Ummm please don't stop...if you are board post more chaptersAuthor's Response: Ha sorry! The next one will be up soon. I promise. Report Review
I have to admit that I secretly read till chapter 6 without leaving a review... I was a little to curious to stop for the review box and type a few short words. But I felt really guilty about that and ended up going back to chapter 3 to leave a review. I promise to leave more on the other chapters as well.
I loved James' banter with his owl. *Giggles again just thinking about it*
I thought it was foolish, but also really sweet that he wanted to learn Ellie's timetable by heart. If a boy would do that for me...
It was really mysterious that Leo said: I have my reasons, that was one of the thinks that had me reading on without leaving a review. Than again I haven't found those reasons yet in the chapters to come... will you reveal them one day?
Lily acted like a little spoiled princess, but later I learn she's got more to her than meets the eye... that's one of the strange thinks about leaving a review for a chapter a few chapter passed where you are now... You get to know the characters in different light and find you were a little wrong on the first impression.
Anyways... nice chapter. I'll leave another review soon :)
MayaAuthor's Response: Gah! So yes, sorry this was my first story...so there are many errors.
Many, many, MANY errors.
I don't start really getting into anything until about the eleventh chapter, as weird as that sounds. I got really into developing my characters.
Right, well I'm off to sneak around and look at cat pictures on the internet! I'd love to hear what you have to say about the following chapters if you have the time to leave another review. Or you could just IM me. That works too. Report Review
I love this chapter. I always wondered how they ended up together. How did Leo and Scorpious meet? And why spoons? Why not forks? (I agree that spoons are better)
Why did James ask Albus to tell him and not Leo? Is it because James already knows that there's something Leo's not telling him? Or was it a coincidence, specially since Leo looked tired?
InesAuthor's Response: I'm finally responding! Sorry for the delay :P
Oh they don't discriminate in the throwing of utensils, but spoons are very important for other uses besides throwing.
Good questions! James chose Albus because Leo looked like he was going to fall over :P Report Review
Is it normal that when I saw you had a new chapter up, I was so happy that I literally choked on my soft drink? No? Okay then. Forget that.
Sooo, anyway. Nice chapter here, if a bit short. Don't worry Jack, I'm very proud of you. Ah, the origin of the spoon-throwing. Nice to know!
I absolutely loved the bantering between Scorp and Leo in the flashback. I was seriously giggling to myself like a loser the whole way through.
More hints of Chleo! Yay!
The Al-development in preparation for the sequel has begun, I'm guessing?
Oh, and an error I spotted: At the beginning, Al says 'The bigger the bottom number, the small the number?!' I think that's meant to be 'the smaller the number'.
PS-I've nominated this story for the 'Follow the Butterflies' Diadem, ie the diadem for the best fluff.Author's Response: I'm drinking a soft drink right now! Is this fate? I think so. Sorry, I haven't been on the forums yet, mostly because I'm a wee bit busy. I'll be on there soon :).
You're proud of me?! Yes!
Yes, this chapter has just beaten out James' meltdown as my favorite. It was tough, but I think Scorpius' opposition to swearing did it for me. I know, I wrote it, so this sounds like complete gibberish...oh well. Nonsensical responses are my speciality.
It has! Albus is becoming a major character. Oh man, the sequel. So excited to get that first chapter up!
Oh yes, I'll go fix that now, thanks!
PS-I just had a spaz attack reading this. You did?! Woah...really?! Report Review
When I saw the title of this chapter I couldn't stop laughing (I'm quite lucky that I'm on my own, because otherwise people might think I'm going crazy), especially if I'm right in what I'm thinking will be coming up soon.
There weren't any questions at the end of this chapter, which means you're going to have to put up with my rambling and (probably incoherent) thoughts on it. Lucky you!
A whole chapter written in Albus' POV was really enjoyable and it's definitely going to help you set up for the sequel. It seems like extra compensation since he didn't appear at all in the last chapter.
One thing I really liked here was that you gave us a reason why Albus was put in Slytherin. It was his choice, but we can also see that he lacks some of the braveness and courage that are typically Gryffie traits. A lot of writers just tend to stick him in there without any real explanation of what makes him a Slytherin. His general obliviousness (is that a word?) to all things romantic is quite endearing.
