Waiting on a new chapter is KILLING me!! Hurry please and thank you! This story is so addictive!! Report Review
i actually got shamelessly excited when i read the description for this story, one of the most creative ones i've ever come across! can't wait to read more! Report Review
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I just couldn't stop reading your story and I can't wait for more!
Thank you! :)
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I just wanted to say that this is hilarious! I've been laughing my ass off! I am really looking forward to reading the other chapters. Thank you so much for sharing this by putting it online.
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Thank you SO much for updating, it just gets better and better!
Sirius meeting with Harry and Ron was funny.
Yeah I'm Unbridge, haha!
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Love it! Please update SOON! Report Review
So when I saw you updated my whole face lit up and I was so happy It made my day anyway I really like Sirius's point of view and I wish you would do it more ok until next chapter (which I hope will be soon)
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Absolutely amazing like always!! :) Report Review
Brilliant! love the return of Fawkes! sorry i didn't comment before now, love you're story, excellent!
the grammar and spelling are a bit of a bother, though. Caption is a sentence you describe a photo with. I think you're looking for captain Report Review
First, I want to say thanks for the update because I've missed reading this story (I still didn't have to wait that long though!) and congratulations on getting so many views!
I enjoyed reading this chapter for Sirius' POV because we haven't seen things from his perspective for a while, and I think you manage to get his voice to sound more mature in this narrative than a lot of the other characters that you write from, which is obviously a good thing since they're much younger!
I really enjoy these characters, especially seeing the friendship between James and Sirius. Fred is possibly my favourite character in this story - he just cracks me up all the time!
It was really interesting to see Sirius having to take polyjuice potion to act as Neville and try and convince Harry. I'm sure that there must have been an easier way of doing that, but I can totally understand why Sirius found it so hard. The Umbridge thing was a big slip-up, and something I had been wondering was about Teddy's age, so I'm glad this cleared it up. I'm surprised that Harry hasn't started suspecting something - although perhaps he has, and is keeping it quiet.
Although at the moment it seems that the case with the pureblood attacks has cleared up, I'm pretty sure that there's more to come from that. I hope so, anyway, because I want to know what Sirius was doing with the werewolves and also who did it. I think perhaps it would be good if you could include some more information about what happened in the actual attacks when you're writing from Sirius or Neville's POV, since I imagine they both know about it. Maybe you could even use Teddy for that, as since he's in auror training he could have access to that sort of information.
I'm still not entirely sure how I feel about Lowsley. It's not just that he's got his favourites and is quite arrogant, but I get the feeling that there's something else below the surface there that we have yet to find out. Maybe...is he related to the pureblood attacks in some way?
Also, James and Amelia? I saw that one coming! I knew it! *gives self-congratulatory pat on the back*
I noticed a few spelling and grammar mistakes in this chapter, for example "he didn't completely by it" should be "buy it". Other than that, another great chapter. Well done, and I look forward to the next update!
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i lov this chapter, it was quite funny watching sirius try to be neville, and im so glad that its from sirius' pov it has not been for a while
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OH MY GOODNESS THIS STORY IS GENIUS YOU KNOW! I have always loved the marauders and next generation, to see them combined, it's like .Wow. Any way I love how you made Al be friends with Scorpius it shows. um.it shows a bunch of stuff and.Yeah.any way, keep writing! It's been like forever, almost a month! But I'll stick with it as long as you stick with it. Bye! Will review more! Report Review
Aaaaha it was Fawkes!! :D yay i guessed it right!! this chapter was a good long read it answers the questions i had before but then a 100 more questions crop up in my mind..its like a vicious circle of questions giving my imagination an over-time!! Love the way the characters are shaping up. In this chapter Dom, as a character has got my attention you think you know her but then she is a mystery. James-Amy even though its early to jump to any conclusions i must say they kinda remind me off James and Lily senior (before James senior deflated his big head!!) even though their interaction was limited. I would like to finish of this review by saying this is one of the best post-deathly hallows fan fiction i have read with a good and strong story line, the plot of which doesn't depend on fluff!! As usual i Sirius-lee missed Sirius..looking forward for the plot to thicken.. ;)Author's Response: Yes you were correct! Sorry I couldn't confirm earlier. But it's more fun this way, right? :D
This chapter did answer a few question, but you are correct. It probably leaves more unanswered. I had fun writing Dom in this chapter. Even though she didn't get a lot of lines she did have a lot of development and showed a different side a little bit.
