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Review #1, by victoria_anne The Potter Reservation

12th April 2016:
Hello Sarah!

It's me again! Your stalker! Hooray!

Okay so I love a James/Lily story, but I especially love a James/Lily/Harry story, because they are super cute, and yours is super duper trouper cute.

I'm already loving the POV of the restaurant, that's a really sweet detail.

A petunia bud on each plate? A coincidence, methinks? Perhaps not. Hm.

♥ Top-notch Marauder protection ♥

Er... I'm starting to have a bad feeling about this, especially since I've just remembered I don't think Lily ever made it to 22.


Yes. Yes you are.


I like the running theme of "a la name", that's sweet, everyone dealing with things their own way.

Okay so this is another absolutely magnificent piece of writing from you Sarah, I love everything you do, even when you make me feel all the feels ♥

Love Bianca

Author's Response: Haha I don't think you quite count as my stalker. But I've loved getting your reviews!! (even if this response is kind of late... my bad) Thank you for all of them!

Haha I'm glad you think everyone was cute. To be honest my guilty pleasure might be cute Harry/Lily/James as a happy family. I just feel like they would have been the BEST family ever, and I had a really good time conveying that.

I don't remember why I put the petunia thing in, but I feel like that must have been on purpose! So, go me? I guess?

Wow, good job catching the Lily age thing! I definitely put that one in on purpose but didn't know if anyone would realize what it meant.

Haha I know the all caps was because of your despair, but, well, I'm glad you got into it. :P And I'm sorry!?

Thank you so much for the review, I loved it. :D And it's so flattering that you continued to come back and it enjoy another story of mine... Even if it was a sad one. :P

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Review #2, by I dreamed a dream The Potter Reservation

22nd April 2015:

I'm "I dreamed a dream" from Lés Misérables. Fantine has yet to sign me, so I have a little time before the scene is coming up. And since my friend, who happens to love me and the musical I'm in, told me she had seen you around the forums, I figured I could come by and leave you a review. I do it in her stead, because she can't come for safety reasons. I think she said she was hiding from the evil King of Westeros... Josh? No, I think it was Jeoffrey. Anyway, that is why I'm here.

I loved James and Lily. My friend over at the forums have told me Jily is her OTP, and I must say I now understand why. They were so happy together here. You could really tell they were in love, and that they were a very good couple. And that does make the ending all the more sad, and I know a thing or two about sadness. After all, Fantine sings me when she is in a horrible place and wishes for something better, and I suppose could just as well have been sung by someone in this story.

It is always sad when people die young. I think everyone is deserving of a long life, of reaching their dreams, their hopes. That is after all the meaning of me, the meaning of my song. I am a dream for something better, something that was deserved but never gotten.

I feel horrible for poor Remus, having lost all his friends in such a short period of time. I can't have been easy discovering two friends were dead, and then thinking one of the other friends betrayed them and later killed the last of his friends. He only had Harry left, the only reminder of what was, but he couldn't be with him. It truly is sad.

Oh no, it seems I must leave. Fantine is about to sing me, and it would be rather awkward if I was not there when she did. But I really loved the story. It was good. By the way, maybe you can say hi to my friend over at the forums for me. She uses a strange name over there that I can't remember, but she gave me this clue long ago. Maybe you can figure it out:

Your clue:

If you haven't been active,
My name won't make sense
I suppose you can say,
It was in Tanya's defence

Hope this might be of any help if you wish to look for her. May you have a much better day than Fantine!

Your Sincerely

I dreamed a dream

Author's Response: Aw, thank you, mysterious reviewer! Whoever you are, we might have something in common-- I adore Les Mis and Game of Thrones! So I especially appreciate your references. I'm glad you enjoyed my portrayal of Lily and James, and Remus as well. It was such a nice surprise to log in and see this.

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Review #3, by The Basilisk The Potter Reservation

21st March 2015:
Hello, lllb! It'ss me: the Bassilisssk. Just was taking a sstroll 'round the casstle groundss and I came face to face with thiss wonderful sstory. I ssimply had to review it!

I love your characterization of these guys, they're all so cute and happy! And I definitely wish I could charm my book to hover above the tub. (It's times like these that I wish I wasn't a giant, murderous snake... Oh well, we've all got to make do with our lot in life.) Deborah just seems so sweet - reminds me of Molly Weasley Sr., actually!

Remus trying to pay with a galleon, oh my. Silly thing, he should have known better! Probably would have done, if he'd not been in such a state. I cannot believe the plot twist in this story! It was heartbreaking and yet so fitting. It was extremely well done, and I swear my stomach dropped a mile when I realised why they weren't going. Pardon me, I'm not crying, I'm just...crying. I admit it.

I'm sso glad to have had the chance to read thiss, thankss for a great read!

