That was just so sweet. You should rename yourself. King of Sweetness! Meh, that sounds lame. Never mind.
So, Lily. Where to start? She was so sweet, just that little bit insecure and very sassy. Scotty was just adorable, full stop. Also, I love how she rejects him out of insecurity, not because she hates him, so you're not just recycling the James/Lily scenario.
I think you are going to give me a heart attack with how amazing your stories are. My tombstone will say: Death by sweet fluffy stories. RIP.
Ehem... Anyway. Keep posting heart-attack-inducing work!Author's Response: Oooo! Have you just given me the title, King of Sweetness?! I'm adding it >:D
soapman333: King of Fluff and Sweetness
I can feel the power!
Whenever I write Lily, I always end up making her sassy. I don't know what happens :O!
Oh, this reminds me, I don't know if you've noticed, but I've kind of cycle through names, and there is a reason for this. I like it when readers that have read multiple things pick up on little allusions I make across my different stories. For example: The quidditch game in Kiss Me is won by Gryffindor because the seeker, Scott Thompson, catches the snitch.
Coincidence? No way >:D
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Gah! Why am I reading your stories? Kicked me right in the feels, that did!
I loved that she thought he got ten owls when he only got seven...so cute!
:)Author's Response: Heh, this is another older piece of mine :P
I just re-read it a day or two ago...it's a wee bit embarrassing, but I still crack up at the man-hands part. Every single time.
Oh yes, the confusion that keeps the two apart is over test scores :P silly Lily
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I know you've written a few one-shots and other stories, I've read all of them a while ago. I just never took the time to review them. I know... shame on me! Usually, I only review stories after a few chapters and that's impossible to do with one-shots (Shut Up and Kiss Me was an exception). This time I decided to comment an one-shot because you're an amazing author.
I'm reviewing this one because I've read it several times. For some reason, I keep remembering parts of this story and, when that happens, I like to come here and re-read it.
My favourite part is the one that gives the name to the story: "Shut up, or I will punch you". I remember that I laughed when I first read it.
Anyway, great story, as usual. Please, keep writing! I love everything you've posted so far!
P.S. Sorry if my English isn't perfect, it isn't my native language.Author's Response: INES?! You're back to leave another freaking amazing review? Geez, I wish I could hug you, but, alas, I cannot :/
Oh man, I'm blushing :P You flatter me so :D
My silly ole' one-shot made such an impression on you that you come back and re-read through it? Wow, I believe that is the most flattering thing that I've ever read.
You, my dear, are an angel!
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AAAW So cute :)
I almost got a crush n Scott right there. Spilling out his heart and all. I have never seen a guy do that.
I personally don't understand Lily did not say yes earlier, if she liked him so much... wierd girl she is.
Those Potter kids are really something to write about, aren't they. I like it a lot myself and you do a great job with it.
You got me laughing again, that's 3 stories in a row! Congratulations!
keep on going on!
MayaAuthor's Response: I got you to laugh three times?! *fist bump*
This is my first one-shot. I'm glad you enjoyed it :D
You leave such lovely reviews,
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The relationship between Scott and his dad seemed nice, and you could tell that his dad was trying to be close to him, despite his mum leaving. Just a little Brit pick, you said mom when it should be mum :)
I liked that he was best friends with Fred, as they both seem to be quite comical, so it fitted well that they would be good friends. It made it even more funny that Scott liked his cousin, it was funny to see how blunt she was in his answer. It reminded me of James and Lily a lot.
Another Brit pick, we wouldn’t say trash bin, it would just be bin, or rubbish bin :)
AW! I loved Lily spewing all of that out, as it was great in two ways. The first being boring, but we got to learn more about his character, and the second being, it sounds as if Lily was admitting some feeling about him, due to that line about him attracting all the guys with his smile.
Again it was another great ending, but here they actually kissed, rather than you alluding to it. Either way, it made me even feel fluff satisfied so yaya!
