4 Reviews Found

Review #1, by Gabriella Hunter The Chamber of Secrets

24th May 2015:
Hello!

Dun, dun, dun! This is Gabbie from the forums with our swap, it's nice to be back reading your stories again! I hope to see you popping up in my review thread again soon!

Anyway, there aren't that many stories that feature Roxanne as a main character. I thought that it was a good change, she's usually side-lined in some of the stories that I read and you never get much personality from her. That certainly isn't the case here though, Roxie is funny, brave and just as naughty as her father and I thought that rounded her out very well. I thought it was a good change to actually make her the older sibling too, usually Fred is the eldest and we're usually not introduced to Roxie until much later, if at all.

I never see Roxie paired with Dom very much either (I liked the differences you gave between them, Victoire and the others) and I loved the dynamic between them, they're very bad, getting their uncles drunk like that! Hahahaha. They'd been plotting this for a while and it was clear that they weren't going to take no for an answer when it came to getting that venom.

Sneaking into the Chamber of Secrets was bold and dangerous! They're lucky that they didn't get into deeper trouble but I have a feeling that these two are used to it. Hahaha. I thought that they were pretty brave to actually take the younger children with them to the chamber though and I loved all of their personalities.

Each of them felt distinct and matched their ages well. You didn't have some of them acting far above themselves (Like a thirteen year old Albus acting like a forty year old) and I enjoyed their antics, they're an awfully cute bunch.

My only CC would be that you don't have to use the numbers for their ages. You can simply write it out normally, it sort of disrupts the flow of the story otherwise but that's just a nosy little thing. Otherwise, I enjoyed it very much!

Much love,

Gabbie

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Review #2, by May The Chamber of Secrets

27th March 2015:
I just loved this short story

Author's Response: Thank you!
-Stefi


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Review #3, by Roisin The Chamber of Secrets

17th March 2015:
Hello! Here for the HPFF Review Fundraising Challenge.

Yay Roxanne! (Also, do I spy Azealia Banks as her FC??) I've only just started giving a fig about NextGen, and Roxanne is the character I feel most drawn to (so much Rose stuff--I mean, no shade on Rose, but COME ON, ROXANNE IS FRED AND ANGELINA'S DAUGHTER! SHE DEMANDS TO BE AMAZING!) And she was! The voice throughout was super funny.

This is such a unique idea that I'd never even thought of. Like, many nextgen fics involve the RoR, but one kind of forgets that THE CHAMBER OF SECRETS IS STILL THERE! With Basilisk fangs. The basilisk fang bit made me ugly laugh.

In a way, it's sort of the perfect NextGen idea. Like, this once terrible horrifying place is now somewhere where their kids hold races and dangle off of Salazar's beard.

I noticed one typo, “You must me Nate!”--'be,' I assume. But like, I got what you meant.

Anyway, this is a really clever stand alone piece, and I'm happy to have found it!

xoxo
-Roisin

Author's Response: Thank you so much for reading and I'm so glad you enjoyed my little story! I've got this ridiculous grin on my face right now.
I'm so glad you enjoyed Roxanne (whose FC is totally Azealia Banks) because she really is underappreciated, isn't she? I like the idea of her and Dominique as a sort of Fred and George 2.0 where Dom's the maddness and Roxy's and caution.
I like making my NextGen nice and laidback because I feel like the wizarding world has suffered enough. I also simply like the idea of the NextGen kids living hilarious sitcom lives.Plus, can you imagine Salazar Slytherin rolling over in his grave at the thought of children playing in the Chamber of Secrets?
And about that typo, I'll fix that right away! How emembarrassing *blushes bright red*
Thanks again for reading!
xo Stefi


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Review #4, by Pheonix Potioneer The Chamber of Secrets

2nd March 2013:
Ha Ha this is so funny! What was the purpose of going down there anyway? It made me laugh though. Especially the part about basilisk fangs. I really enjoyed it. Keep up the good work!

Author's Response: Thank you!
I think Roxanne and Dominique just wanted to go to prove that they can and the rest just followed along because it sounded like fun :P


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