GO TEAM BLUE.

I really liked this story, the idea was really original and you pulled it off wonderfully, I keep getting odd looks because I'm grinning and laughing like a maniac.

I think that you managed to give the ghoul the perfect voice, it was very realistic and believable even though we only know him from this one chapter. That ghoul's not lacking spirit or ego, is he?

I love that he's trying to play the 1812 Overture, that was so funny.

In the end, a wonderful one-shot that made my day. ;)

Author's Response: I'm so glad that you liked it as I had a lot of fun writing it :D Haha I'm sorry that you ended up getting weird looks though, but I'm glad that you enjoyed it so much that you ended up doing it!

Yup the ghoul's definitely one of the more confident people around, but that was the fun in writing it! I'm glad that you found him realistic as I was worried people would think I went OTT ;)

Thank you for this great review, it really made my day too :D

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Haha, I loved this idea! It's so original, not to mention the fact that it's hilarious!! :) Congratulations on writing one of the best humour stories I've read on this site so far!

The ghoul dreams of being an actor! That's just brilliant. And now he gets his chance. Perhaps it's not as glamorous a job as he expected, but at least he'll get to leave the attic for a while. I think this right here was my favourite part: "They obviously didn’t want me to enlighten the muggles about the fact that, though they may think Leonardo DiCaprio is the best new actor around, his talents are seriously mediocre when compared to mine." He sure doesn't lack confidence, this ghoul. I love it!!

Every part of it, from Hermione pointing out what she read about ghouls, to Fred and George making fun of Ron is absolutely perfectly written and true to every character. Thank you so much for writing this, I definitely enjoyed reading it - a lot :D

Author's Response: Hey there!

This is the best humour story you've read? Wow, thank you so much I think that's one of the best compliments I've heard :D:D:D

Yeah, even if it is only Ron, I'm sure it will work for him for now! I loved writing that line too, as everyone thinks Leo's great and then there's him. Hey, you never know! His confidence may be a true reflection of his acting talent :P

I'm glad that you found everyone was in character, as they all have such unique personalities and it was rather hard to keep them like that!

Thak you for this great review, and I'm so glad that you enjoyed it!

-Kiana :D

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Saw this on recently added and couldn't resist :P

This was one of the funniest things I've read in a while! I laughed out loud while I was reading it. I think it's an amazingly original idea- it's one of those myriad things that one doesn't think much of in the books, until some author makes a whole story out of it and you're convinced that that must have been how it happened!

The ghoul had such a strong personality which really came across, and all his dreams about going to RADA were hilarious. I loved his reflections on his cousin Dorothy too :P You created such a perfect voice for him- he felt very real even though we're not with him for long, and it was brilliant to see everything through his eyes!

I loved the ghoul's perspective on the Weasley family. Although we only see them through the ghoul's eyes, they all seemed very in character which is pretty impressive! It was also great to hear his side of the story on the wailing and rattling pipes- one of my favourite bits was his attempt to do the 1812 Overture.

And the part with his "wardrobe" and "make-up!" It really made me giggle. Poor Ron- the ghoul doesn't seem to think very highly of him!

This was a very funny, very unique one-shot, and I really enjoyed reading it! I'm gonna start campaigning for that ghoul to get his Academy Award :P

-Bethany

Author's Response: Haha I'm glad that I managed to convince you it happened. I'm not even sure how this idea formed, but I just got thinking about the ghoul, and I wanted to write about him and this seemed to be the only way I could fit him in!

I'm glad that his personality came across as I think that's thing I struggle with most when writing a story. Yes, his views are rather strange, and I think that's why I had so much fun writing him as they were so unexpected!

I'm glad that the characters were canon, as the Weasley family are special to me, so I wanted to do them proud! Classical music for the win, I was tempted to make him a Bleiber for the reaction, then I realised that he wasn't around then :(

Yeah I didn't imagine that Ron and the ghoul would get along. I love you Ron so it's ok!

I'm glad that you're campaigning as he could win in 2014 then! Thank you for this lovely review,

-Kiana :D

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this was brilliant! i absolutely loved it :) I wouldn't
change a thing. The ghoul was wonderful, and you
wrote the weasleys in character, and I love that
Hermione and Ron actually agreed on something.
Overall, loved this piece!
~M

Author's Response: Haha I'm so glad that you loved it, as I loved writing it! The ghoul now has a special place in my heart, so it's great to hear you liked him. Ron and Hermione have to agree on something, they both said I do :P

Thanks for a great review,

-Kiana

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Splendidly insightful and quite humorous. This is definitely a new perspective and that's what makes it interesting. Well, that and everybody loves the Weasley Ghoul (not). I especially loved the ghoul government, but I felt like I was waiting for something about not letting the wizards know of their intelligence. Overall, I liked it as a humor story.

