I just HAVE to review something of yours before you go :( I don't know when you'll be back but I hope you won't be gone for long!
Anyway...BAHAHAHA MALFOY. Gosh, you've written him wonderfully here! So cold, and so irritable and so frustrated and so...pathetic in a way.
But no, Greengrass hated him with enough passion to keep him interested, no matter how violent their interactions got.
This sentence really sums up his feelings SO WELL. Ah, Draco. He's just this privileged kid who grew up getting every single thing he wanted, all the attention from his friends and fellow Slytherins and then along comes Greengrass, who really doesn't care about the purity of his blood and who just refuses to even acknowledge him. POOR DRACO HIS EGO MUST BE SOSOSO BRUISED :P It's a lovely fic you've got here; it's tragic, it's bitter at times, but it's also a little funny - funny at how pathetic Malfoy is, at how ridiculously human you've made him. And that is always a good thing.
I love the contrasting scenes with Pansy and Astoria. You've written Pansy really nicely here: she's softer - though she does have her hard-girl moments, and the other times when she gets pretty catty and all...I love that little conversation Draco has with her. If only Draco could really appreciate the friendships he has around him, the respect of those who've given it to him instead of, y'know, fixating on someone who just hates his guts.
And then Astoria. BAhahaha! Draco has the dirtiest fantasies of her XD And when they finally do have a confrontation, Astoria is just like many of your other girls that you write; she's fiery, independent, and she can totes stand up for herself. AND THERE WAS SO MUCH SEXUAL TENSION OMG. Bahaha! Draco was getting a bit...unrestrained there.I was sort of thinking, Malfoy, you're a bloody prefect! What are you doing... And of course, it's ultimately an unsatisfactory encounter for him. And Astoria is as much of an enigmas as ever.
ANDANDAND you included George & Angie ♥ Oh they're SO NAUGHTY THOSE TWO. Gah LOVE THEM.
Sigh. OK Gabbie. This is such a lovely story. You've really taken apart Malfoy's character and turned him inside out and just written him so beautifully. I've really enjoyed this ♥
Take care Gabbie! And please do come back when you can to keep writing! Best of luck with everything! ♥
♥ tehAuthor's Response: Hello!
Uwah, this just makes me so happy! I leave for basic in about an hour and was just thinking about how nice it would be to get a review and here you are! :D
So many hearts...
I really think that writing Draco is the most fun someone like me can have. I wanted to play with all of his crazy emotions and its true, he is sort of pathetic in his own way. For many reasons, he can't let it go that someone he considers beneath him could really care less what he wants. I think he takes advantage of the riches and friends he does have and I wanted to play around with that. Its going to bite him in his tight little bum. ;)
Why thank you for liking this fic! I wrote it weeks and weeks ago but had just stuffed it into the queue the other night to get it up here and ready for you all. :D
I think making Draco human and not this supremely magnificent god-like monster is the best way to go. :p
Pansy came out easier to write than I would have ever thought but I did the contrasting scenes with her versus Astoria on purpose, just to hint that Draco was missing out on what was important. And honestly, he should pay attention to the friends he does have and the girl that obviously likes him instead of the monster that he can't leave alone.
Sorry, Astoria. HEHEHE.
BWHAHAH, when it comes to her, Draco's fantasies are pretty disgusting but I had so much fun writing them! Dirty teenage boys are my favorite things to write! ;)
But anyway, Astoria may have come off very strong in that scene with him but on the inside she was probably crying. She really can't stand Draco and that's the fun of writing their fights and playing with that sexual tension too. HEHEHE.
Indeed! Draco was getting kind of vicious but it got worse for him right when he might have done something really bad. Astoria punched him and punched him good. :D
And she is an enigma, a walking one that hates him and that is why he wants her so badly. Draco, I think, is just weird that way.
Of COURSE I had to add in George and Angie, they're much too cute and SO much fun! :D
They were swimming naked in the Black Lake, just so you know. ;)
*Blush* Oh, stop! I'm really glad that you liked this, I wasn't sure if anyone would really but getting inside of Draco's mind was actually sort of scary. But delightful. Like too much cake.
Or fat kittens in the room. :D
I shall take care and keep you and all my other pets--I mean, friends on the forums, in my thoughts! Thank you so much! :)
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Hi Gabbie! I wanted to get this review in before you left, so I'm glad that I got some time for it, since I don't think I'll have time to review Albus before you go :( But it will be waiting for you when you get a chance to get back! :)
So, of course, I adored this! Draco is just so creepy, but I love it! You write him so well, it really gives me the shivers!!! I would hate to have him after me like that, and I would definitely not be able to stay as composed as Astoria seems to, even if she's horrified on the inside!
