Wow!! this is amazing!! I really want to know what will happen next.
In this it seemed like Al didn't really like Julie. I wonder why? I wished we had seen more of James but it was a prologue so thats all good.
Maybe if you add a bit of description about Julie/James. Just a bit, nothing too much, we could get a good view on their relationship and feel more pulled in.
I really think this idea is unique! Can't wait for you to update! Report Review
love it update soon, great preview of the storyAuthor's Response: Thank you so much for the review :) Report Review
Oh wow. I'm a little confused, but I guess that's the goal of this prologue, isn't it ;)?
So, she's a muggle and in the middle of a battlefield in the Wizarding World. And she was there to see James. And why is everybody fighting?
Well, I'm sure I'll find out soon!Author's Response: Thank you so much for the review :) I'm glad you liked it! Report Review
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