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Review #1, by miluv Gone.

2nd February 2013:
really reallly reallly good. short, but good. :D

Author's Response: Thanks!


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Review #2, by CloakAuror9 Gone.

28th January 2013:
Oh my gosh. There are tears in my eyes! This is a really good but tragic one-shot. I love how you don't specify any of the characters; the anonymity of everyone adds a totally different dimension to the story. As sad as it is, I love how the ending brings the story to a full circle. It started with death and it ended with death. This was a really nice read! :D

My only crit would be while I was reading the one-shot is that I felt as though every other word was 'and'. I know it's poetic but maybe you can find alternatives to it. Or maybe it was just me. Who knows?

Great job, anyway! I enjoyed it! ♥


66th review out of 100

Author's Response: Wow, thanks! I didn't think that my writing could evoke such emotion in people... cue feel-good-fuzzy feeling :)

I do remember using the word 'and' a lot. I probably at the time did it to be poetic but I probably got caught in the moment. I didn't think I would be uploading this either so this wasn't edited or anything...

Thank you so much!


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