Severus is a man of mysteries and that's what I love about it him. ♥

I want to point out a that you have a couple of mistakes in this chapter that is noticeable and a bit of a throw off. :(

But the rest was just lovely. And honestly, I am no fan of OC's, especially when they become a main character, but I truly love your Character, Alexis. :)

It saddens me that you don't have a lot of reviews, like I have mentioned before. :/

Well, you can expect reviews from me when you update. ^_^

I look forward to more of your next update. :D


- Asphodel

Author's Response: Thanks a bunch!! :)

If you don't mind can you shoot me a message on the forums about what mistakes you found? I tried re-reading it myself but I'm not finding it. Thanks!

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Yay! Another chapter from you! :D This was very well played out between what happened to Harry and Ginny. Not too dramatic, because I can't stand it. You really balance the anxiety of Ginny's feelings and displayed Harry well too as to talking to Ginny. :)

And I definitely love how you didn't end it with a sappy romancy kiss that mostly everyone does now a days. smh.

Again wonderful job and I look forward to your next update. ^_^


-Asphodel

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Another lovely chapter. ♥ Please write more. I should have checked earlier to see that you have updated, but there were other things. Anyways, look forward to your update. :D

-Asphodel

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Another awesome chapter!!
The depth to Snape's emotions is so vivid - yet not overly done and written. He's very relatable, and it makes this story very gripping and hard to not read!
The whole twisting plot line is frankly quite riveting, and I thoroughly enjoyed reading all of it. I love the style you write in, too - it makes your writing unique, and very original too.
Overall, a fantastic descriptive piece. :D

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Well, I'm glad my reviews are making you happy, because you deserve them. ;)

Yeah, I'm back again, since I thought I reviewed this chappie but I didn't. (I'm a being a pest I know, sorry. -_-) Lol :P

Still love this chapter, - five stars, 2 thumbs up, 10/10.

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Beautiful! *applauding* absolutely beautiful.

Kudos to you for writing a story where you're able to maintain the personalities of the characters, explore the aspects of the general idea of the plot without losing balance, and just really able to keep readers hanging.

Even though I urge you to update soon, take your sweet time. There's nothing like a good story with time and patience. ;)


-Asphodel

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You. Need. More. Reviews.

Especially for this very awesome fiction here. This, my fellow author, is a work of art.

Keep up the great work.

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You know what I also love about your story... is the interesting chapter titles and summaries (which I suck at.) I need to learn from you more my friend, and great job on this lovely chapter.


-Asphodel

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You must be proud of yourself... for this to be your very first fan fic, this was very well written and I'm really enjoying this.

Look forward to your updates

-Asphodel

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Another wonderful chapter.

I'm usually no fan of OC's but I really like Alexis here and your character actually is a character - with personality and background instead of just adding on a random person for unknown reasons like some other immature writers.

I eagerly await to read more of your story.

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Hey it's me again, thinking that you deserve more reviews than this. :)

You have really gripped me when I first started reading this, and I knew from then on that this was a winner.

I love your writing style and descriptive imagination which I believe I couldn't achieve.

Keep up the great work my friend.


-Asphodel

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Again, another awesome chapter. I'm really glad once more to have read your story.

Wonderfully paced, really in character, you really inspiring me here.

I look forward to reading more from you.


-Asphodel

Author's Response: You have no idea how much your reviews made my day today! I was starting to question some things after some other reviews that were left and yours just brightened everything up!! Thank you so much!!

Oh and don't worry...I have many more chapters finished and will be posting them as fast as validation and real life will allow. (One of my biggest pet peeves on here has been finding a great story and that I discover halfway through has been abandoned!)

Thanks again!!

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Wow... Just wow...

I was brought here to read your story by a request you made at TDA. And I was so eager to read a story of Harry/Snape encounter whether if it was mentor or guardian.

I'm very glad that I clicked on the link because so far this is amazing.

To ease your worries, I'd say you really justified the characters with their emotions. It's beyond perfect, my fellow writer.

And as a fan of Harry/Severus mentor/guardian/family fics, you became my favorite author now.

I wished this story was complete so that I can enjoy more of your chapters.

But sadly not. Don't worry though, I'll be waiting patiently for your updates.


Thanks for this very lovely fic and the banner fits it so nicely.

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This was another good chapter. This may be your first fan-fic, but it feels like you've done plenty of other writing, because your work is pretty polished. It's a nice read.

Okay, here again, I thought Minerva crying was out of character for her. She just doesn't strike me as the crying type, even when under extreme stress, but again, I didn't let a minor little thing like that bother me. I know you're trying to explore some of the emotional trauma characters are feeling.