I really loved Draco's converation with Pansy, too. I think everyone automatically doesn't like her, and it was really interesting to see a softer side of her, with her own insecurities and worries for her future, and meeting the expectations of Pureblood society. It was really fascinating!
And of course I thought George and Angie were hilarious! For everything that Draco wants to do to Stori, he still gets uncomfortable around the pair of them flirting so outrageously! That was really funny, and added some lightness to the story that I really thought was fantastic!
This story was brilliant, and I'll definitely read and review Albus for you, even if you don't get a chance to see it for a while, and will have updates waiting for you when you get back! And I will definitely be rereading your stories and wishing I could review more than once! 10/10
Cassie :)Author's Response: Hello!
Oh, Cassie, this is the nicest thing! I almost burst into tears becuase I was so happy to see your review. :D
It will be nice to get your review later for Albus and I'll get to it whenever I can. :D
As for this story, Draco Malfoy is back and he's as creepy as ever. I wanted to have fun with his character and play with all of his weirdo emotions and I'm with you, I would not want this creep following me or lusting after me.
Astoria hates him very much and she has to stay as strong as she can, even when it seems like she's about to cry. HAHAH.
I think everyone does assume that Pansy is just another mean girl but when I'm sure that she was just as insecure and nervous as anyone else. Of course, that's no excuse for her being a horrid bully but she is just another girl and the contrast between her and Astoria is made clear with Draco's interaction with her and their place in pureblood society. ;)
But he doesn't want her you know!
Bwhaha, George and Angie had to make an appearance in this. They'd already shown up in "Monsters in the Dark" briefly but I thought it'd be funny to have them show up again for this one-shot. If you were wondering, they'd been swimming naked in the Black Lake, giving birth to that rumor that Angie has a mole and that Fred thought they'd done the dirty. HAHAHA.
I think humor and angst work wonderfully well, which is why I had to include some funny moments. ;)
Wagh, I wish I could respond to your review for Albus now! D': But thanks so much for all that you do and have done when it comes to my stories, you're simply the best.
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Argh, this is wonderful! You've kept Draco in character, which you don't generally see in fanfic-he's usually serenading or seducing Hermione :P I love Astoria though, and I'd love to find out more about her, like, why she's called a Breed and why she hates purebloods- that is, if it's purebloods she hates rather than something else. Your descriptions were wonderful, and I loved to get inside Draco's head which I don't very often, I tend to stray away from Draco fics- again, he's mostly OOC in those. I also loved the teenage raunchiness in this, it's there, as it is there in real life, but not too much ;) A great read dear, and I'll miss you once you're gone!
-AishaAuthor's Response: Hello!
That was quick, I wasn't expecting this really soon but thanks so much! I shall have to hop on over to your page and leave you some reviews as well!
To be honest, I have never been much of a Draco fan but keeping him in character was important for me on some things. On others, his character is a tad different but that's what's great about fanfiction! I could make him wear a dress if I felt like it! >:D
Bwhaha, I actually really like Dramione but its true, you don't see him actually with Astoria at all. If you want to know more about Astoria Greengrass and all of her oddness, you can read the story this comes from, "A Force of Wills" on my author page. Be warned, its very mature and uhm, might make you slightly paranoid. :D
Oh, the "breed" comment is from her being half-blood. Sadly, that's how people refer to dogs sometimes and well, Draco's a jerk.
Why Astoria hates purebloods is also in "A Force of Wills" (See that shameless promotion?) so you can get more information on that.
Thanks so much! I love detail and getting into Draco's mind was really icky, he sort of grosses me out even while I enjoy writing him.
Bwhaha, raunchy is a good word to describe this but the actual story is so much worse. And Draco's lust for Astoria is really unsettling, I wanted to make that clear, he goes beyond just having a simple crush. ;)
Waaagh, thanks for stopping by! I shall miss you and so many others once I'm gone!
I'll try to visit!!! D':
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I love this story. Draco seems perfect, Astoria is HOT. The eyes. OMG. They add such a sexy touch.
Draco's lust is very well described and so is pansy. The hissing and coldness. I love thiss!
And Gabriella, you will be missed!xxAuthor's Response: HellO!
Hey there, I think I just left you a review so go check that out! ;)
I'm glad that you liked this story, it just popped into my head a few weeks ago but I just uploaded it yesterday. Hahaha. I actually forgot about it.
Draco is scary! He bothers me ALOT hahahaha but he's so much fun to write! And you think Astoria is sexy? That's a new way to describe her! But her eyes...I guess they are sort of sultry, which would not be her intention. HAHAHA.
She's mean. :D
I'm glad that you liked Draco's lust and his friendship with Pansy! Bwhahaha, Slytherins are fun to make hiss and I'm glad that you liked this! :D
D': Everyone keeps making me sad...I'll miss you guys alot!
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