The flashback to how they became friends was really enjoyable. The thought of a young Scorpius and Leo makes me laugh so much (I can't help it - if they weren't so funny I might not seem like a madwoman to my flatmates). The idea of them calling Albus crazy is even funnier, and they're such a double act already when they're just young kids.
The spoon throwing, of course, is a very important point of the story. Pivotal, I'd say. And I'm pretty sure you hid some deep metaphors in this chapter too...I just don't have the mental capabilities of working them out right now.
Sian :)Author's Response: Sian?! What a beautiful name!
Were you laughing because of the spoon thing I have going on this story? Heh, yeah I was really excited to write this chapter when I got the idea for it!
Him not appearing in that last chapter was a mistake :/ oh well, yeah...I also wanted to try and explain Ellie's social "situation" in her first few years, because a few readers asked about that.
Ha, I love how blissfully oblivious Albus is "to all things romantic," it gives him a realistic quality for sure. Plus it ties in perfectly with the sequel! So excited!!
Ah yes, young Leo and Scorp are SO crazy that they need a "sane" person to balance them out, eh? My sister loves how Leo and Scorp have developed in such a way that they've "clinged" unto Albus. For example: they drag him to quidditch practice.
Oh yes, very, very important. Without the spoon throwing, there wouldn't even be a story. Ha, it's not that deep. Albus is the "bent spoon." Well, I guess you could make it go deeper than that, but it's just a silly-fluffy novel.
Cool! Always wonderful hearing from you, and I expect that you'll be at that meeting tonight. Very important matters to discuss :P
Jack Report Review
Okay I'm probably a jerk for not reviewing this whole time, but let me just say I love this!!! This is really great! It's your first story so it's a little rough around the edges but honestly it's got a great plot and great characters!! Please update soon!
CleaAuthor's Response: Hello there, Clea,
I'm just glad that you're reading and enjoying it, so no worries! It's very, very rough, but fun to write anyway :P These silly characters are just a riot and I'm a bit attached to each of them. :)
Hope to hear from you again,
Jack Report Review
Yaay, an Albus chapter! Haha.
I was glad we got to see a little bit of Albus, how he thinks and of course, the origin of the spoon throwing :P
I thought that this chapter was hilarious. I've said this before I think, but you're so good at writing humour! Personally, I'm terrible at it, but that's probably because I'm the least funny person there is haha. It's a good thing to have under your belt though, to be able to write humour as good as you do.
"The bent ones are their favourite." This line made me laugh quite loudly, earning funny looks from my flat mate hehe.
I love these three together, they always seem to lighten things up and the flash back on how they met was great.
All in all, another fab chapter. Hope you update soon :)
xxAuthor's Response: The origin of the spoon throwing! Woot!
Oh, wow, thank you :D. I'm sure you're plenty funny. To be perfectly honest, I'm absolute rubbish at writing serious so there's that.
The big three are just fun to write and I'm glad that you enjoying reading about those silly kids :P
Thanks again :) Report Review
interesting when will the next chapter be upAuthor's Response: I'm writing it right now, so I'm thinking sometime next week. Maybe the end of this week :) Report Review
Really want to know why James wants to see Ellie! And if he is going to figure out her secret! I thought that your flashback of how they became friends was cute! Please update soon!Author's Response: Hello again! I'm writing the next chapter as we speak :D Gah, no worries. The torture of my silly characters will be finished soon :) Report Review
Aw... James is a lovely character, it must be lots of fun to write him :)
Poor Ellie, she already has a hard time and on top of that comes a stupid rumour to make her even more uncomfortable. Though it is a far fetched rumour, I wouldn't have believed it, but I guess teenagers are a bit slower than me.
You were right to say this is a fun story, it has a bit of drama but not so much that I get frustrated with it (I can't really handle to much drama, it make me uncomfortable :P)
I'm really curious whether James and Ellie will end up together one day. I hope they will :)
Shall I tell you the part I liked the best?