I did think Snape's apology to the healer was a little too soft and overdone, considering she's a person he scarcely remembers, and even for a man who's been given a second chance at life and who probably WOULD want to make a few apologies. The degree of his apology also made me suspect right away that these two have a romance coming, which feels just a little too predictable if that's what's really what's going to happen. And the healer being excessively overseeing about everything that happened to Snape was pretty much a giveaway as well. I'll see if I'm right about the romance as the story goes on, although I'm not really a romance lover. I'm really just interested in the Snape/Harry aspect of the story, and seeing what you'll do with a Snape as a character.

On the other hand, I think you portrayed Snape with Shacklebolt quite well as a 'softer' Snape who might want to live his life in a better way. And I like that you have him wanting to be an instructor instead of the Headmaster. But that's because I think Minerva makes the perfect headmistress in the absence of Dumbledore, and Snape is so interesting in the classroom even when he's nasty. Both potions and DADA instructor suit him perfectly well.

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Hi, I just happened to find your story, and just finished reading all the posted chapters (through 9), and have really enjoyed it so far. I like a good Snape fic, even when he's portrayed as 'softer', as long as he's kept in charcter. I'll also say that I think you're a very talented writer, and I really like your writing style. It's very engaging, and your descriptions are vivid without being overdone. The pace and flow of the story is also good. It moves along nicely. You did a good job portraying Snape's thoughts in this chapter, which really drew me in. I think you've got his dialogue pretty well in character too, for a 'softer' Snape. I also liked the way you had Lily greet Snape beyond the veil.

I don't think you got McGonagall's dialogue exactly in character, but I didn't let a little thing like that bother me.

One small thing I might point out, and this is not to criticize, but just to mention - was that you suggested James was partially to blame for Snape aligning himself with the Death Eaters, while in Canon I never got the feeling that James had anything to do it. Snape was already firmly aligned with his Death Eater friends before James even entered the picture, and even the possibility of losing Lily's friendship wasn't enough to make him consider breaking ties with his dark friends. I also heard JKR say in an interview that Snape sided with his Death Eater friends in his youth because he wrongly thought power would get him respect, Lily's respect in particular, but later came to realize he was wrong, so it wasn't James at all who pushed Snape in the wrong direction. It was just Snape's own wrong thinking. That said, the books made it clear that Snape came to regret his choices when Lily was killed, and it's always good when a character owns up to their mistakes, which I know Snape does later in this story, and I enjoyed reading how you portrayed that shift in him.

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Very good story. Can't believe it's your first fanfiction. It doesn't read like it.

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This is a truly fascinating story! It contains brilliant description of the in depth thoughts of Snape, and more outer depth thoughts - leaving the reader satisfied yet unsatisfied with still some questions that was very artfully balanced by the writer.

This chapter gave us a useful sight in to the depth of Snape's character, and it's good you touched down that earlier one - bringing Lily in and him meeting her so early on in the book when this is a life-long desire. However, you handled it very well and it is appropriate for this story. I love the dialogue - it's very realistic and believable and really makes us grow affectionate towards the characters. The language you use and the style in which is you write is very readable and grips the reader.

An altogether interesting and awesome piece. Well done :D

Author's Response: Thank you so much! you made my day with this! :) This is my first experience with writing FanFic so I am understandably nervous about it. You feedback helps a ton!! Hope you continue to read on! :)

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Ah, this seems like a very interesting story! I loved how you have given an AU twist to Snape's "death" - of him meeting Lily and then 'going back'. The dialogues of Lily were very nicely done. I liked the interaction between Snape and McGonagall too. This seems like a nice story, and I hope to come back for the next chapter some time soon too. Good work!

Cheers!
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Author's Response: Aww thanks!! This was a story I just felt that I had to write since the thought of Snape dying just broke my heart. So I felt that I had to give him another chance! LOL!

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I usually don't read stories about Snape, because I tend to think he's overrated (I'm a James/Lily shipper), but I have to admit that I might be falling for this one. I love the softer version of Snape you've created, and I can't wait to read about him and Harry slowly coming to forgive one another (plus I want to see him end up with the healer).

Great job. I'm anxiously awaiting your next chapter.

Author's Response: Ah yea! I'm glad you like it. I felt I had to write this one because of how misunderstood Snape had been in the novels and that it broke my heart that he was not able to redeem himself after revealing his true self. I have many more chapters already written and will be posting them as fast as validation will let me. Thanks again!

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