-katty01/ginnys twin

Author's Response: Haha I'm glad you found it was a new perspective as I never found anything about him, I decided to write this! I'm glad that you liked the ghoul government, and it's actually a canon thing! I'm glad that you liked it, and thanks for the review!

-Kiana

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Hello!
I really, really enjoyed reading this story! It was funny, light, and really original, and I think you did a fantastic job with it! I never thought about how the Weasley family could get a ghoul to pretend to be their son, but now that I've read this I'll definitely think on it a bit more! I loved how you portrayed the ghoul, and what strong character choices you made with him. He definitely knew who he was and where he was going, which was hilarious to read in the context of the Weasley household! This was really wonderful, and I loved reading it! 10/10
Cassie :)

Author's Response: Hi Cassie!

I'm so glad that you enjoyed it and found it original as that's what I was aiming to do! I never thought about it either, until I mentioned him in a review, then he kinda became stuck in my mind as if he was telling me to write about him! I'm so glad that you liked him, as I was worried people would think I was insane or something! Thank you for this lovely review,

-Kiana :D

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ahahaha wait that was great lolol. I'm sure he'll be getting his oscar by tomorrow at the very least. :D
xox, miluv

Author's Response: Hi miluv! I'm so glad that you found it was great, and that you think he'll get his ghoul. I'm sure the ghoul would be very pleased with that!

Thanks for the review,

-Kiana :D

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I loved this story! It's hilarious - I was laughing to myself all the way through while I read it. The way that you wrote the ghoul's character was just so funny. The idea that he's sitting up in the attic and passing judgement on the intelligence levels of the Weasley family really amused me. And of course, it took a long time for his true talent to finally be recognised!

I just have to say that I loved this line: "I had nearly managed to perform Tchaikovsky's 1812 Overture, when I was rudely interrupted by four members of the ginger clan." It really made me laugh!

I've never thought before about the ghoul, but you managed to convince me here that obviously, it is something I should think about! It's a nice change to read something a bit random and very different to all the other stories here.

Great story, and I'll be sure to read some of the other things you've written when I get a chance!

nott theodore :)

Author's Response: Hello there!

I'm so glad that you loved this story, it means so much to me! Yeah I thought it would be fun to make him view himself superior to the other Weasleys, his character was so undeveloped I could do anything, which was great fun ;D

Yes I was listening to that when writing this, so it only felt fair to credit my muse!

I'm glad that you liked it, and felt it was different to the other stories, as that's what I was aiming to do :)

I would love to know what you think about my other stories :D

-Kiana :D

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Okay, so I saw this on your page and I genuinely couldn't resist reading it.

This is genuinely one of the best things I've read in ages (and your talking to a person who's been kneed deep in philosophy essays all morning... oh wait, maybe that's contributing to the issue?) and I love it how fanfiction ALWAYS seems to highlight these things that of course I wanted to know about. Of COURSE I wanted to know the perspective of the ghoul-in-pjs. I just needed you to let me know about that.

The only thing that could have made this better if there'd been a bigger struggle for communication. I can imagine Ron trying to mime downstairs and 'pretend' and 'pjs' for about ten minutes before Arthur/Hermione cut in all YOU KNOW HE CAN PROBABLY UNDERSTAND YOU RONALD and then the twins are all dubious and she steps forward like 'do you understand, Ghoul?'

And then he's like YES OF COURSE YOU IDIOT.

But, really, I loved the whole thing and I'm so glad I took a read. Thank you for writing!

-AC

Author's Response: Haha hey AC!

Wow thanks for the compliment, I'm really glad that you liked it so much :D Yeah I always wondered how they managed to persuade the ghoul, and I figured others would too, so I decided to write this! Haha I'm glad that you wanted to read it though!

I didn't think of that, and it's actually a really good idea, to add in Ron miming, and the twins laughing, and Hermione being Hermione! That just made me laugh so much at the thought of it, I think I have to include that now!

Thank you for the lovely review, and I'm really glad that you enjoyed it :D

-Kiana!

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I am in love with this one-shot. In love with it. I'm adding it to my favorites!

Why do you love it soapman333?

It's so funny! I was laughing at every part of it.