James/Amy is an early jump and honestly I don't even know for sure. It's something I'm playing around with in my head, but I'm not sure if anything will or won't happen in the long run. Right now there is a strong possibility (because I too am trying to draw the James/Lily parallel), but they are still young. But more on that in the next chapter.
Thank you so much for that wonderful compliment! That really made my day! :)
Haha, Sirius will be in the next chapter (probably next two or three, actually). Sirius Lee, no joke, I'm back to his point of view more often now. ;) The next chapter should be up tomorrow and hopefully I can finish the next one so it'll be up soon too. :D
Thank you for the review. ;)
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YEAH, MY PREDICTION WAS TRUE! FAWKES!!Author's Response: Haha, yes! I always intended for Albus to find Fawkes since chapter one. He'll become important later on, so I wanted to sneak that whole side-plot in here early on. ;)
Thank you for the review!
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I'm dying. This needs a new chapter son. Please and thank you!Author's Response: Haha, sorry. It's been kind of busy on my end, so writing has been pushed aside for a moment. However, I did manage to sneak in an update that should be up tomorrow.
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Very long chapter... but then again who doesnt like one when they have been as brilliantly thought out and written as this one... Hurry up and Update!Author's Response: I know...It take a while to write them. But I find the more I write this story the more I have to add. But thank you so much for the awesome compliments. :)
I actually just updated the next chapter and had to cut it in two, because it was getting too long. I didn't think that the first update in a few weeks would go over well if it was over 10,000 words...So I'm splitting the chapter up and working on the second half now. Both have exciting parts and I don't know why I didn't do that to begin with.
Thank you so much and the chapter should be up tomorrow. :)
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Plz update! Plz, plz, plz?Author's Response: Haha, I just did. It's been kind of busy but it should be up tomorrow. :)
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I love this story! Plz continue?Author's Response: Thank you! And don't worry, there will be a new chapter up next week. I'm just currently busy with a bit of schoolwork and I kind of have to put that first right now. :(
The next chapter is almost done and during my breaks I'm working on it as a reward to me and you guys. :) Please just be patient in this busy time and I promise updates will resume weekly when things calm down. :D
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Brilliant chapter! :D
Haha, Fred should keep his nickname; Ginger Spice is classic! I'm curious to see whether Sirius will stay as Padfoot, though; will his Animagus form change, or will he go by a different name? 'Blackie' could be funny... :P I don't see James being a stag Animagus. I think he's too different to the original James to have the same form, but I could be wrong. Are you planning to make then Animagi? I can definitely see Fred as a bird or a squirrel (something small and energetic! :P). Sirius would be able to help them learn if they wanted to, wouldn't he? Or would he have another mature moment and decide they're too young?
I'm also really interested about your take on the Map's creation and was sort of hoping James might be able to get more information out of Sirius about it. Will they make another one? Or will James 'miraculously' find it?
Sirius' response to Kreacher being alive is interesting; I'm not quite sure where you're going with it, but I'm curious. :)
I'm also interested to see when James will slip up and tell Sirius that he knows; it was a close shave with the Map and Sirius was clever enough to work out the Polyjuice Potion and the whole Teddy-Vic thing... It's only a matter of time, surely?
Oh no! James is James again! McGonagall will be torn between being furious and impressed, I think and same with Neville. Maybe Sirius could pretend it was just a prank? :P Either way, I sense a letter or visit from Harry and Ginny in the near future. I wonder what Lily and Al will think... :P
Anyway, brilliant work and I'll read the next chapter when I've got the time! :D
MarauderLover7.Author's Response: Thank you! :D
Ginger Spice will definitely make a come back. xD Even if Fred doesn't like it.