I thought it was really funny when James started rolling around on the floor with laughter. I started giggling right in my cup of tea, which could have ended in a disaster... luckily it didn't.
that's it for today. maybe I'll leave you another review tomorrow, wouldn't that be nice?
MayaAuthor's Response: Hey Maya, welcome back to the rubbish!
James is alright. I shouldn't disclose who my favorite to write is...but its Scorpius. It'll become evident later on :)
I don't know what rumours teens pass along these days...I guessed...
Oh, it's about to get a whole lot more dramatic, my dear, dear Maya. A lot more. But..coming from me...I'm not sure if that's a "big deal." Oh well, let me know what you think when I drop it all on you in these next twenty-ish chapters.
We shall see about Jellie (sweet ship name, right?!)!!
Yes! Do tell! Heh, he's a riot! I'm a fan of James Sirius Potter. I need to stop writing about that kid someday...nope.
That would blow my mind. Not literally. I don't want to clean that junk up.
Right, weird response...it's really early in the morning over here. Sorry...
Jack Report Review
I love this story! I just started reading it and I couldn't put it down! I had to stay up and finish it! You are a very talented writer!! This is from a different chapter but I think that James' mental breakdown about the no means yes thing was hilarious!! Really excited to how Ellie and James get together! They are such a cute couple and it is frustrating that they aren't together! Since Lily is one of my favorite next generation characters, I was upset that she was so mean! So thanks for changing that!! Please please please update soon! I need to now what happens!!!Author's Response: Hello! Wow, so many flattering words :O
No worries, I laughed when I wrote James' meltdown :P Wow, you're awesome! Thanks for this wonderful review Report Review
I can't believe I did not start reading this story yet, how come I never did? Can you tell me?
I don't know what made me read it now but I'm very happy I did, it's a lovely story, or at least the prologue is.
It must be hard to be a werewolf, losing control every month. I wouldn't wish that to anybody.
I spend my day in the sun and I did not drink enough, so now I've got a bit of a headache, but I'm determined to tell you that I'm going to read the rest of this story as well. It's funny and serious at the same time, with is quite a nice combination.
Now I must lay my hurting head on a pillow and sleep. Hopefully you'll hear more from me tomorrow.
MayaAuthor's Response: You're going to read this silly thing? Prepare to be blasted with fluffy nonsense! ;)
You probably haven't read this one because it's a bit on the teenage girly side. Let's be honest here. Oh well, these characters are my favorite. After the twenty chapters, you find yourself attached to the people you've created and are developing :P
Oh, get rest!
soapman333 Report Review
okay, so wow. quite a mess we have. i like this story. though boys crying really annoys me. the sudden outburst of charlotte's was surely not expected. i love leo and scorp. my favvv. and charlotte saying she that she loves the other bloke? woah, talk about being messedup, i like lily and herr response, ellie i find annoying. she needs to decide. that make up incident with james was hilarious, i just laughed at it. it was suppose to be sexy but i just went like no. haha. i got a good laugh. you have an amazing talent with fluff. never stop writing. seriously. you give girls hope withyour perfect loving characters. lol
also, i liked how james got dumped but how he acted afterwards was just crazy. its just a girl, yo.
albus is my favv maybe because my first novel is on him but he is just amazing. no matter how he's presented. im waiting for the happy ending now. oh, and i hate leo and ellie's parents, very annoying. reminded me of the malfoys. had tgat aura to it.
my5 capitalization and puntuaction sucks at the moment because im reviewing through my tab. so bear with me.
I LOVE SCORP AND ROSE!! THEY ARE PERFECT.
okay, i think i should stop now.
EmAuthor's Response: Em!
It's a mess, but it will soon be a resolved mess. Ha, I love how you've comprised quite a few different chapters into this review. It's very awesome!
Your flattering words! Gah, thanks.
So, I'll address your inquiries about James' reaction. I hoped I showed this properly, but it wasn't just that one girl, he's been rejected with everything he's done. The poor bloke really is unhappy, but I hope to change that soon :D
Ha, I know why Albus is your fav ;) I tend to enjoy characters that I write about too. Stories about James II? I generally like them.
