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Review #1, by ShadowRose A Promise.

16th April 2013:
It's ShadowRose, with your requested review!

First of all, I'm so sorry that this took so long... Life just got crazy.

Wow, this story is very powerful. I was very much in touch with Draco's feelings throughout, because they are just so clearly expressed in the descriptions you use. He seems so accessible as a character, and all of his reactions and feelings seem realistic given the situation, and it's really clear that he's scarred by the war.

I got overly excited when I saw that this was a Les Miserables-based story, because I have an unhealthy obsession with the book/play/movie. I was just reading along going, "ooh, there's a parallel! and another! and another!" I like how you've portrayed Nymphadora as a Fantine-esque character here.

I like how you've used the tie in the trial to build up tension, as Draco's stuck in limbo. It's definitely more interesting than a definite call either way, and leaves the reader waiting to find out what comes next.

Draco's thoughts are brilliantly executed, and I really feel like I get inside of his head. What's even better, you do this while in third-person POV. While I absolutely adore third-person, some writers struggle with still being able to fully display their characters while writing in this tense. Clearly, you don't have a problem like that at all. :)

The flashback is great, and creates a nice build-up of tension for the next chapter. I especially liked hearing Narcissa try to force Draco to tell the Wizengamot of the promise, because it really ties that element of the plot into the previous trial.

The only CC I have, and I'm not even sure I can call it a CC because it's just a suggestion, and not all that necessary to the quality of the story, but more like a random comment on my part, is this: I wish the scene between Bellatrix and Nymphadora could have lasted a little longer. I think there's so much potential in that short scene alone, what with their familial relationship and distant connections, that I feel like there's so much more that could have gone into it. But, as I said, it's perfectly fine as is too. :)

Overall, this was an absolutely brilliant start to a promising novel, and I'm looking forward to seeing what else you have in store. :)

-ShadowRose

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Review #2, by HallowsAndHorcruxes A Promise.

6th April 2013:
I must say that I really admire how you have written this story. I flow is a slower pace but as it does so it builds up the tension so we get some relief when we find out it is a tie. I also love the fact that it is a tie and not freedom or imprisonment as it gives more suspense to the story and leads the reader on to find out what will happen to him.

While this is a story I probably wouldn't have chosen to read myself I actually found that I rather liked the storyline. It is something different yet the story is still compelling to read because the atmosphere that has been created within the words. At first when I thought about Draco looking after Teddy I wasn't so sure, but after the flash back I feel more at peace with the idea and so am interested to see how you would play that, if that does come around.

But I must say how you have played Draco in this situation is marvelous and really how I would imagine his character to be after the battle of Hogwarts. I really couldn't fault it as it is what makes the situation so believable and is probably why I rather like the story even though I prefer humor. So a very good job well done!

~Hallows!

Author's Response: AH, okay! Thank you so much for this review! It really was helpful.

You pointed out a lot of things that I was worried about, and so thank you so much for your input.

And yes, I'm hoping to pick up the pace soon. So thanks for pointing that out.

Thank you so much!


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Review #3, by tortoise A Promise.

26th March 2013:
I loved your in-depth analysis of Draco's character and thoughts, which I think is the most important aspect of any Draco story, as Draco's inner thoughts aren't seen as much in the canon novels as much as the trio. This story seems very promising and has an interesting plot basis!

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Review #4, by patronus_charm A Promise.

23rd March 2013:
Hello there I’m here with your requested review!

I thought it was really interesting how you depicted Draco’s thoughts. I liked how you made him more human by feeling humiliation, because I do feel that Draco would have felt like that, so it was really interesting, and it tied in perfectly with his real life situation of him appearing before the Wizardgamot.

This remorseful and less confident Draco was refreshing to read, because most of the stories I’ve read about him post-Hogwarts involve him being normal again, and I don’t think that’s accurate, so I much prefer your interpretation. I liked how honest he was too, and the way you brought up Dumbledore’s death, because without that it wouldn’t have felt so complete.

I saw this was missing here – ‘It given to me as my responsibility.’, after it :) There was another typo here – ‘Harry Potter's site’ I think you might sight instead.

I liked Draco’s reaction to the outcome of the trial. It made sense for it to be a draw, and you showed his raw emotion really well, and it was interesting to see how far he had sunk and that he was just crying in public, and he could do nothing to stop himself from doing so.

That twist with his promise and Tonks was great. I think it would have made sense that on her death bed she would want a relative to take care of Teddy, and it was done so well that it made me have tears in my eyes thinking about her. It would be interesting to see how Draco would handle bringing up a child, as I never imagined him being overly paternal. Then there would be the whole issues with Andromeda.

The flashback was executed brilliantly, and you got a real sense of emotion the pair of them must have been feeling. It makes sense why Tonks asked him to look after Teddy now, and I liked how Draco’s change of heart was shown again by him following her and not Bellatrix.

Overall I thought the post war feel was great and the trial was really interesting to read. The only CC is perhaps have another read through to catch any more typos out!

-Kiana :D

Author's Response: Hello there, Kiana!!

Ahh thank you SO MUCH for this great review! I can't tell you how much it means to me. Thanks so much for your input. I'd been really worried about this and how believable it seems, but you really reassured me about it.

Thank you so much for your input. I'll definitely give it a read over! Thanks again! :)


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