I'm not too sure currently if I will or won't make them Animagi, but I have toyed around with the idea. I'm just not completely dead set on one or the other. Haha
You'll find out more about Sirius though in later chapters and about his Animagus form. As for whether he would help them, I could see him going either way. However, that would only work if he admitted to being an Animagus or even Sirius Black.
I have plans for both the current Map and even a new one. Only problem with James "finding it" would be Sirius' name. But I can assure you the Map makes it's appearance in later chapters. Sirius doesn't give too much away, but I have thought about the creation of the Map and will probably have Sirius explain more later on down the road.
Haha, I can't wait to bring Kreacher in as well and see what happens.
James has had a few close calls. I can't really say Sirius has because James already knows his big secret. But Sirius only worked out Davison was James after he saw the feather. He didn't work out the Polyjuice Potion on his own entirely. But Sirius is cleaver, you're right and James isn't the best at hiding things from him.
I promise Teddy and Victoire will be together. You'll just have to wait a little longer there. :)
Haha, you'll just have to see what happens in the next chapter soon. :)
Thank you for the review!
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I truly adore Albus... He better grow up to be some sort of magical creatures healer/finder type-of-thing!Author's Response: Haha, I adore him too. I'm not too sure what Al will be when he grows up. I don't think Al knows either. He will have Fawkes with him though. ;)
Thank you for the review!
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Highlight of my week!! I absolutely love how you write!! I wish you uploaded a new chapter every day so I could have lots of amazing days!! You are going to be the next J.K.R.! Love you!Author's Response: Haha, you're making me blush. xD I wish I could update a chapter a day too, but sadly I don't think I can. Also I wish I was the next JK, but I don't think I'm even as talented as her pinkie. xD I can dream though. :)
Thank you so much and I'll try to get the next chapter out as soon as possible. It's a little busy right now, but I promise it's be out as soon as possible. :)
Thank you so much for your review and sweet words. :)
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So I have been reading 'Beyond the Veil' for quite a while now, waiting for any updates but I've never reviewed before. First of all, I would like to say congrats on the idea. I never really liked the fact that Sirius was killed off even though it made good reading. I think that Al is by far my favourite character even though he is a Slytherin and I like the fact that he isn't very reckless and calculates things first like with Lowsley. I also like how you portrayed Dom; is there a reason why she is suddenly nice around Amelia? I was also wondering if James and Amelia are going to be together later on because it seems like there's something going on there. Furthermore, are you planning on writing the story throughout the years that James is at Hogwarts or will it end sooner? Also, will there be any chapters from any other Wotters' POVs or will it just be Al, James and Sirius for the rest of it? My FINAL note is just that there are some errors in punctuation and stuff but you'll probably fix them later. Keep on writing and sorry about all the questions and essay? xAuthor's Response: Oh please, don't apologize about leaving me a review. :) I practically beg for them. xD
First off, thank you for leaving me a review and giving me all the questions you hold and constructive criticism.
I'm glad that you like the idea. I've never really like Sirius being killed off either. I always disliked his death the most, although it did make sense for the series and like you said, make a good story out of it. Plus I don't think we are really suppose to like it when she kills off a character really...at least not too much.
I'm glad you like Al. He's one of my favorite characters to write, right now. I promise that I'm not completely going off on tangents with him though. His whole story will be important later on with Sirius and James. I feel bad for taking some attention off of Sirius, but I really like Al too and have big plans for him.
There are a few reasons why Dom has a sudden change in attitude. It isn't completely different and she isn't really hiding her true feelings or character around Amelia. In fact, it's quite the opposite. She's her true self around Amelia and only act nice around the people she doesn't really know. She is more fond of Amelia and has grown very attached to her and thus that might be what you mean by nice. But really she isn't a completely bad person, she just has a certain flare about her that she shows to her family more than others. It's kind of hard to explain now, but it will be explored more in chapters to come and her character, along with Amelia's will be developed a bit more.
