I liked this story! Very nice. I think you should take a second look at it to correct a few mistakes, but overall it was a really nice read. I love their family in this story - James as a troublemaker, Albus' character and... yeah, pretty much everything. Well done :)Author's Response: Thanks very much :) I went back and checked for the mistakes. Thanks for tell me. Report Review
Nice little one-shot, Albus is quite cute as an ickle first year! :)
Just a few things I noticed though:
"Hello sweat heart"
Gryffindor not Griffendoor, Lily not Lilly, hippogriff bait not Hypogriff bate.
"Lilly looked shocked and appalled..." section needn't be in italics either.
But overall, I enjoyed reading :)Author's Response: Thank you so much for pointing those out! I must have had a massive brain fart when I wrote and posted this lol Thanks again :) Report Review
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