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Review #1, by Dahlia Bailey Fire

26th June 2013:
This so sad but magnificently written. Great Job!

Author's Response: Thank you so so so so much! ♥

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Review #2, by Violet Gryfindor Fire

13th February 2013:
Wow! This is a powerful story, so much contained within a few hundred words. I loved reading some of your other one-shots, and when I saw that you had not one, but two Marauder-era ones, I had to read them. :D

Although there have been a number of Regulus stories posted these last few months, what sets yours apart is its depiction of the potion's effect on Regulus's mind. The contrast between the growing darkness of his memories and the fragmentation of his mind to that last apology perfectly reflects the repression the Sorting Hat spoke of. How much of his coldness and fearlessness was real, and how much was an act of self-protection? His behaviour in that last memory is entirely contradicted by his very presence in the cave, so when he thought about doing whatever he wanted and not caring about his brother, it sounds like he was merely trying to convince himself of those things. He's always been wearing a mask that others have given him - his parents, the Slytherins, Voldemort - and the act of ripping that mask away kills him.

Your interpretation of Regulus's character, and that of Sirius, is interesting, even refreshing. I really like the idea of Regulus transforming on the outside, while never quite doing so within. It's not that he was suddenly overcome with guilt or hatred - he always had that goodness inside of himself, and although he attempts to smother it, eventually it emerges. It's like a reversal of Jekyll and Hyde, though perhaps I'm reading too much into things. :P

The writing style is excellent, though I'm not sure about that second paragraph where you describe how Sirius's face is seared onto Regulus's consciousness: However, when his eyes are closed he could still see his brotherís face with the familiar arrogant smirk and cool, grey eyes. He wrenches his own grey eyes open but he can still see his brother. Something about it sounds awkward, especially in the second sentence, so it might be worth looking that over to see if you can improve the flow. Otherwise, it was a fantastic one-shot! I'm really glad to have had the opportunity to read more of your work. :D

Author's Response: Wow, thank you so much! :D

duhfbhdxjfhxjfhjxjh yoU LOVE MY ONE-SHOTS?!?!?! *faints*

Aww thank you for all your lovely comments, you're too lovely! :D

I didn't really understand the whole Jekyll and Hyde thing (from when I Googled it) but I'm hoping it's like a compliment or something. :p

ACK! I thought I fixed that! Gah, thank you so much for pointing that out! I'll fix that as soon as possible! :D

Thank you for reviewing my work, your compliments are just always lovely! :D


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Review #3, by BellaCamille Fire

1st February 2013:
I love the premise of the story so much! I have never read a story written about Regulus in the cave and this is just so wonderful. (and sad of course).

It's so interesting to get a peak into what memories really haunted Regulus and specifically which ones came back to him when he went to the cave.

This is so well written and not overdone too! Gah love it so much. (:

Author's Response: Aw thank you!

There's quite a few Regulus fics on when he's in the cave but I wanted to write one anyway. :D

Thank you for the review! :D


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Review #4, by PhoenixPulse Fire

19th January 2013:
HEY LOVELY!

How has the new year been for you so far? Hopefully it's been well!

Aaannnd, on forward with the review!

I love stories depicting the brotherhood of Regulus and Sirius and seeing that you have made one makes me really happy! I felt so bad for Reggie as I read through the descriptions of his sufferring from the potion. I wanted to run and hug him until he felt okay.

I also like the little memory you created for him as he was being sorted. He's nervous and tiny, and oh so innocent, still not exactly corrupted by his parent's view points and still looks up to Sirius. I like that. I always imagined them being close as children...the memory that followed really broke my heart.

And your second to last line:
"He just wishes his brother knew that."

I found that rather touching, because though it's simple, its the rather harsh and cutting truth, that he died and Sirius would never know he died for the good side...to help better humanity. There would always be that bitter resentment for Regulus, despite the hidden good in him and Sirius would never know the truth.

All in all, this was wonderful dearie! Thank you for the great read!

Author's Response: PEARL! HELLO AGAIN! :D

The New Year's been quite swell (pun intended because I went on a cruise ahaha :p) I hope yours has been fantasmagorical! :D

I love Sirius/Regulus fics, I never thought I'd be able to write them though. :p I'm so glad the thing with the potion was written well (unlike this review) because that was quite hard to write.

I really wanted the comparisons between the two memories. That when they were young they were besties and what not, but then they grew up. :'( (excuse me as I go attend to my feels)

Sirius NEVER knew about Regulus and it makes me want to cry because good ol' Reggie was really a good guy and Sirius died thinking he was an evil psycho like his parents were. (My feels)

Thanks for the lovely review! You're just wonderful. :D


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Review #5, by Siriusly89 Fire

13th January 2013:
Hel-lo there :)

Just want to say before I begin, THANK YOU SO MUCH FOR ENTERING MY CHALLENGE :D

I love this, like so much! It is just amazing! Regulus' guilt is so well portrayed! And the description of the fire burning him gave me chills! The Inferi dragging him into the water was also a bit scary! This story has a really chilling atmosphere, and for that you deserve a pat on the back! Go you! :D

Thank you again for entering my challenge :)

Author's Response: Hi there! :D

You're welcome! Thanks for creating the challenge, this may have never been posted! :p

I'm so glad you liked it, I worked really hard on it! :D

Thanks for leaving me a review, it really put a smile on my face! :)


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