As for James and Amelia, I can't really say right now (for plot reasons and for undecided reasons). I will admit that there is something there, but currently it's not going to go farther than friendship or at least tolerating one another. After all, James is only twelve and Amelia is eleven. So there won't be much romance there yet, if there is any at all later on. :)
Right now I'm playing it year by year. I have two endings worked out in my head and it could go either way all the way to the end almost. I have a lot of plans for the next few years, but some years might go faster than others. I have a lot of this planned out, but I'm also adding more as I go to make it more interesting and that is making it longer. I don't see it ending anytime soon, but I'm not too sure on the length or if it will end before or after Hogwarts, right now. It won't end this year or their next if that's what you are worried about...or not worried about. Haha
I am planning on doing a few other POVs, not too many and soon I'll probably return to Sirius and James mostly, but you should expect a few other point of views to jump in later on. For example, Teddy will actually be brought back in a future chapter soon, and I was thinking about doing Dom and Amelia's POVs eventually. Not really soon, but I've written a few scenes with their perspective. There are a few others, but I don't want to give them away yet. Overall, Sirius and James will be the focus now and Albus probably (no promises, because I like writing him) be more in the background for the time being. At least for a little bit.
I am currently editing some chapter between updates, but I'm glad that you noted that. Those actually probably bug me the most personally, just because I feel like I've should have caught them...I'm only human, but if they bug you, or if you just see them - please feel free to poke fun at me (it'll motivate me to change them after I finish crying). I have been changing them slowly though. Haha
Thank you so much for the detailed review and I hope to hear from you again! :) I'm glad that you follow my story and that you left me a review.
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Yay! This was a really long chapter which made me very happy, and we found out what Al has been hiding and what he's been doing in the forest. I have to say, though, that I definitely did not expect that!
I really love reading this story from Al's point of view. It's great to see how you're developing all of the different characters as you write them. Of course we couldn't find out much about Al at the beginning since he wasn't at Hogwarts with James and Sirius, but I like the way each of your characters has their own story and reasons for behaving the way they do, and I think the different points of view you use are a really good way to show that.
I enjoyed the beginning of this chapter, with the different lessons and particularly the flying class. Madam Hooch is right - it's nice to see a Potter and a Malfoy being friends instead of fighting. I've always imagined that Al and Scorpius would become friends since I think Harry would be a lot more willing to forgive and forget what Draco did than Ron. The way they fooled around made me laugh, and the different events in the class reminded me of Harry's first flying lesson, too. Even down to the fact that someone needed rescuing from a disastrous first encounter with a broom! I feel sorry for Amy, but I like the fact that James was the one who saved her. It definitely seemed to fit with the rest of the story - maybe she won't dislike him quite as much now, since she did manage to thank him. And possibly there might be some sort of romance between the two in the future? (Yesterday didn't cure me, after all!)
Lowsley is a strange character. I can't decide whether or not I like him, but I did like the way that you wrote his lesson. It's clear that Al is a lot more measured than James and Teddy, and thinks things through a lot more, which makes sense with him being in Slytherin as well. I'm impressed with Al's knowledge though - although I suppose that having the Head Auror as your dad must help a lot when it comes to DADA!
I just wanted to say that this line was brilliant:
"For example, Iím fairly certain that my father didnít ride a unicorn into battle with Voldemort. At least, thatís not how my father tells itÖ"
It just made me laugh so much. The idea of all the ways that Slughorn exaggerates stories of Harry and his escapades is really funny.
I think Al must be much more observant than other characters, as well, since he noticed that James does still have the map and the cloak. They both know that the other is hiding something and of course Al uses that to his advantage (true Slytherin, haha!) to get what he wants. I was glad that you showed the fact that James is still struggling with the fact that Albus got put in a different house. He is trying his best to deal with it, but of course he won't get used to the idea overnight, and you portrayed that well.
But oh my Merlin, I did not expect the ending! Fawkes was the mysterious thing that Albus found in the forest! I really did not see that coming at all. You hinted at the 'thing' all through the chapter (and with the cliffhangers you've been leaving us recently) so I'm glad you revealed it. I like the idea of James taking Sirius with him to snoop/protect Al when he goes out to the forest at night, and I definitely enjoyed Snape's return! Did the centaurs fire on Al because they were protecting Fawkes? Or is something else going on? I'm really curious to see how you develop this plotline and how it is connected with everything else happening in the story!
