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Review #1, by UnluckyStar57 I

12th July 2014:
Oooh, Helgazar! It's one of those ships that are slightly unexpected because of their oppositeness, but when written well, it's completely shippable. :)

I love the way their thoughts interrupted each other's in the narrative. That way, I got to see inside both of their minds, and they both pretty much think the same thing. They are glad to have spouses, but they will never feel the same passion for the spouses that they did for each other. It's really kind of sad, and I think it would be hard to remain friends after having experienced such a love affair. I find it interesting that Salazar says the memories of his time with Helga are the most painful, but it is true that nearly everyone looks back on their failed relationships with tainted eyes. Even the happy memories are painful.

This was beautiful. You did a brilliant job with it. :)

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Author's Response: Hi! Thanks so much for the review! I definitely feel the same way about Helgazar; their differences are what make the ship so interesting to me. It's a favorite of mine, and I'm glad you like them too :)

I wanted a way to have both of their perspectives shown, and the interrupting thoughts seemed like an interesting way to do it. It was a fun challenge, and I'm really happy with the way it turned out! You're spot on with your observations about the difficulties of moving on from a relationship that was so meaningful. That's exactly what I wanted to express about Helga and Salazar here, and I'm so glad that it came across.

I so appreciate your thoughts and kind words! Thank you so much for taking the time to leave such a lovely review :)


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Review #2, by patronus_charm I

11th July 2014:
Hey Maggie! I saw you had some more Helgazar and couldn’t resist :P

Wow, this was so, so, so good Maggie! And so original too! I really loved the dual perspective and you did it in such an original way with the way they finished one another’s sentences it was so cute and so adorable yet cried out angst even more than usual as I was just like this is why you’re meant to be together, divorce (even though you couldn’t really in those days) and be together again.

You captured their emotions and feeling so well that I was in love throughout reading this one-shot. They really just new one another really well which was so adorable. One thing I did really like was that though they did want this final moment together and probably did want to be together deep down, they had sort accepted it couldn’t be that way and they would live with their respective spouses and that acceptance was really admirable.

This was such a great story, Maggie! ♥

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Author's Response: Kiana! Ugh I am terrible for putting this off for so long (and I feel like I start all my responses out this way.) But I'm so glad you came to check this out, and that you left such a wonderful review!

Oh my word, the angst! When I started writing fanfiction I never thought I would ever write angst. And now it seems to be sort of a prominent theme in my stuff. The best laid plans, right? :P But anyway. Yes, they have moved on for the most part, but in my headcanon there is always that "what if" feeling with Helgazar. The constant question of what might have been. I wanted to explore that with this oneshot, and how they might still think of each other even long after the ship has sailed :(

Thank you for your kind words, Kiana! I so appreciate you stopping by, and I'm really glad you enjoyed this! It's one of my favorite stories I've written, because the style was a step out of my comfort zone and I feel like it paid off. It's so great to hear that you thought so too, because your opinion really means a lot to me :) Thank you again!


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Review #3, by StarlightAsteria I

7th July 2014:
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This is really quite imaginative; I especially liked the way your writing seamlessly flows from one pov to another. I also liked how you never actually mention any names of the founders, but that you figure out who they are nonetheless. I especially liked your take on Rowena :) I hadn't expected that.

Author's Response: Hi! I'm so glad that you liked the story and found it original. And it's great to hear that you were able to figure out who people are. Honestly, when I was writing the spouses I didn't have Godric or Rowena in mind, but now that you mention it, this story could definitely be read that way. I love your interpretation! Thanks again for the lovely review :)


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Review #4, by The Empress I

21st January 2014:
Hello! I popped over from TGS to browse your page. Congratulations on being featured!
This story caught my eye because of Richard on your banner ♥

At first it took me a bit to figure out the change in points of view, but I'm a bit slow ;) Once I realized, I could immediately hear their voices in my head and WOW. I absolutely love this. Everything about it. Truthfully, it stole my breath.

The pick ups from one pov to another, as if they were having the exact same thoughts is just gorgeous. I am in love with this story and this style and everything about it.

You captured the emotion and movement of the scene so beautifully. I could feel their heartbreak and their longing and their loyalty and love. I at once both wanted them to have a happy ending together and also didn't want that because their spouses were so wonderful to them. And they so obviously loved them too.

