I really am enjoying this story so far! Liz is such a complex and dynamic character that I can't help but to love! The humor keeps me engaged and the pacing is great. I can't wait to read how the plot developes! Report Review
I liked that you wrote the Invisibility Cloak is one of the family secrets that they actually keep because I feel like things like the Invisibility Cloak and the Marauders' Map aren't just something that people know willy-nilly.
Not sure if I approve of stealing it because, let's face it. It's the Invisibility Cloak. I can imagine the uproar that it would cause and if Liz was caught and how the Wotters might be REALLY mad that she stole it just so she can go spy on James to help Savannah, someone that James probably doesn't even know. Like, if I was one of the Wotters friends with Liz, I wouldn't like it.
But then again, I suppose that her spying on James is when she finds out the secret? lol
I like how Tobias and Liz pokes fun at Jensen; their entire dynamic makes everything so funny and it's rare that I can enjoy a scene with characters ALL OC.
Great chapter! (: Can't wait for your next update. Report Review
LOL I love that Liz and Roxy have discussions about how they'd date and how they're sick of all of the blokes. I totally had that exactly same conversation with my best friends back in high school.
Rather interesting that Liz would choose James, though. I suppose dating Fred's out of the question, but what about Liam? Is there something going on between Marge and Liam? I dunno, I just find it interesting that she chose James in the first place, though that can also be because the two of them aren't super close so it's weird.
I'm not sure who I'd be closest to. I think I have to get to know them a little more.
AND JAMES SNEAKING AWAY! I'm guessing that's the secret that Liz knows!
I can't wait for the next update! (: Report Review
I love this story so far!
James and Liz are friends but not to a point where it's like they're best mates so its even more difficult to get together type of thing.
I like that even though Liz sounds crazy, you write a good story because sometimes when I see an OC is kinda crazy, the story's plot gets lost in the craziness (and not that crazines is a bad thing. it can be a very good thing when used correctly, like you have so far).
Im excited for the rest of this story.
I think it's going very well so far, and I'm excited to see what happens in the future chapters.
Favorite character. I dunno...
I'd love to know more about Roxy because she's like Liz's best friend but we don't know much about her yet and everything.
Great job, and keep it up!Author's Response: Hi missclaire17! Thanks so much for your review! Glad you don't think Liz is too crazy - sometimes when I write it all just comes out in stream of consciousness and afterwards I realize she can sound kind of looney, but I'm trying not to go over the top at all! Chapter 3 is in the queue, and they'll be more Roxy in it for ya!! Thanks again for leaving a review!! xx Report Review
Please update soon. Like the story alot and I want to see more James/ Elizabeth action. Does he have any feelings for heror the other way round? So many quEstions need to be answered so pleas update asapAuthor's Response: Thanks so much Ihatemaths!! It's definitely a bit of a slow build up, and Liz is definitely a bit on the denser side when it comes to blokes, but you'll see more James/Liz action soon! Thanks again for reading and reviewing! Report Review
Gosh, I'm obsessed this story already. I love the chapter names - I think it's such a creative idea! Anyways, definitely keep writing, because this is such a great story with tons of potential!
-ShadowRoseAuthor's Response: Thanks so much ShadowRose! The chapter names are definitely fun to think of, and sometimes the entire chapter comes together around a certain word, which is good fun. Thanks for reading and leaving a review, and Chapter 3 should be up soon!! Report Review
I like this, Liz seems like a very realistic character. Well done, I can't wait for more!Author's Response: Thanks so much Solo! Glad you like it, and thanks for taking the time to leave a review! Chapter 3's in the queue now, so it should be up soon!! Report Review
Another sound chapter, again it was really entertaining to read! Your characters are all likeable and interesting, and the way you write their relationships etc. has good dynamic.
I really like Liz so far, and James is pretty intriguing... can't wait for more!Author's Response: Thank you so much for leaving a review! Chapter Three is in the queue, so it should be out soon for more craziness! Thanks again! xx Report Review
This was actually really enjoyable and well written! I think you should definitely continue and you deserve more recognition.
P.S.: I've totally never hurled on my shoes before...Author's Response: Thanks so much thetenthweasley! Glad you liked the story and glad you haven't had an experience like dear Lizard's! Report Review
Another giggle of a chapter! I'd really like it if James shows more depth later on though, he comes across as rather one-dimensional at the moment... It's very weird to read a story with a plotline that isn't immediately obvious, but that's a good thing, so ;)
And this concludes my stunningly articulate review for this chapter.
P. S. Could you use the word callipygian sometime? XDAuthor's Response: Thanks again for the review! You definitely will start to learn more about James. It's a bit odd because it's all in Liz's perspective, and she's not hanging out with him all that much right now, but you'll get to see more of dear Jamesie soon! And more plot! Wahey!
P.S. Of course I will! That is a FANTASTIC word!!! Thanks for the suggestion! Report Review
ASDFGHJKL THIS IS SUCH A HILARIOUSLY PERFECT STORY WHY HAS NO ONE REVIEWED IT YET
I love how uncliched it is :DAuthor's Response: THANKS SO MUCH DUDE! So glad you love it - next chapter is in the queue now! Thanks again for reviewing! xx Report Review
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