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Review #1, by kenpo The Potter Reservation

14th March 2014:
AHH THIS WAS SO SAD BUT SO GOOD.

This review will be me babbling and babbling, so I apologize in advance.

Oh my gosh!!! I had a feeling that something bad was going to happen, because... well... duh. But OUCH. You hit my right in the feels and just kept hitting me again and again.

I have to just go section by section and tell you everything that I loved.

The opener:
I loved little Harry!! There was such a short amount of time that James and Lily were parents together, and I love that you included little details about his relationship with his father. Ugggh even the happy parts make me sad because of how short lived they were!!

I also really love they way you incorporated magic. I'm really awful at remembering that my characters are magic, and the little things like the hovering book and siphoning water off the floor (wait was that in the first part? Ah, whatever) really made the story come to life. I'm a believer that it's all in the details, and you've done that beautifully.

The restaurant: I love these characters that you've created! Deborah seems like a sweetheart (although I think she'd annoy me if I was around her for too long). I found her thought process humorous, and it was endearing how much she cared about James' reservation.
How much she cared about James compared to how little she cared about "bored couple" (haha, by the way), also really shows how much work James put into the evening. For her to be THAT passionate about it, he really must've been so excited and so in love with Lily and... GAH. MY FEELS. YOU'VE KILLED THEM.

Third part:
Ahh, yes it was here that she uses magic to siphon off the water. Once again, I love the interactions here. I like that he was writing to Remus. Even though I love the James-Sirius friendship, I think that they were all close, and that's something that can be hard to convey. But you've done it extremely well in such few words!! Also, the references to Peter I enjoyed. Even though it made me cringe (NOOO DON'T TRUST HIM!!!), I liked that you referenced the friendships between all four of the Marauders.

The waiting in the restaurant part:
More Deborah! I love her! I like the repetition of a la. It made me chuckle. Once again, I think her thought process was fun. The "Oh god, dinner with the in-laws" made me laugh.
This was also the part where I accepted that this would not end well... which I already sort of knew from the beginning.

The next part with James and Lily talking:
It's so sad that she was so sad! That's such a bad sentence, but I don't even care. I can see James trying to be SO optimistic for her, but she's just realistic. I think James probably knows that there situation is really bad, too, but he tries to keep his attitude up for his family and... IT'S JUST SO SAD. WHY DO YOU DO THIS TO ME?!
And again, I loved the mention of Sirius. It cemented that Lily and Sirius were good friends, which I think is a lovely thing for you to do.

The last part (which I don't even want to talk about or think about but I've come this far so I'll keep going):

WHHYYY?!?!

It's so beautiful but so sad!!! I feel so awful for Remus. His fate was just awful! He lost all of his friends in such a short amount of time, and because of his condition it's so hard for him to make friends, and all he can do is just pass the time, counting down to the next full moon...

:(!

And he wants to be with Harry, but he can't, so he's just looking forward to a time that he can be with Harry and tell him all about how great his parents were... and this is just so sad. I'm so sad. It was beautifully written, though. I really liked Deborah's reaction to Remus, and his scars. Also, the way that she KNEW it wasn't James, just by his attitude and demeanor.

You wrote this really beautifully, and this makes me want to write about Remus. Or James/Lily and baby Harry.

Oh, BvB battle, by the way:)

This was a pleasure to read.

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Review #2, by APerkins The Potter Reservation

22nd June 2013:
Awww. That was a great story. Really well written, flows beautifully. You gave credit to your beta too which I like, but the snap shot jsut really flowed. I dont have much experience with writing, but I do with reading, and that style of writing is enjoyable, catches you up in it, and leaves you craving the next paragraph, trying to find out what is happening. Pretty impressive for a one shot, even if I hate the fact that it has a sad ending.(J/k it wouldnt be HP if it were all disney endings). I think this stype of scene can go overboard on emotion and mush -trying to hard to be deep and meaningful - but I think you handled that part really well too.

Author's Response: Thank you, I'm glad you enjoyed it! I'm sorry it took me so long to see this and reply to it, but it makes me glad to see someone stumbled across my work and took the time to read and review. I struggled a little bit with this one, I have to say, I wasn't always quite sure where I was going with it. Getting a beta definitely helped.

I'm a sucker for emotion and mush, which means I need to try doubly hard to keep it from seeping into my writing. It's nice to hear that I didn't let it in this time! Although, looking back, I think I just poured it all into the hostess and let it speak for itself in more of a comic relief-y way.

Anyway, once again, many thanks for stopping by! It means a lot!


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Review #3, by Kathrynen The Potter Reservation

12th January 2013:
That is so sad!
It's really good, I like it, it took me a couple of paragraphs after the 22nd birthday thing to realise but when I did I was like omg because she was so excited and they were dead! I like how you had Remus come in and sit it for them, how awful would it have been if she was just waiting and waiting and no one ever showed up :(
It's really good though, we'll written and an original storyline :)
K x

Author's Response: Thank you! I struggled a bit with this one, I had an idea that I wanted to convey but was unsure how to do it. I'm glad it worked out in the end.

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Review #4, by Snapdragons The Potter Reservation

11th January 2013:
Oh my gosh, this is possibly one of my favorite gifts of all time, thank you so much! ♥ James and Lily will always be one of my favorite couples and I love reading about them. This was simultaneously adorable and heartbreaking all at the same time - you took me on quite the emotional roller coaster, haha!

It took me a little bit to catch on to the difference in time, which I think added to the effect and made it that much stronger. I suppose for a minute or so I actually thought they were going to go to the restaurant, until I finally put the pieces together and realized that Lily would never actually have a 22nd birthday. That was actually one of my favorite bits about this, the way that it took a little while to sink in. It made me think a bit more about their deaths and really, just how short their lives were cut.

I loved seeing James, Lily, and baby Harry! They were just too cute. :) I loved seeing all three of them together and getting to see them as a family. It was very sweet, but you also showed the reality of the war, as well - being forced to hide, the constant worrying about the future and fear for their lives. Realistic, and especially heartbreaking when I realized the conversation was in September, just a month before they died.

Deborah was wonderful! Bubbly and lovely and absolutely charming. I found her enthusiasm quite cute. It was endearing how invested she was in "her" couple :)

The ending was perfect. Having Remus come in and take their reservation to pay his last respects - wow, it just really hit me. The way that this was all he had left of them... and Harry, who he wasn't allowed to see. It was bittersweet and I can't even find the words to describe how much I loved it. But it really brought all of it together so, so wonderfully. I admit that I really loved thinking about Remus bringing Harry there one day, the way that Remus hoped that things would get better.

This was lovely and so, so wonderful. I am completely in love with it. Thank you so much!

Author's Response: Oh gosh, I can't believe I'm responding to this so late... I'm sorry! But thank you for the review! It took me awhile to piece this story together, and I'm really glad you liked the way it turned out. It was hard to provide some closure, but I do think Remus was the way to go. This one is for you, after all, so your opinion is the only one that counts!

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