The ghoul is so intelligent and misunderstood. His perspective is so fun to read :P Ron's lines are so hilarious, and the ending. The ending was just perfect.

Thanks for such a brilliant story to read on such a lousy day :)

Jack

Author's Response: Hi Jack!

I'm so glad that you loved the one-shot, and that you added it to your favouties, it means so much to me :D

Yeah his perspective was so fun to write, as you could just basically make it as ridiculous as you want and no one could question as they don't know what goes on his mind.

I'm sorry that you had a lousy day, but I'm glad that this cheered you up:D

Thanks for the great review,

Kiana!

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Heya! Perelandra here from the forums. Thank you so much for doing the swap with me! :)

Just so you know, I wanted to read The Odd One but since its so short I didn't think it would be fair. And right now I'm sticking to one-shots only...so this one won out! :D However, I'm definitely looking forward to reading it!

Your entire fic had me laughing! The Ghoul's is just so...full of himself its just hilarious. XD

Having just watched the Oscars last night I found this one just perfect. I laughed in: ...though they may think Leonardo DiCaprio is the best new actor around... because poor Leo...he's been snubbed in the Oscars so many times. I like, however, how you tied this to real life: DH happens in 1997 which was the year Titanic was released...so kudos to you for tying everything together!

Everyone felt so in character even though we didn't get to see much of them. Which is good because in those tidbits I managed to see that you have the Weasley clan and Hermione down.

I did spot some punctuation issues. There are points where you have a lot of semicolons and it just feels a tad bit wordy. Also, the lineHonestly I was one of the cleaner ghoul's it should be 'ghouls' not "ghoul's"

Also, the other line: “so we wondering whether you would be up for the job?” you're missing the world 'are'. Tends to happen...I do it quite frequently!

Overall this was a great one-shot. It definitely had me laughing with the Ghoul's comments and thoughts! XD I never thought I would read about how they got the ghoul to come down...in fact, I never questioned it until I read your fic!

Thanks for the swap and for letting me read this! :D

--Rosie/Perelandra

Author's Response: Hello there!

I wouldn't have minded if you read The Odd One, as it doesn't matter how long the review is, it's the thought that counts! I'm glad that you looked forward to reading it though!

I'm so glad that you laughed throughout as that was my aim :D

Yeah the other characters didn't feature much, so I was kind of worried as they only had about one line each, and I had to make it fit, so I'm glad that you found that they did!

Yeah I was born in the 90s so I had to do some research! I saw that Leo would fit, and I felt bad about his lack of Oscars, so I choose him!

I meant to edit this story, but ended up working on my novel :/ I'll definitely go back and fix those errors though. Thank you for pointing them out to me though!

I'm so glad that you enjoyed it, and it made you question they got the ghoul down, as I never thought about until the plunny stuck as well ;D

-Kiana!

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Hi I'm here for the review swap. Great job on this! It's such an original and funny idea. I've never read anything like it before!!

I love the way you make the ghoul think, it makes me giggle thinking of a ghoul talking of intelligence!! I'm not really sure if there is anything to improve on with this, I have only one plea, you should of made it longer!! It is great.
Ciao for now:)
BS

Author's Response: Haha I'm so glad that you found it funny, as I'd never written any humour before, so I was rather unsure about it!

I've never read anything about the ghoul either, so I guess that's why I wrote it!

Of course the ghoul would be intelligent ;D No I know what you mean, and I thought it would be funny to make him be so!

I am considering writing a sequel to this, so it's nice to know that you would like to read it :D

Thanks for the great review,
Kiana!

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Hi! Faux here for the review swap. So, I scrolled down your author page and was like "wow, everything looks pretty cool," and then I got to THIS and realized that I've been waiting for this story for my entire life. So I read it and laughed for like a solid five minutes because the ghoul calls Arthur "the leader" and refers to the Weasleys as "the ginger clan."

Now I'm going to go review something else because I don't know what to write, other than this is awesome and I'm probably a better person now that I've read it. xD

Author's Response: I'm so glad that all the stories looked cool, but it's good that you scrolled down, if it made you laugh so much :D Yeah I laughed the entire time of writing this, and no one in my family could understand why!

I'm so glad that you liked this, as this idea came to me in the middle of the night, so I had no idea, it would turn out well or not, so thank you! And for the lovely comments, they made my day:D

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Hey, SamMalfoy93 here. :)

This was hilarious, I loved it. I've always wondered how they got the ghoul to agree as well. Now I don't want to believe that there was any other way. :P

I loved the ghoul's thoughts, how he's actually intelligent and cocky and cool. Definitely actor material. :P

A great read, thank you for leaving a link for me. :)

Sam.