Oh, you're a ScoRose supporter? Awesome! I have quite a few of those :D
Wow, what an amazing review. Thanks! Report Review
I almost made a happy dance for Chleo. I guess my level of hope was similar to Leo's. I really want to see them together.
Lily epic comebacks were really epic. I wouldn't like to be banished by her. I've been sorted to Hufflepuff in several sites, so I guess I just don't like to have arguments or to be in bad terms with someone...
I missed Albus! Where was he? He's coming back, right? He didn't miss the train? Maybe he was with some girl! That would explain everything (including why no one asked about him). Of course, he could also be with any other cousin. There are too many of them to keep tracking.
I believe that the metaphor is related with their feelings. If they don't explore it, they'll miss amazing things (specially if it is a lake like the one in Hogwarts). Obviously, James would agree.
Leo is definately growing up. First, he changes things with his parents. Then he starts to understand what feelings are and makes deep metaphors. He was also able to deal with a crying girl, without freaking out.
I laughed a lot when he pushed Ellie to James. I just keep picturing their faces on my mind.
I wonder how long will it take to James find out about Ellie being a werewolf. I mean, his sister figured it out alone. With his obcession, I'm sure he'll be able to connect the dots.
Great chapter, as always
InesAuthor's Response: Gah, I'm just a horrible person! I kind of had to make Chleo seem even more impossible, because...I don't know...I'm a horrible person? Ha.
Lily's kind of awesome, I think. She's freakishly loyal, and I respect the kid. Well, I did create her, so...geez, this response is turning into rubbish quickly.
Ha, he wasn't anywhere important. I just realized that I forgot to write him in, being the marvelous author that I am (sarcasm), so I thought I'd point that out for all of us to laugh at.
The metaphor becomes important later on, and even makes reference to earlier chapters in the book, but all that stuff is just trivia. I'm just pointing it out so that when I bring it out later, you guys will be on the same page as me :D
Leo is really growing up, eh? Maturing like a boss! We just have to get Charlotte there, too. It'll happen...maybe.
That part is my favorite, too ;)
Thanks for leaving a fantastic review, as always,
soapman333 Report Review
Uncle Jack! *waves* (also, why not name a character after yourself?)
I'm really pleased you managed to drag yourself away from the cat pictures for long enough to find time to write this :P
I'm not really sure why you worry about writing the girl characters, because I thought you got Charlotte's thought process pretty well here. Nothing is simple with us! So she's got boy problems and feeling jealous of Lily at the same time because she feels like she's being replaced by her as Ellie's best friend and somewhere behind all that there's probably some school stuff since she's Head Girl and seventh year and what-not. Pretty complicated, but if it was simple then that would make life too easy, right?
Favourite line: "Hello there, Hope. Are you here to fill me with your pleasantries?"
I felt for Leo here. Just as he thinks he might have a chance with Charlotte again, he learns that she's gone and got back together with Anthony. Oh dear, these people are hopeless! Well, he's going to have to pull his finger out and actually do something about it if he wants to get her. That seems a strangely grown up requirement for the kid, but I'm going to believe he can do it.
The first time I read these questions I thought you meant comeback as in when a band get back together *slaps forehead* oh...you mean Lily's responses! (I might be having a slow day today, feel free to judge) She gets brilliant comebacks. Although I don't think I'd like to be banished into the icy pits by her...to tell you the truth, she kind of scares me. I think if I knew her in real life I'd probably avoid her, like the true Gryffie I am!
The mention of Scorpius and Leo's 'bromance' cracked me up. I didn't miss Albus until you mentioned him, so I'm not entirely sure what that means...it would be good to see some more of him in the next few chapters to build up for the sequel though.
The metaphor...like I said, I'm having a slow day but I think that it must be something quite deep. What I got from it was that you have to take risks and delve beneath the surface otherwise you'll miss out on a lot without knowing what you're missing out on (hint Ellie hint Charlotte hint!). Pretty deep stuff from that kid!
I'd like to see some more Albus in the next chapter and maybe some Rose/Scorpius too. I'll look forward to the next update!
nott theodore :)Author's Response: Oh...why did I put myself in? I wrote this really early in the morning (don't tell anyone), so that may have added to my insanity.