This line --> enveloping two loves within a single heart has come with a heavy burden. So. Much. Love.

I've read through it twice and I'm gong to read it again because I swear with each reading I'm going to love it more and more.


Author's Response: Shiloh! I am so sorry I never responded to this review, but I want to thank you SO much for coming to visit my author page! I was so excited to be featured, and it makes me happy that it brought you over to my neck of the woods :)

This is probably one of the riskier stories I've posted, just because I wasn't sure if the POV changes would work for people. I read a oneshot with some similar elements (I can't remember the name of it right now, but it's a Romione by TenthWeasleyWriter, who is wonderful), and I wanted to try my hand at the back-and-forth style. I had never seen a whole story written this way before, and I hoped it wouldn't be too weird. I'm so glad you ended up enjoying it, though! I'm pretty proud of how it turned out :)

Your reaction to their conflict is exactly what I had in mind :) I wanted to show how difficult it was for them to be fully happy with what they have when there's always that "what if" lurking in the back of their minds. I'm so happy that it spoke to you, and that you enjoyed reading it.

This review makes me so happy! I just don't even know what to say, really. I'm so flattered that you liked this! Thank you so much for your kind words and wonderful encouragement. I appreciate it so much! :)


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Review #5, by HeyMrsPotter I

1st August 2013:
Hello, here for our swap. I couldn't resist picking a founders one after reading Ready. Yet again, I wasn't disappointed! I fear I may have developed a new love for founders stories.

I really loved how you structured this, I thought it was brilliantly clever. I love that you had their thoughts so connected and the way that one ran into the other worked so well. Even thoguh you jump from one perspective to another it doesn't interrupt the flow of the story at all.

I also really enjoyed the relationship, or lack of, beween Helga and Salazar, it was just so tragic and had me wondering what happened to them, why are they apart if they're so in love-it's sad!

The characters you've created fit really well with the little snippets of information we know about them and I really like that you've given Salazar a more human side beyond his pigheadedness about purebloods.

All in all, beautifully written, I loved it! Thanks for the swap :)

Author's Response: Hi again Dee! I'm just a little behind on my responses, but better late than never right? I'm so happy you enjoyed this!

I was worried that the interconnected viewpoints would be confusing, so it's great to hear that you didn't have trouble reading it. It was sort of an experiment for me, and it was definitely an interesting challenge to weave both voices together :)

It was sad for me to write my favorite pairing coming to this fate, so I definitely understand what you mean! I always thought Helgazar was a great "tragic romance" ship, and this is the first time I've really explored that. I was intentionally kind of vague about the details of the split, and I'm glad that didn't put you off.

This sort of goes hand in hand with my other Founders stories, so if you'd ever like to check them out feel free! It makes me happy to hear that I just might have made a Founders fan out of you :). Your reviews are always so lovely, Dee! Thank you so much for swapping with me!


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Review #6, by SereneChaos I

18th July 2013:
Oh my goodness. I'm absolutely floored by this story. I'm always interested in the way people present Salazar and Helga, and I think here in particular, I liked your middle-aged, married to someone else, versions of them. There's a great maturity in their thoughts that makes the romance (or never-to-be romance) all the more strong, and...gah, I just love it.

I've never seen anyone use this kind of format for a story before, and it worked fantastically here. I like the idea of them switching back and forth between thoughts the way old married couples (or soulmates!) can finish each other's sentences. Your transitions between points of view is seamless and I'm a little envious at how well you did them, lol. I also liked how towards the end the shifts in pov got smaller and smaller, sort of like a funnel where they meet together in the end.

All in all, this was a perfect story, even down to the structural backbone. Great work!

Author's Response: Hi Serene, thank you so much for coming! I love Helgazar too, as you know, and I thought it would be interesting to show them in this light; still in love, but with separate lives and spouses. I guess I was in an angsty mood *shrugs*

I'm glad you like the echoing thoughts. You're absolutely right, they are soulmates, and I imagined them being just so attuned to each other that their thoughts would flow together. It was a fun experiment, definitely!