Author's Response: Hi!

Ha yeah I always wondered how they got the ghoul to agree to it, hence the story. I'm glad that you found it funny as that was my aim!

Yes he definitely has the personality to become an actor!

Thank you for leaving a lovely review, Kiana :)

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Hehe, this is really hilarous and so clever. You certainly made a little mentioned character into someone with a huge personality. I liked his internal monologue and how much he looked down on the Weasleys as of inferior intellects, especially because you know the Weasley's are looking back at the ghoul and thinking the same thing.

Its a well crafted story and seems quite a plausable way of getting the ghoul to impersonate Ron. I think he could win that Oscar. Anyway, brilliant story. I was looking for a laugh and this story delivered.

Author's Response: Hi! I'm glad that you found it funny as that was my aim! Yes the ghoul was rather forgotten in the books, so here's his chance to get more of the limelight, and I think he liked his time in it. I'm glad that you liked the mirror thoughts, as you're the first person to actually pick up on it, and I thought it would be cool to do!

Yay he can get his oscar! Thank you for leaving such a great review :D

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Oh gosh, I wish I could have been inside your head when you come up with this. In a non creepy way. Haha.

I loved that the ghoul seemed like this diva actor, despite the fact that he's.. Well, you know, a ghoul. His thoughts about how unfair or was that he couldn't go to the acting school were some of my favorite in this because they're just so honest from his PoV but so humorous from ours.

Then when he thought to himself that he thinks the leader needs speech lessons. Oh gosh, that was awesome. Poor Arthur, haha.

Fred and George seems a bit too excited about the prospect of having to pull something to make the ghoul behave if he wouldn't have agreed, didn't they? They probably already had a plan all worked out :P

I love that the ghoul mentally refers to the appearance of the disease and the pajamas as make up and costume. At least he's enjoying it, haha.

This was so creative and just a really funny piece. I loved your sense of humor and the creativity of this. It was perfect for a fun morning read. ♥

Author's Response: Haha I know what you mean, I don't really know what was going on in my head at the time, to be honest, that's what happens when you get attacked by a plunny in the middle of the night ;D

Yeah he honestly thought he stood a chance to get in, and when you just think about it from our perspective you know how unlikely it is! And yes he thinks he's so good that he could give Arthur lessons!

Well you know Fred and George and their love for pranking, so of course they would love to attack the ghoul, as they could probably try out their latest merchandise on him or something similar to that!

Thank you for the lovely review, it brightened my day a lot! Kiana :)

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Hello :)

Just leaving the first of your 5 reviews!

Okay, I loved this little one-shot! I thought it was hilarious! I am actually glad I was sat alone as I kept giggling!

The thought of the ghoul wanting to be an actor was really clever and made the piece work well. He's got quite a personality hasn't he? I love all the bits you added about the oscars and other awards, it was just really funny!

A great one shot! Well done :D

Lauren :)

Author's Response: Hi Lauren:)

Ha I'm so glad that you liked this one-shot as I loved writing it!

Yeah he is rather unknown in the books, so I thought it would be fun to add some character to him, and make him as strange as possible!

Thanks for the review, Kiana :)

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I read this at work, so I couldn't actually laugh out loud, because then everyone would know that I hadn't been working, but I still laughed really hard on the inside.

I loved the ghoul's personality! What a diva! I love it! I adore the fact that something that I assumed to be so non-human and quite superfluous turned out to be the ultimate Drama Queen. I swear, the ghoul could give Beyonce a run for her money!

I also really loved the way you made quite a serious situation - Ron, going off to save the Wizarding World - into something so hilarious. I loved the little touches - mentioning Leo DiCaprio and the 1812 Overture - really added that extra something and made the ghoul just that much more loveable and adorable!

Really well done!

Author's Response: Hahaha I'm sorry that I nearly made you get into trouble, but I'm really glad that you liked the story though, as I have to admit I laughed while writing it out, as I seriously didn't think anyone would like it!

Yeah the ghoul deserves to be a diva, and I would love to see him meet Beyonce or Mariah Carey as it would just be hilarious!

Yeah it's always nice to add humour to an otherwise dark plot, as it makes you see it in a different light! I'm glad that you liked the little touches as they were fun to include!

Thanks again for the review!

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Hahahaha this was such a fun read, I absolutely loved it! I have positively never read a story from a ghouls's point of view, so this was definitely unique, and quite enjoyable.