Girl complexities, you don't even want to know how frustrated I got with Charlotte. I would read a section of what I wrote, decide there wasn't enough, and add even more. I salute women and their minds, but I'm glad I got it right :P
Leo will get around to doing something...probably. I like to torture these characters, don't I? Oh well, there are resolutions in this next chapter! My readers will be happy soon enough.
Ha, I don't judge you, no worries. I should have worded that better...right. Lily is just a sassy bag of fun, but I would want to be her friend. She's kind of freakishly loyal, isn't she?
Oh the metaphor...I just pointed it out so that you guys would understand the next few chapters as I try to patch up Chleo. It makes reference to other parts of the novel, just as a fun tidbit of information.
Oooo, a lot of people like ScoRose, eh? That's awesome! I'm a fan of them too :)
soapman333 Report Review
YES, another update. Woohoo!
Lily does get a lot of the epic comebacks, but Al, Scorp and Leo are pretty funny, especially when they're together. No, I would to liked to be banished into the icy pits of hell by Lily. It sounds like a very traumatic experience.
Yes, I missed Al! The bantering when those three are together always crack me up.
The message...geez. The best I could get out of it was that the plants never go to the depths of the water, staying safely at the top, so Charlotte should take a risk and dive to the bottom of the lake rather than staying safe? James probably wants Ellie to get that message and go out with him. He never loses hope, does he?
Uncle Jack, name a character after yourself, why don't you? ;D
Haha, literate prehistoric friend. It was actually my friends who came up with it: "You're reading again? Such a bookworm." "She's not a bookworm, she's a book dinosaur!"
You always take my advice? *Internet hug* So flattering! I thought it was meant to be the other way round!
I...uh...might have gone onto the forums and read a blog entry of yours...or two...
Who am I kidding? Yeah, I've stalked you on the forums. And before I forget, congrats about Kathryn the Great. Have you asked? You have to tell me how it goes/went.
I'd love to PM you! How do I do it? (I'm really, really bad with technology. If it's any indication, I had to ask my friend what PM stood for.) But I'm willing to brave the confusion of technology to PM you. ;)
Oh, and before I forget, since I've read all your posts, I think I owe you some jokes.
If a soldier uses a normal gun and I use a potato gun, who would use a flower gun? (A pansy)
What do you call a mouse's shoe? (Squeakers)
What does Tarzan sing at Christmas? (Jungle bells)
How do you stop a rhino from charging? (Take away it's credit card)
*hangs head in shame, waiting for the verdict* I hope that's enough for now!
As always, please update soon!Author's Response: Hello :D
Sorry about the delayed response. I honestly forgot that I uploaded this chapter. It's not the best...*cough*
Hopefully this little piece added to Charlotte's complexity as a character, but I made no effort to make resolutions, which must be very annoying to you guys. Sorry...
Hahaha, I put myself in just to see if anyone picked up on it :P
The flattering! It hits me right in the feels :O!!
Heh, okay so if you are willing, make an account on the forums and just send a message my way. I am very horrid at responding properly, but if you are willing to overlook that, we shall chat!
Jokes...I'm stealing all of them! You might see a few in Joke Wars ;) (I haven't asked her yet, but it'll probably happen...probably) Report Review
I liked the bromance between Leo and Scorpius. Please update soon though because I want to hear more about Ellie ad James. This story is fantastic!Author's Response: Thank you! Bromance all the way! Heh, so I'm getting that chapter written and it should be up soon :D Report Review
Is it a little bit stalkerish that I've been checking for this update since you told me you'd put it in the queue? Yes? Oh well, call me crazy stalker then.
Oh, poor Chleo, just can't get their act together can they? I really felt for Charlotte in this chapter. I thought you captured the complex 'girl' emotions really well: Charlotte is upset about her boy problems but also jealous of Lily because Ellie loves her now and then Lily is trying to help her out with stuff and it's all too much! And then Lily is trying to befriend Charlotte but gets angry at her because she knows how hard things are for Ellie, but she must also feel a little guilty because poor Charlotte doesn't know about the Lycanthropy. And poor Ellie is sick and trying to deal with her feelings for James and...and...oh it all makes my head hurt! We girls are complicated characters, are we not?