(I've decided to post 44 reviews over the next little while. Each one of them has a character at the bottom. If you can find all 44 reviews (not all are out yet, so keep your eyes peeled) and rearrange the letters into a quote from Harry Potter and PM it to WriteYourHeartOut on the forums you could win a donation to HPFF in your name! There's a topic in the Off Topic Section if you want to collaborate your efforts!)

Thankss again,
The Basilisk


Author's Response: Thanks so much for the review! (You're really in character, it's great. I'm glad you liked my characterizations, i think that's definitely what I'm most proud of here. The plot took a little more wrangling. Looking forward to finding out who you are!

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Review #4, by horcruxxx The Potter Reservation

20th March 2015:
Hello, I'm here for the BvB battle review!

What a beautiful and sad story. At first I wanted to focus on the little details like book floating over the water and Lily liking petunias, but then I got genuinely sad over how the story turned out.

Your portrayal of Lily and James' love was perfect, I think that if Harry was ever imagining what his parents evenings together might look like, he would imagine what you wrote.

I liked the story so much, that I even don't mind that you imagied James proposing to Lily in a restaurant, even though I would have picked a different place. But it really worked here, as a linkage between past and present, between the Potters' happiness and Remus' (and I imagine others') despair and his sense of failure.


Author's Response: Thanks for stopping by! I remember that when I was writing the story, I had far more fun writing the Potter family scenes than anything else. It's so rare that I get to imagine the three of them as a happy family, together. I think that in the story, it's the restaurant where Lily's parents got engaged, and not Lily and James themselves. But you're totally right that the restaurant becomes a place for many different hopes, as well as many people's crushed dreams. Thank you so much for the review!

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Review #5, by Helga Hufflepuff The Potter Reservation

20th March 2015:
Hello dear!

*sniff* this story was shaping up to be such a happy story; and then it all turned out so badly and, believe it or not, I didn't see it coming! The ending just made me cry, and I had an unfortunate lack of disposable hankies to summon.

I'm still wondering if this means the two different point of views/locations meant that one was in October and the other in January aka Lily's birthday.

Such a lovely, despite heart breaking, story.


Author's Response: Thank you for the review! What a lovely surprise. And yes, the story is set in two slightly different time periods, one before James and Lily's deaths, and one around her birthday. I'm glad you liked the story! This is my first review from one of you mystery reviewers... Definitely a nice thing to wake up to.

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Review #6, by kenpo The Potter Reservation

14th March 2014:

This review will be me babbling and babbling, so I apologize in advance.

Oh my gosh!!! I had a feeling that something bad was going to happen, because... well... duh. But OUCH. You hit my right in the feels and just kept hitting me again and again.

I have to just go section by section and tell you everything that I loved.

The opener:
I loved little Harry!! There was such a short amount of time that James and Lily were parents together, and I love that you included little details about his relationship with his father. Ugggh even the happy parts make me sad because of how short lived they were!!

I also really love they way you incorporated magic. I'm really awful at remembering that my characters are magic, and the little things like the hovering book and siphoning water off the floor (wait was that in the first part? Ah, whatever) really made the story come to life. I'm a believer that it's all in the details, and you've done that beautifully.

The restaurant: I love these characters that you've created! Deborah seems like a sweetheart (although I think she'd annoy me if I was around her for too long). I found her thought process humorous, and it was endearing how much she cared about James' reservation.
How much she cared about James compared to how little she cared about "bored couple" (haha, by the way), also really shows how much work James put into the evening. For her to be THAT passionate about it, he really must've been so excited and so in love with Lily and... GAH. MY FEELS. YOU'VE KILLED THEM.

Third part:
Ahh, yes it was here that she uses magic to siphon off the water. Once again, I love the interactions here. I like that he was writing to Remus. Even though I love the James-Sirius friendship, I think that they were all close, and that's something that can be hard to convey. But you've done it extremely well in such few words!! Also, the references to Peter I enjoyed. Even though it made me cringe (NOOO DON'T TRUST HIM!!!), I liked that you referenced the friendships between all four of the Marauders.

The waiting in the restaurant part:
More Deborah! I love her! I like the repetition of a la. It made me chuckle. Once again, I think her thought process was fun. The "Oh god, dinner with the in-laws" made me laugh.
This was also the part where I accepted that this would not end well... which I already sort of knew from the beginning.

The next part with James and Lily talking:
It's so sad that she was so sad! That's such a bad sentence, but I don't even care. I can see James trying to be SO optimistic for her, but she's just realistic. I think James probably knows that there situation is really bad, too, but he tries to keep his attitude up for his family and... IT'S JUST SO SAD. WHY DO YOU DO THIS TO ME?!
And again, I loved the mention of Sirius. It cemented that Lily and Sirius were good friends, which I think is a lovely thing for you to do.