The whole idea of the ghoul always wanting to act, wanting an oscar, and then saying "Hollywood here I come" in the end was very amusing and I chuckled a lot while reading this. I loved how he used to think that he was as intelligent as the wizards, or more so.

I think you've used Ron's line from DH very aptly - the "I think he's really looking forward to it" part. So, great job with the whole concept, and its brilliant execution!

You did an amazing work, thumbs up :)

Cheers!
AD
(AditiDraco95)

Author's Response: Hey I'm so glad that you loved it, as I loved writing it as it was so much fun to do! Yeah I've never come acorss a story from the ghoul's POV, so it deserves to be told, so here it is ;)

Yeah I thought it would be more fun to make him have a massive ego, as I guess everyone wants to have the dream of being famous, so why can't the ghoul have that same dream as well!

I don't know why that line stuck in my head, but I was just thinking about the ghoul, and how I could write about him, then I remembered that brief mention of him!

Thanks for the lovely review, Kiana :D

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Oh, this was funny! I loved it! I especially like how you managed to get it all across from his perspective without him uttering a word. :D

Author's Response: Ha thanks I'm glad that you loved it, as I loved writing it! Yeah I guess ghoul's can't really speak, so writing a wail/moan would be kind of weird, but thanks for the review and I'm glad that you liked it!

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So you decided to write a story about a ghoul? Well if that isn’t unique I wouldn’t know what is so I knew I had to definitely check it out to see how you would make it work.

You know us ghoul’s are often over looked; those imbecile humans always thinking we have inferior intelligence to them, always underestimate their reliance on us.

I thought you started epic. I really loved your first sentence. I mean it is truly a human thing to think we are more intelligent than other creatures and it is something we are able to see in the Harry Potter magical world. Look how Umbridge for example treats Hagrid or the treatement of goblins. So kudos for that awesome sentence.

I thought this was quite funny but I did find the part “ I was on course to win Best Actor at the Academy Awards” unrealistic because correct me if I’m wrong but that is a muggle thing and I’m sure a ghoul would not know a thing about that. So perhaps I should change the name around a bit. Something a bit more magical. But it seemed like a funny thing to me. A ghoul who wanted to became an actor. But you never know. I never gave them much thought so I loved the fact you wrote about something so minor and next to that it fitted the idea perfectly. After all, otherwise it would be quite difficult when the death eaters and such would come to see what exactly going on with Ron Weasley.

A really unique idea. Well done! Though I would recommend a banner

Author's Response: Ha yeah, a lot of people have been saying it's an unique idea, which seems strange, as someone else must have written about before, oh well I'm glad that you found it unique, as I do get bored of repititive stories!

I'm glad that you loved the first sentence, as I find that's the key thing about a story! Umbridge is a great example, on how badly treated magical creatures are, as Hagrid and goblins and all other magical creatures really are awesome!

Yeah it is a muggle thing, but I put it in as I figured that there was really no acting equivilant in the wizard world, and he really wanted to crack the muggle world, so I thought it sounded ok, but your suggestion is good, and I may change it:)

Yeah I always did think the ghoul must have been a pretty good actor to convince the death eaters, so I guess having his life long dream of becoming one, made the death eaters believe it was Ron!

Thanks for the lovely review, I have actually requested a banner in the dark arts, except no ones agreed to do it yet :( So one should hopefully be on its way soon!

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Oh my god, I love this already XD it's unlike anything I've ever read on HPFF before, unique and interesting and a story entirely in it's own category. I loved it! Characterization for Hermione was especially perfect, and everyone else was spot on as well.

The ghoul was awesome too. I can't wait to read more of this, and I really don't know what else to say, other than that it was awesome and I really wish you were continuing on with this XD wonderful job, really creative and different, and I think he'll DEFINITELY get his Oscar ;)

Keep up the awesome work,
xx Molly

Author's Response: Hey thanks for leaving such a lovely review! I'm so glad that you loved it, as I loved writing it, as it was so much fun to do! And yes I've never come across a story like this before either, so I thought it would be fun to tell it from a ghoul's perspective! As for Hermione, it was nice to be able to make her as canon as possible, as she does seem to change a considerable amount to as she was in the books! Haha I am considering writing some follow ups to this, as some other people have suggested that as well, so I will bear that in mind, as it was so much fun to do! Thanks again, Kiana!

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Ooh! This was a really cool idea! I've never read anything about a Ghoul before but I could easily tell that this is probably one of the best that I'm ever going to read. I thought the ghoul wanting to be an actor was a really funny and neat idea. And how pretending to be Ron was his big break, that was just really cool. He sounded such a cool and awesome ghoul, I wonder why the books made him look so bad?!