Uncle Jack!!! Love the little reference there to yourself :P That made me laugh.
I love the name of this chapter. 'Icy Pits' made me think there was going to be a long conversation about cold armpits in here somewhere. I'm kind of disappointed that I was wrong...:P
Only one little error (maybe) I picked up, Charlotte talks about her father's 'scared' face but I'm thinking you meant it to be his 'scarred' face?
the plant metaphor! That came out of left field...actually it wasn't even in left field, it was hiding in the stands somewhere beyond left field. I'm not totally sure what it meant but I'm thinking it's something along the lines of if you only keep to the surface of things and never delve deeper than you're going to miss out on so much. But I don't know, I could be interpreting that wrong.
Looking forward to seeing where the story goes from here, I hope there's some more Rose/Scorpius in the next chapter too :)Author's Response: Oh I wouldn't say stalkerish...*checks windows just in case*
You don't even know half of it, Bec. I would write something, read it out loud, decide it wasn't complex enough, add something else, etc. I got all of my ideas from my little sister who is having "boy problems" right now.
SO FREAKING COMPLICATED! And people wonder why I stick to writing from a guy's perspective. Shesh.
I pulled an Alfred Hitchcock there for sure :P
Gah, errors. I'll go fix that right now.
The plant metaphor will be important later on. Actually, it made reference to a few other chapters (PM if you want more detail about this aspect), but it'll be even more significant once I get the resolution moving.
Gah, this chapter...anywho, thanks for reviewing Bec! Report Review
Hi! I enjoyed this chapter a lot, though James did scare me a bit at the beginning, for a moment I thought he had either gone crazy or was way too drunk. It was kind of hilarious in a very sad way to see how he depressed everyone so much with his philosophical speech, he nearly brought everyone to tears. He almost made me cry, it must be awful to be rejected so many times by the same person...
Just to let you know, I'm addicted to your story. I love all the fluffiness mixed with the sadhappy things, if that makes sense at all. Ellie is a really special character and I like all the other people around her, specially Scorpius. He's so cute and crazy and weird! There should exist more people like him... I really enjoy reading about your characters.
And your questions:
I think Remus/Tonks story fits perfectly, Ellie is a lot like Remus. They both have important reasons not to want getting close to people, but they can be really exasperating.
Lily is cool now, I don't get why she hated Ellie so much in the first place, but she has matured a lot.
And poor Albus! I get why he gets so scared when his siblings are in pain, it happens to me when my sister is sad. I usually react differently, though. I freak out whenever I see tears, so I usually don't ever help too much...
Update soon?Author's Response: I can't seem to write a story without someone going a little insane. Eh, it adds to the drama, and I think James really pulls it off.
Ah yes, rejection. I was hoping the little "Leo and Scorpius in the bathroom" flashback memory (hehe, I just re-read this sentence, hilarious) made his whole "I can't give up" motto seem more realistic. Or...I could just be too hopeful. All is well :P
You're addicted to this silly thing? AWESOME! I'm kind of addicted to writing it, so we equal out :D. Oh man, Scorpius is secretly my favorite (don't tell the others, they get jealous easily).
Ellie is really stubborn like Remus! Remus is awesome. I just had to add that.
Well, Lily is an interesting girl. Her hate originated from her ignorance (this gets explained more in the next chapter that will be up sometime next week. Life is a bit hectic right now, so I haven't had the time to finish it up).
Albus is extremely sensitive to everything. I believe this comes with his intuitive abilities. Unfortunately, I get really emotional when I try to help my siblings too. Let us suffer together!
Of course! :D Thanks for this lovely review Report Review
That was..interesting. Kinda crazy :p The affect was pretty good though!
When do you think you will have the next chapter??
