Hey there, here to review your piece for my challenge! :)
This was a chilling piece, the way you wrote it was so lovely but so haunting at the same time. It really fitted the mood of the story and the descriptions you used were perfect.
That last line, ergh so sad! It's sad to think that once they were just two kids, at school trying to work out weather they liked each other or not and then it was over. Just like that. And Harry was left :'(
Your prompt was James/Lily and you've did a great job on showing how Lily changed her perception of James and I love the quote at the end about when a hero is born a star is born, it's so moving!
A lovely one-shot and you've did a great job with the prompt! :)Author's Response: Thank you so much for this review, i really enjoyed your challenge! Report Review
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