Thanks for the lovely review! I'm so happy you liked it :D


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Review #7, by marauderfan I

15th July 2013:
Hello! I really enjoyed reading this. I love the Founders, and this is a unique take on them. The writing style you explored works really well, with the switching POV's, and I loved that it switched mid-sentence- like they're thinking the same things from across the room. The personalities you've ascribed to each of them are really good too. But I think my favourite aspect of this piece is that although nothing actually happens, everything happens, just in a glance (if that makes sense). It's a very stylistically beautiful story and I loved reading it! Great job!

Author's Response: Kristin, hi! I'm thrilled that you picked this story to review--it's one of my favorites :). I wanted their thoughts to echo each other, and this was the way it all ended up flowing. I wasn't sure how it would go over, but several people have seemed to like it. So glad you're one of them! And yes, it makes perfect sense to say that a lot happens without anything actually happening :)

Thank you so much for reviewing! It means so much!


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Review #8, by Siriusly89 I

13th February 2013:
Oooh! This piece was so well written, and mysterious!

Can I just make some guesses here:
Helga and Salazar were together when they were younger, except it didn't work out, so Helga went off with Godric and Salazar went off with Rowena? Am I right?

Anyway, that doesn't really concern me because it could be written about Mary the accountant who has two million cats and I would still love this :D

I don't read Founders era very often, but I am so glad I got to read this one, because it is so well written and everything just flows so nicely together. Every paragraph fits together so beautifully!

10/10! Amazing!

Author's Response: Oh my goodness, hi! Thank you so much for coming by to review!

You're half-right: Salazar and Helga were together, but they don't end up with Rowena and Godric in the end. I imagine them with totally different people. I'm kind of a Founders enthusiast, so I have this whole backstory imagined for all of them :) Feel free to check out my other Founders stories if you're interested!

I am so happy you like the flow of this! It means so much to me that you came to review. Thanks again! :)


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Review #9, by Remus I

5th February 2013:
Heya! Perelandra here from the forums with your review! :)

Ugh, this story and my poor feelings!

I absolutely enjoyed reading this. The change of POV was genius and I loved how you wove their narratives together to make it whole. My favorite line has got to be:

she has accepted the portion of my heart I am able to give her and made no claim on the rest

That made me go 'awww' very loudly. I'm actually glad that I'm on my own right now other wise I would get strange looks.

The personalities you give Salazar and Helga are fantastic. She seems like a woman who doesn't care what people think of her for she is happy. She doesn't care of people think of her as the best looking woman in the world or the ugliest. She just lives her life and is happy. And Salazar...he's definitely more well rounded with actual feelings! He's not evil and I'm glad that I didn't get to see that overly done Slytherin characteristic. Really liked how despite being in love with each other, they still love their respective husband and wife and they're loyal to them. Now I'm left to wonder of what happened between Salazar and Helga that they didn't end up together.

I really wish I could make this review longer but I just don't have anything to say!

Fantastic job! :D Thanks for letting me read this!

Until next time


Author's Response: Hi Rosie! Thank you so much for coming by!

Haha I'm glad you enjoyed it, and that it gave you Helgazar feels. That's what I was aiming for :) And the narrative was my biggest worry when posting this; I like the way their thoughts flow into one another, but I wasn't sure how it would sit with readers. It's wonderful to hear that you liked it!

I'm glad to see that you connected not only with Helga and Salazar's love story, but also with their spouses. This is the 3rd story I've written for this ship, and I sort of have their whole lives planned out already :P So I wanted to show what it would be like for them to have happiness with another person, and yet still have regrets for what might have been.

Thank you so much Rosie! This review made my day!


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Review #10, by aquabluez17 I

3rd February 2013:
Hey! Mya here for the swap! Sorry for the delayyy! Loads of homework and all

This is definitely one of the coolest narration styles I've ever seen here!! Seriously it was amazing.

My favorite part was when the sentences connected but from the different POVs. It was so unique! You really did an amazing job here.

I really loved the whole story. I do think we could maybe get a bit more feel for the characters if you mentioned small things that could show us their personality traits but really it was amazing. This is me trying, and failing, to find faults haha.

Great work Maggie and thanks for the swap!!

Author's Response: Hi Mya! Thank you so much for coming by!

Ahh thank you! I'm so happy to hear that you like the narration. I was sort of playing around with having their thoughts flow together and complete each other, and this was the best way I knew to do it. So glad you enjoyed it!

Thanks for the characterization suggestion. I'm always looking for ways to improve on that, so it's much appreciated.

