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Review #1, by UnluckyStar57 Home

3rd November 2013:
Hi! I'm here with your first prize review from winning third place in my Regina Spektor Song Quote Challenge! (It was quite a long time ago, I know!) I'm sorry I'm so late in giving you this review. Real life really gets in the way sometimes!

This was a good look into Lily and James' relationship after their marriage. It also gave me a good idea of how she acted around the Marauders. You did a great job of characterizing all of them!

How did James' parents die? Did his friends and wife watch him run away from the funeral as the stag, or did he remain at the grave site while they walked away? Why did James feel the need to become Prongs? Questions, questions. :)

One suggestion that I have for you is to watch your punctuation. You used an apostrophe sometimes where you didn't need one at all--don't worry, it's a common misconception! Just go through this one day when you have time and check for errors. It's not a major deal, but cleaning up your writing is always a good exercise!

This was great! I can't wait to read more of your work!


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