6 Reviews Found

Review #1, by RavenclawFTW The Chamber of Secrets

30th July 2015:
Heya Stef! Back for the review swap. (We said multi, right? Think I won't have time for another tonight though...)

Oh man you killed me with this story! I loved Roxy's POV-- she was hilarious and had me laughing out loud several times. I especially loved the part about Molly's hugs. Her friendship with Dom was also great. I liked that they had clearly defined roles and Roxy only started panicking about what was going on when they were half-way through the plan. I also thought the whole idea behind the story was hilarious and the way that Roxy and Dom executed it was brilliant. It totally seems like something that two mischievous Weasleys would think to do! At the same time, I really liked how Roxy and Dom respected the Chamber and tried to keep their cousins from actually interfering with anything.

Speaking of the cousins, I'm really impressed how you managed to characterize so many characters in such a short time! On top of Dom/Roxy, I really felt like I got a feel for the other characters. I love Al's snark! Especially his comment to Rose about her parents-- I laughed out loud at that, as well as Roxy's own snarkiness about her younger cousins. They all seemed interesting on their own rights and I thought their ages really shone through the writing (that is to say they all seemed quite believable for their ages).

Then I thought the punishments were perfect! Roxy had been freaking out about Azkaban and such but really she just needed her mom to come and put her back in line. :P Good old Minnie.

Anyway, great one-shot as ever!

Author's Response: Hi J!

Thank you for such a lovely review! I have to admit though, I feel like this story definitely needs a huge re-vamp. I read it again to refresh myself after reading your review and it's just riddled with errors. Really not my best work at all and it's just so old...

I'm really glad you liked it anyway though! It's sort of just a silly little idea since I didn't see much of the Chamber of Secrets in the Next-Gen.

I think by now you've only got one of my one-shots left :P I'll have to speed up my writing process!

Thanks again for the review!

Stefanie


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Review #2, by Aphoride The Chamber of Secrets

4th June 2015:
Hey there - dropping by for our review swap! :)

So I just had to stop by on this one because the whole premise of it was so, so funny, and so original - I've never seen another story like this one, with the Chamber of Secrets used like this, and the Next Gen kids getting involved - especially with Dom and Roxy being the instigators of all of the trouble :P

I love that you used Dom and Roxy for this, too, and how they tricked Ron and Harry into giving up the information with Firewhisky - always the thing which loosens tongues :P Poor Harry and Ron - you wouldn't be too surprised to hear they were in trouble too for giving away they information like that :P The way you wrote Dom and Roxy - Roxy as more worried about the consequences when she realised them, and Dom as so much more flawless - was just so so good, and so wonderful different, too, especially when compared to the usual presentation of both of them :)

The whole thing with Al and Scorp wanting to touch the basilisk skeleton and then James and Louis sneaking out a basilisk fang were so, so good - so genuinely funny, and childlike, too - exactly the kind of thing teenagers would do, you know? :P

Your writing in this was so, so good. I'm so jealous because I can't write humour for the life of me but in this it was so natural and flowed so beautifully, every word fitted exactly where it was. The voice you used was perfect for the style, and it flowed so perfectly, too.

This was a wonderful one-shot - so so funny and so good - and I'm so glad I read it! :) Thank you so much for the swap!

Aph xx

Author's Response: Hey Aph!

Thanks for stopping by and for such an amazing review!!

I don't know why people don't use the Chamber of Secrets in stories more often. It's such a cool place! Sure, it's a little dark and creepy, but it's also pretty cool and the perfect place for teenage shenanigans.

I love writing about the Next-Gen getting into silly adventures. I feel like they deserve some downtime after two generations of war. These families deserve peace! And what better way to show peace than to hold fun adolescent adventures in this once horrifying place?

Thanks again for reading!!

-Stefi


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Review #3, by Gabriella Hunter The Chamber of Secrets

24th May 2015:
Hello!

Dun, dun, dun! This is Gabbie from the forums with our swap, it's nice to be back reading your stories again! I hope to see you popping up in my review thread again soon!

Anyway, there aren't that many stories that feature Roxanne as a main character. I thought that it was a good change, she's usually side-lined in some of the stories that I read and you never get much personality from her. That certainly isn't the case here though, Roxie is funny, brave and just as naughty as her father and I thought that rounded her out very well. I thought it was a good change to actually make her the older sibling too, usually Fred is the eldest and we're usually not introduced to Roxie until much later, if at all.

I never see Roxie paired with Dom very much either (I liked the differences you gave between them, Victoire and the others) and I loved the dynamic between them, they're very bad, getting their uncles drunk like that! Hahahaha. They'd been plotting this for a while and it was clear that they weren't going to take no for an answer when it came to getting that venom.

