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Review #1, by Iellwen the task

10th January 2014:
Hi there!

It's a shame no one bothered to review..
Could it be the reason you did not upload any further chapters? Don't let it get to you!

It's quasi-impossible to get a complete impression of a story by reading a short 1st chapter - you should at least have 2 or 3 only before you rely on reviews (though you can apply for those in the forums, for constructive criticism etc).

I strongly recommend you getting a beta-reader (you can also apply in the forums).
It helps a lot. :)

I found it difficult to care for the characters since the chapter is short and the ideas, thoughts and actions are not quite clearly separated. It gives a rushed tempo to the read - maybe that's just me though.

Anyway.
Don't give up and keep writing. :)

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