Also, I thought your characterisation of everyone was spot on, especially Hermione. She sounded very much like Hermione and I could easily imagine her saying those things! Wonderful job! ♥

~Izzy

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Author's Response: Hey, thank you so much for leaving such a lovely review! Yeah I never thought much aboiut the ghoul, until this story appeared to me in the middle of the night! And I figured that him being an actor would fit, so I just made him become one! And I guess the books made him look bad, as they found his wailing annoying, when he in fact thought it was marvellous! Yay the characterisation was good, and I'm glad that you thought Hermione was good, as she often changes a lot in fan fiction so it was important to keep it original! Thanks so much again, Kiana :D

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I only read the first two paragraphs and I already liked this ghoul. He sounded exactly as some magical creatures would. Maybe that's just me but I thought you did the voice of the ghoul really well.

The whole wanting to be an actor thing is actually a really neat idea and it actually really makes sense. It's fits in perfectly with the idea and if you think about it, why else would a ghoul agree to do that for wizards.

Besides the soft bed, warmth, light and food of course.

You had a bit of a verb tense problem but it didn't interrupt the flow of the writing at all. "We need someone to pretend to be him when he WAS gone." It sounds as if Ron left and has come back already.

Even though the Weasley's weren't the hugest part of this chapter, you still managed to keep them in character. Hermione sounded like Hermione as well (and in a lot of fanfictions she doesn't sound like Hermione at all).

Overall, I thought this was really well written and the chapter flowed really well. Good job on it.

Author's Response: Hi thanks for taking your time to review this story:D No it doesn't sound weird, I thought the same to, as magical creatures don't get a voice much, so I'm giving the ghoul one!

Yeah I think the ghoul's motivations for doing it, is purely to further his career, I don't think he got far ahead enough, to think about the other benefits.

Thanks for pointing that out, I'll go and change it, as I hate grammar errors.

And I'm glad that you thought the Weasley's and Hermione stayed true to their characters, as I really hate it when someone drastically changes how they act!

Thanks again for this review:D

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Hey there! Thanks for re-requesting a review!

Wow, this was an unbelievably bizarre and wacky concept! I have certainly never read anything like this before, and I am glad I had an opportunity to do so. It is becoming harder and harder to find unique, completely original stories on this site-and I have certainly never thought to write anything regarding the ghoul in the attic.

What I liked most about this piece was that you managed to connect it to the original Harry Potter books, and put the pieces of the ghouls life together, from everything we know about him-mainly from what Ron has said. I really liked the line: 'So it was one delightful June evening, and I was happily enjoying my evening entertainment of rattling the pipes and trying to get them to harmonise, because when that happened it caused a rather wondrous sound' because I do remember Ron going on about how the ghoul always rattled on the pipes, and it's awesome that you put your own spin on it!

I love the way you started this, with the line: 'You know us ghoul’s are often over looked; those imbecile humans always thinking we have inferior intelligence to them, always underestimate their reliance on us.' It was a very nice way too hook the reader in-I could tell immediately that this was going to be something different. And the fact that the ghoul wanted to be an actor-classic! It was a great way of explaining why he agreed to act as Ron, and also added a lot of humour to the chapter. I especially liked the line: 'though they may think Leonardo DiCaprio is the best new actor around, his talents are seriously mediocre when compared to mine.'

I did notice a few spelling and grammar errors, but nothing too distracting-and nothing a simple edit couldn't fix!

Thanks for the funny read.
Courtney:)

Author's Response: Hey thanks for taking the time to review my story, and I'm glad that you liked it, and found it wacky and bizarre as that's what I wanted, as I find there's so many stereotypes on HPFF, this probably isn't going to be one! And yeah the idea came to me while trying to fall asleep, and was written in the middle of the night, hence the weirdness :P

Ha yeah, that line from Ron always stayed in my head for some reason, and I just thought hey the ghoul's already wants to be an actor and that's weird enough, why not make him a classical musical fan!

I'm glad that you thought it was good from the start, as that's probably the key thing to do in a story, and how else could they manage to persuade the ghoul to pretend to be Ron, if it didn't want to be an actor. Yeah I had to research new actors of the 90s, due to be being born in the latter end of that decade, so I figured how big Leonardo is, would be funny to show how high the ghoul aspires to.

Yeah I'll fix the spelling and grammar errors soon:)

Thanks again for the lovely review, Kiana :)

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