Sneaking into the Chamber of Secrets was bold and dangerous! They're lucky that they didn't get into deeper trouble but I have a feeling that these two are used to it. Hahaha. I thought that they were pretty brave to actually take the younger children with them to the chamber though and I loved all of their personalities.

Each of them felt distinct and matched their ages well. You didn't have some of them acting far above themselves (Like a thirteen year old Albus acting like a forty year old) and I enjoyed their antics, they're an awfully cute bunch.

My only CC would be that you don't have to use the numbers for their ages. You can simply write it out normally, it sort of disrupts the flow of the story otherwise but that's just a nosy little thing. Otherwise, I enjoyed it very much!

Much love,

Gabbie

Author's Response: Hi Gabbie!

Thanks for stopping by! I wrote this story quite a while ago, so it's a pleasant surprise to still get a review on it!

I also think there aren't enough stories where Roxanne (and Fred and Dominique and Louis and Lucy and Molly, but I digress) is the main character. I mean, the girl who's George and Angelina's daughter must be quite remarkable! I made her older than Fred too because I thought it would be fun to have a pair of female pranksters in the Weasley family for the younger kids to look up to (even though I'm sure most of their parents would discourage that hero worship, haha). All the infamous pranksters we hear about the canon are male, so I wanted to switch that up.

And the Chamber of Secrets isn't something I hear much about in Next Gen either. But I figured that most kids in that generation would know about these things because even if their parents didn't tell them, I'm sure there'd be some kind of revised Hogwarts: A History or retrospective on the life of Lord Voldemort. At the very least, they'd learn about it in History of Magic, I think. And I'm sure knowing about a secret chamber under the school that housed a basilisk skeleton would excite more than a few eager kids.

As for the other cousins, I'm glad you thought I did them well. I try really hard in my stories to make characters act appropriately for their ages. I don't like the idea of 11 and 12-year-olds acting super mature and such because I don't find it realistic. I mean, what else would 13-year-old boys do when confronted by a giant dead snake than dare each other to touch it?

I'll also be fixing the numbers thing right away! I've written out numbers in all my stories since, but this is sort of an oldie for me, so I haven't fixed it yet. Thanks for pointing it out!

Love,
-Stefi


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Review #4, by May The Chamber of Secrets

27th March 2015:
I just loved this short story

Author's Response: Thank you!
-Stefi


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Review #5, by Roisin The Chamber of Secrets

17th March 2015:
Hello! Here for the HPFF Review Fundraising Challenge.

Yay Roxanne! (Also, do I spy Azealia Banks as her FC??) I've only just started giving a fig about NextGen, and Roxanne is the character I feel most drawn to (so much Rose stuff--I mean, no shade on Rose, but COME ON, ROXANNE IS FRED AND ANGELINA'S DAUGHTER! SHE DEMANDS TO BE AMAZING!) And she was! The voice throughout was super funny.

This is such a unique idea that I'd never even thought of. Like, many nextgen fics involve the RoR, but one kind of forgets that THE CHAMBER OF SECRETS IS STILL THERE! With Basilisk fangs. The basilisk fang bit made me ugly laugh.

In a way, it's sort of the perfect NextGen idea. Like, this once terrible horrifying place is now somewhere where their kids hold races and dangle off of Salazar's beard.

I noticed one typo, “You must me Nate!”--'be,' I assume. But like, I got what you meant.

Anyway, this is a really clever stand alone piece, and I'm happy to have found it!

xoxo
-Roisin

Author's Response: Thank you so much for reading and I'm so glad you enjoyed my little story! I've got this ridiculous grin on my face right now.
I'm so glad you enjoyed Roxanne (whose FC is totally Azealia Banks) because she really is underappreciated, isn't she? I like the idea of her and Dominique as a sort of Fred and George 2.0 where Dom's the maddness and Roxy's and caution.
I like making my NextGen nice and laidback because I feel like the wizarding world has suffered enough. I also simply like the idea of the NextGen kids living hilarious sitcom lives.Plus, can you imagine Salazar Slytherin rolling over in his grave at the thought of children playing in the Chamber of Secrets?
And about that typo, I'll fix that right away! How emembarrassing *blushes bright red*
Thanks again for reading!
xo Stefi


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Review #6, by Pheonix Potioneer The Chamber of Secrets

2nd March 2013:
Ha Ha this is so funny! What was the purpose of going down there anyway? It made me laugh though. Especially the part about basilisk fangs. I really enjoyed it. Keep up the good work!

Author's Response: Thank you!
I think Roxanne and Dominique just wanted to go to prove that they can and the rest just followed along because it sounded like fun :P


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