The last part (which I don't even want to talk about or think about but I've come this far so I'll keep going):


It's so beautiful but so sad!!! I feel so awful for Remus. His fate was just awful! He lost all of his friends in such a short amount of time, and because of his condition it's so hard for him to make friends, and all he can do is just pass the time, counting down to the next full moon...


And he wants to be with Harry, but he can't, so he's just looking forward to a time that he can be with Harry and tell him all about how great his parents were... and this is just so sad. I'm so sad. It was beautifully written, though. I really liked Deborah's reaction to Remus, and his scars. Also, the way that she KNEW it wasn't James, just by his attitude and demeanor.

You wrote this really beautifully, and this makes me want to write about Remus. Or James/Lily and baby Harry.

Oh, BvB battle, by the way:)

This was a pleasure to read.

Author's Response: Thank you so much for the wonderful review! I'm really glad you liked the happy parts of Lily and James' home, because those were probably my favorite parts to write. I did my best to make the restaurant memorable as well, so it's good to hear that Deborah was eye-catching. I'm really not sure how I feel about the ending, I feel like everything with Remus was kind of forced... But, well, your reaction is quite promising. ;) Thank you so, so much!

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Review #7, by APerkins The Potter Reservation

22nd June 2013:
Awww. That was a great story. Really well written, flows beautifully. You gave credit to your beta too which I like, but the snap shot jsut really flowed. I dont have much experience with writing, but I do with reading, and that style of writing is enjoyable, catches you up in it, and leaves you craving the next paragraph, trying to find out what is happening. Pretty impressive for a one shot, even if I hate the fact that it has a sad ending.(J/k it wouldnt be HP if it were all disney endings). I think this stype of scene can go overboard on emotion and mush -trying to hard to be deep and meaningful - but I think you handled that part really well too.

Author's Response: Thank you, I'm glad you enjoyed it! I'm sorry it took me so long to see this and reply to it, but it makes me glad to see someone stumbled across my work and took the time to read and review. I struggled a little bit with this one, I have to say, I wasn't always quite sure where I was going with it. Getting a beta definitely helped.

I'm a sucker for emotion and mush, which means I need to try doubly hard to keep it from seeping into my writing. It's nice to hear that I didn't let it in this time! Although, looking back, I think I just poured it all into the hostess and let it speak for itself in more of a comic relief-y way.

Anyway, once again, many thanks for stopping by! It means a lot!

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Review #8, by Kathrynen The Potter Reservation

12th January 2013:
That is so sad!
It's really good, I like it, it took me a couple of paragraphs after the 22nd birthday thing to realise but when I did I was like omg because she was so excited and they were dead! I like how you had Remus come in and sit it for them, how awful would it have been if she was just waiting and waiting and no one ever showed up :(
It's really good though, we'll written and an original storyline :)
K x

Author's Response: Thank you! I struggled a bit with this one, I had an idea that I wanted to convey but was unsure how to do it. I'm glad it worked out in the end.

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Review #9, by Snapdragons The Potter Reservation

11th January 2013:
Oh my gosh, this is possibly one of my favorite gifts of all time, thank you so much! ♥ James and Lily will always be one of my favorite couples and I love reading about them. This was simultaneously adorable and heartbreaking all at the same time - you took me on quite the emotional roller coaster, haha!

It took me a little bit to catch on to the difference in time, which I think added to the effect and made it that much stronger. I suppose for a minute or so I actually thought they were going to go to the restaurant, until I finally put the pieces together and realized that Lily would never actually have a 22nd birthday. That was actually one of my favorite bits about this, the way that it took a little while to sink in. It made me think a bit more about their deaths and really, just how short their lives were cut.

I loved seeing James, Lily, and baby Harry! They were just too cute. :) I loved seeing all three of them together and getting to see them as a family. It was very sweet, but you also showed the reality of the war, as well - being forced to hide, the constant worrying about the future and fear for their lives. Realistic, and especially heartbreaking when I realized the conversation was in September, just a month before they died.

Deborah was wonderful! Bubbly and lovely and absolutely charming. I found her enthusiasm quite cute. It was endearing how invested she was in "her" couple :)

The ending was perfect. Having Remus come in and take their reservation to pay his last respects - wow, it just really hit me. The way that this was all he had left of them... and Harry, who he wasn't allowed to see. It was bittersweet and I can't even find the words to describe how much I loved it. But it really brought all of it together so, so wonderfully. I admit that I really loved thinking about Remus bringing Harry there one day, the way that Remus hoped that things would get better.

This was lovely and so, so wonderful. I am completely in love with it. Thank you so much!

Author's Response: Oh gosh, I can't believe I'm responding to this so late... I'm sorry! But thank you for the review! It took me awhile to piece this story together, and I'm really glad you liked the way it turned out. It was hard to provide some closure, but I do think Remus was the way to go. This one is for you, after all, so your opinion is the only one that counts!

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