-Kiana!Author's Response: My first one-shot...I don't know whether to be embarrassed by it, or to embrace it like a man. Okay, I'm embracing it.
Oh no! My American is showing! I'll go in and fix those at some point, thanks for pointing them out :D
Ha, Lily...I have a fondest for the little Potter. I'm glad you enjoyed the story, thanks for leaving such wonderful reviews!
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Hey! I really like this. Scott is so sweet an I hav never seen Lily Luna saying no.
Though I did feel tht more description and emotion could be mentioned since I didn't feel as happy as I could have when Lily L. Potter.
Besides that great job!Author's Response: Yeah, this was my first shot at a one-shot, so it's not that great.
I'm slowly learning how to describe things :/ I'm used to just using dialogue to push a story.
I shall be a better writer, eventually! Thanks for reviewing :) Report Review
Hey there, I didn't lie, I'm here for our swap. I'd better see a review of something of mine, read whatever tickles your fancy. I warn you though, some of the things I write are awfully pervy.
Anyhoo, on to this! I don'd read many stories from a first person POV so this was a nice change and I really liked Scott righ away. The awkward drive with hsi dad sort of reminded me of many with my mom (Though I'm a lovely lass) and I liked the brief little background you gave them. For some reason, the fact that his mother left them was overshadowed by me laughing at the fact that she had "man hands". I shouldn't have laughed but that was your intention right? :D Hahah. I hope so, cause otherwise I feel dead awful!
Anyway, so that rejection from Lily was just pretty embarrassing but I'll give Scott some credit, he didn't break down and get all angsty. I was wondering why Lily would reject him though, I perhaps would have wanted some backstory on that but I got it later. :D
So, with all the things that he did tell her, I had to laugh at how you burst Lily's bubble. I mean, its pretty different from how girls see things from boys, I'm assuming and I really enjoyed that. And of course, the moment when he was going on about why he was in love with her didn't hurt either. ;)
But...one thing, when he fell off his seat in the compartment, where'd Fred go? That was the only thing that bothered me, and unless I read it wrong, he either vanished or was still knocked out. Hahahaha.
So, anyway, this was a good read, I wish it had been a tad longer but that's the thing with one-shots. They sort of suck that way. :D
But I really enjoyed this! :D
I shall see you on the forums!
GabbieAuthor's Response: Oh, you read my first one-shot, I cringe when I read through it because of all the grammatical errors. I should go back and fix those, but, eh, I'll live with it.
Yes, I was hoping people would laugh at the "man-hands" thing :P I wanted the kid to have a sadish background, but I wanted him to not really care about it (that didn't make sense. Moving on. . .).
Thanks! Fred, oh I had him sneak off when little Scotty was sleeping, but I forgot to mention that (cringe again), but I think he also "forgot" about Fred when he saw Lily. So, eh, whatever.
Yes! One-shots rock!
Thanks for reviewing (very helpful),
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Awww I think I need a tissue! Damn soapman333, you good. You REAAAL good. Totally loved Lily's character in this.
A+, 10/10, added to favouritesAuthor's Response: *blushes* thanks :D! I'm very grateful for both of your reviews, they're very helpful and flattering! Wow, thanks again.
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WOW! This is the best one shot I've ever read. The right amount of humour, drama and romance. I like that this showed a love-hate relationship slightly differently, most people just recycle the James and Lily dynamic- "arrogant, bullying toerag." I like that this one had different reasoning and a less predictable dynamic. Thanks for uploading this. I really needed something realistically cheerful to read. :)Author's Response: Oh wow, this review is very flattering. Thank you! Ha, yes, I hoped to create a good contrast to those stories, I'm very glad that you enjoyed it :D
Thanks a million times over,
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This was lovely - slightly sappy at times, but overall really nice :) I think your characterization really helped to make it believable.Author's Response: Why thank you! It's amazing to hear that you like the character development. They're my mind children, so they're close to my heart.
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