I am super excited to see what Happens with Lilly and Ellie!Author's Response: Hello there :)
Ha...I was bound to write a chapter like this sometime. I have a bit of an obsession with crazed characters :P
I'm actually still working the kinks out in the next chapter, so I'm thinking it'll be up sometime next week :D
Thanks for taking the time to review! Report Review
I love this story. I was just wondering how many chapters are left.Author's Response: I'm planning on twenty-five chapters, but I might have to write a few more to introduce some stuff for the sequel :D We shall see how it all plays out...(that sounds more ominous than the process really is) Report Review
"You have to let others love you, so that you can learn to love yourself"- THIS. thank you. Everyone always told me you have to love yourself before you can love someone else. I've always thought that was crap. Sometimes you have to let someone teach you how to love yourself.Author's Response: Oh wow, thanks! I'm glad that that part touched you. It's kind of my philosophy of life and love. I'm going to quote Perks of Being a Wallflower Girl, because there is one line in that movie that really touched me, "We choose the love we think we deserve."
Did you get shivers? I certainly did! Thanks for this lovely review, really, it made me smile :) Report Review
This is probably something you have spoken about somewhere in the story but I can't find it.
Does the wolfsbane potion not work on Ellie or something? Is that why she still transforms into a full-fledged were-wolf rather than just a wolf?
Sorry it was really bugging me!Author's Response: Oh, I totally forgot to mention this potion. Well, it's mentioned in the HP series somewhere that some werewolves are unable to take wolfsbane, because the effects do no work on them, or they're allergic to an ingredient.
It's interesting how different each individual body is, where some potions work, and others don't. The potion just doesn't work with Ellie, because the wolf is very strong.
I'm glad that it's bugging you, it means you're invested in my work enough to pick up on these kinds of things :P It's a silly story, isn't it? Report Review
Hmmm. Interesting. Actually have mixed feelings about this chapter. Don't get me wrong, I understood the 'James's crazy spiral out of control' idea, but at the beginning it just seemed to me like he was on drugs or something haha I think maybe it might have been lacking a bit of pure anger in there, like getting him to smash something up! I don't really know, maybe I just didn't pick up on the depressed undertones of the craziness in quite the way you probably intended. Although, it was touching to see Albus's and Ellie's reactions in particular, and I liked the idea of Leo and James having a heart to heart. Harry's cameo maybe could've had more impact too, but I did like Leo's pang of jealousy...that was a nice touch of reality. The Remus part was also good to read!
Lily blurting out that she knows Ellie's a werewolf is sure to be interesting! I have liked Lily for a while now, and hopefully she'll push Jellie together ;)
Anyways, don't let any of my minor criticisms get you down. I'm still reading, and the fact that I'm so emotionally attached to your characters in the first place is a credit to you writing :)Author's Response: Hello harrietm!
Actually...funny story: I originally had him get drunk, but then I thought, "Nah...I don't really want to have James do that. He's like seventeen years old." So, this is an adaptation of that former idea of mine. Great, he should have smashed something! What am I doing with my life?! I'll have him smash something coming on up, I promise!
Harry's cameo? Ha, that made me laugh :P I figured I need to add in Harry or Ginny, because it would have been suspicious, not seeing them at all during the winter break, heh. My lazy writing just comes out, doesn't it?
Someone's gotta push Jellie together. Those kids have just been frustrating everyone, haven't they? We shall see! I don't even know yet, because I'm still working the next chapter out :D
Oh...you're fine with the criticisms. There's always room for improvement, especially here. There's like a whole house that could be improved in this story (that didn't make sense...)
Thank you for this wonderful review! Report Review
Agh I cant believe it is almost finished, I want It to go on forever but every story has to end. I had a idea that would be very fitting to your story so I thought I would share it with you, and here it is:)
Loe is always worrying about Ellie when she transforms so she could somehow escape the shrinking shack and run around hogsmead, get hurt quite badly, when Leo is informed that his sister is missing he would go into a frantic panic attack and without realising it, let a slip she is a werewolf. so that is and it would be very cool if you considered my idea, I love your story and can't wait for the sequel !Author's Response: This idea...I may use it, but I'll tweak it a little. I hope that's okay (I'll still credit you, of course). Thanks for reviewing and giving me such wonderful ideas to work with :D Report Review
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