Go, James! I'm filled with an odd sense of pride whenever someone talks back to Ginny, it's so very rare. She can be scary. :P
N-no, what accident? What happened to Blake's parents? I feel so sad already, like I can maybe guess why Ginny was there instead of his parents... And then they were so close and were interrupted and James ran away, looking ashamed? Oh, James! Now he's upset. I'm upset, too, Blake. It's okay. *Hugs Blake*
I really liked this chapter and I can't wait for more. I need to know what happened and the accident! And I want some James/Blake... But I'm willing to wait for that one. :)
Sam.Author's Response: Thanks :) We will find out about the accident soon enough. It takes longer to write sad things :( happier news I have more free time so I will try to get a couple more chapters up in the next week or two :) Report Review
I really like the detail you put into the spellwork, how there are new spells but they still make sense within the Harry Potter universe.
I also like how you've portrayed Ginny as a protective mom; it seems to fit her perfectly.
All I could possibly ask for would be more detail. I really want to know exactly what's happening; this story's interesting.Author's Response: Thanks so much :D I finally got the second chapter done now it just to be posted and it has a lot more detail, I wanted to introduce my main characters for now ;p Report Review
So, I enjoyed this first chapter. Blake seems as accident prone as his father (I assume he is Seamus Finnigan's son :P) and just as adorable. I love that he's friends with James, though I wonder why they'd call James' mum and not Blake's mum.
The only thing I wanna to mention is the last big paragraph; all the talking is there and it was kinda confusing I'd suggest breaking it up. :)
Other than that, I really liked this!
I'll look out for more.
Sam.Author's Response: Thank you so much! I pretty much had given up hope on this story until this review :D not to mention it being from one of my favorite authors on this site. Looking back i did notice what you meant, and I found a couple more mistakes I want to fix. Report Review
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