronological structure of this piece and how it embodied such a large amount of time in a mere five potent paragraphs. It was very insightful and added a definite sense of inevitability to the atmosphere which in turn made me feel all the more sorry for Remus.
The concept in itself is very brilliant. Personally I've never been much of a fan of Lily/James purely due to the fact that there's not much room for flexibility or surprise with them. Ships such as Lily/Severus, Lily/Sirius and this one are much more intriguing to me and from what I know of Lily's character I always thought that she and Remus would make a good match. This role in the story is so fitting to Lupin because until very late in his life he's always been an almost tragic kind of figure who has missed out on so much due to external circumstances that he has no control over. For that reason the prospect of him only being able to love Lily from a distance is very believable and I like that you've decided to explore that in this piece.
I also love the ambiguity of this piece and how vocatives are only used in the dialogue. It works well to reinforce the universal concept of wanting from a distance because I do honestly think that at one point or another in their lives everybody has experienced this dilemma to some degree or another.
Overall I thought this was a really stunning piece of writing for a really touching and beautiful story.
THGAuthor's Response: Oh, wow, I never imagined that you would be able to get a review to me so quickly! That is so sweet of you.
I will agree with you on how stunning the banner is. Without even me asking, it really portrays the "loving from a distance" theme that this story has and I remember I stared at the banner for a good few minutes when I first saw it. It's beautiful.
You're making me blush with what you said about my writing! Thanks so much for saying that, it really means a lot to me.
I have always adored the idea that Remus was in love with Lily. I agree with you that he is such a tragic character. I feel horrible for doing it to poor Remus, but I love the idea of putting more hardship on him by allowing him to love Lily but never being able to have her. I'm glad that you thought that this wasn't too farfetched!
Your words have brightened my day up so much and I can't thank you enough for what you have said in this review! You managed to understand what I was trying to convey while writing this and having a reader say that is something really special.
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This is so good! But it also made me really sad, because Remus/Lily is such a beautifully sad pairing that is not done enough. A nice little one shot.Author's Response: I agree the pairing is not done enough. I think it's beautifully tragic and loved writing this, even though it was pretty sad.
Thanks for your kind words!
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