Thank you again for the awesome review! We should definitely swap again sometime :)

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Review #11, by fauxthefox I

2nd February 2013:
Hello! I'm here for the swap :)

I love doing these swaps because I get to pick up such unique stories. This is definitely one of the coolest narration styles I've ever seen here - my favorite parts of the story are when the two characters' narration becomes interconnected, and it's like one sentence that they're sharing. It's also extremely well-written, and the style of writing fits the Founders era (I can't stand it when people try to do Founders characters in really casual writing) without being overbearingly wordy.

From your descriptions of Slytherin and Hufflepuff looking out at each other, you manage to indirectly characterize the two pretty well. Because the narration is so bound up in the characters' heads, it's sort of hard to get a good idea of the concrete world around them, so I'd suggest a bit more description to sort give it all a grounding.

This is really cool! Thanks for the swap!

Author's Response: Hi Faux! Thank you so much!

Yay, someone who likes the style! So far the reviews have been firmly mixed in that area, so it's fun to see that some people actually like it :) And I do work really hard on making the narration sound true to the era when I write Founders, so it's great to hear that you liked that part of it.

Thanks for the suggestion about physical descriptions. That makes a lot of sense, and I do think it would add to the story.

Thanks again for the swap, and for the great review!


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Review #12, by Cleopatraa I

1st February 2013:
Review swap! Sorry for the long wait but it was quite late yesterday and I had to make my homework today.

I found it really interesting to see this was a Helga/Salazar as one I love minor pairings and two I recently wrote an Helena/Salazar. A different pairing I know, but I was curious how you portrayed Salazar Slytherin.

I loved the fact he acknowledged she wasn’t the most beautiful woman around, as in a lot of stories the main characters ‘love’ is the most beautiful woman he has ever seen and I liked the fact he said it was the same in her youth. So I was quite surprised to see he has a wife, but it does make much sense for that time period. So kudos on that!

To be honest with you I found the style of writing a bit annoying, with you cutting things out and such. I’m sure others would love it but it isn’t something I personally enjoy much. So you shouldn’t behave it on my behalf or anything haha.

Well done! A tip for you though would be to get a banner.


Author's Response: Hi Cleopatra! Thank you so much for the swap!

I'm a huge Founders fan, and it's the genre that comes most naturally for me when I write. So I've been playing with this pairing a lot. I might have to look at your Helena/Salazar sometime; that seems like it would be really interesting.

I didn't find it realistic for Helga to be beautiful, honestly. I mean, Rowena was described as the beautiful one, and it's like you said; all women can't be attractive. I figured that their love would be based on much more than looks. And I included their spouses to show that a happy ending is not possible for Helga and Salazar as a couple.

I mean, I figured the style might not be everyone's thing. I wanted their thoughts to complete each other, so I wrote part of a sentence from one point of view and finished it from another. It's just the way it flowed while I was writing. I really appreciate an honest opinion, because I wasn't sure how it would go over.

Thanks again for coming! I appreciate your time, and I'm so glad I got to read your story as well :)


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Review #13, by CloakAuror9 I

31st January 2013:
I found the style of writing really interesting! I did find it confusing in the first and second paragraph though, I thought the parts of you sentences got cut-off or something then I quickly realised that it wasn't. :P

I love your characterisation of both Helga and Salazar! I also liked the way you didn't just focus the attention on just the two of them but also included their spouses in the story.

I've never read a Helga/Salazar before but this is really really good! Your descriptions were amazing too, the language you used fit the Founders Era and this is just a well done story overall. Great job! ♥


94th review out of 100

Author's Response: Hi Izzy, and thanks for the review! I rarely get random reviews, so this one is extra special :) I really appreciate your thoughts!

I was trying out something new with the style, and I really had no idea how it would go over with readers. I meant to have Salazar's and Helga's thoughts intertwine and complete each other, and the cutting off in the middle of sentences was just the way it flowed for me. I'm really glad you found it interesting.

I'm glad you like Helga and Salazar! This is one of several stories I've written about them, and I just love writing them :) And I wanted to show their spouses to give an idea of the reality of their situation, and to add a little angst maybe? I've never written angst before; this is a "first-attempt" story in a lot of areas :)

Thanks again for the awesome review! I'm so glad you enjoyed this, and I appreciate your time so much :)


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