I did notice a few grammar errors every so often, and a few typos at times, so you need to be a bit more careful of that, but I realise you're trying to update quickly and I'll take the quick updates with a few mistakes since you can go back and edit later! I would like to see more from Sirius' point of view, I think, and learn more about the mysterious goings-on with the families of Death Eaters. What was he doing with the werewolves? And what happened to the Malfoys/Notts/Goyles? There are so many things I'm really curious about in this story!
And I think this is possibly the longest review I've ever left anyone, so I'm going to stop wittering now. I'll look forward to the next chapter and I hope you update soon again!
nott theodore :)Author's Response: Oh my! I love long reviews! I'll try to leave an equally long review to answer as many questions as I can. :)
I'm kind of glad that you weren't expecting it. I know a few people guessed Fawkes, but I didn't want it to be too obvious. Those who had read all the chapters recently remembered when James, Fred and Sirius first went into the forest and honestly that was my first hint that we would be seeing Fawkes. I just thought that it would be fitting for Al to be the new owner of Fawkes - mainly for his namesake and because I kind of favor Al...
Al is really fun for me to write. I have big plans for him in the future and it will tie in nicely with Sirius and James overall (I can't say what sadly, but it's like two or three big chapters I'm looking forward to - I've already started working on them). I felt the need to develop Al more, because one - I like him as a character and two - he's a change of pace and gives me a more nostalgic feeling.
I enjoyed writing the flying class scene. I'm glad that you like the parallels between Al's flying class as compared to Harry's. I did try to make Al's very similar to Harry's. :)
I always planned on Amy being saved by James from the moment I thought of her. Typically, I don't like OCs that I think of, unless it's my own story (original story that is), but Amy is slowly growing on me. I'm not too sure about all my plans yet, but I will say that her and James will interact a lot more.
Next, about Lowsley...I honestly don't know what I think of him either. I mean, I know...but I don't...He is extremely interesting to write and all, but not the main focus currently. I had a hard time writing the "lesson plan" for his class. I knew I wanted Al to shine here, but without dueling - like his brother. You are correct, this chapter did show more of Al's Slytherin characteristics than others. Not bad characteristics, but it set him apart from James and Teddy. I wanted to show that a little more since we've only mostly heard how analytical, cleaver and even cunning Al is and not too many actions to back it up.
Haha, I had fun writing that line. It seemed more like a Rita thing to do, but I could also see Slughorn trying to give Al and James his account like that. xD
Al is more observant, but not to the annoying point. He knows when and when not to talk and bring things up. He knows that James has a reason for hiding the Map from everyone, but he doesn't feel too much of a need to dig, because he knows and trusts his brother. But Al will use his knowledge against James to get what he wants. He knows James well enough to get away with it too.
James is still trying to deal with Al being in Slytherin, he didn't really give it much thought until after he made up with Al and Sirius, but it still bothers him. He's dealing with it the best he can. He slips up every now and then though.
Haha, at first I didn't have them snooping, but as I wrote that scene I thought "Something√Ę¬Ä¬ôs missing...Oh I know!" I like writing scenes with Snape and Al. It√Ę¬Ä¬ôs so much fun and interesting!
As for the Centaurs, there will be more on that in the next chapter. I don't want to say much more than that at the moment, but you√Ę¬Ä¬ôll find out soon.
I need to catch those better. :/ I'm really sorry. I don't know how much they bug you, but they sure bug me. I need to be more careful, some of it is because I do tend to write these fast and almost in one sitting at times, but that's not a very good excuse.
You will see Sirius' POV again really soon (next chapter). So your wish will come true.
Next update might be a while, sadly. :( I am unfortunately busy with school and moving at the moment, so it's a bit hard to find time to write as much as I would like to. :( I'm trying to finish up the next chapter and upload it for next week, so I can at least give you a chapter per week still. I'm really sorry if it's a bit late. :(
Thank you so much!
I really like this story and i cant wait to know what else happensAuthor's Response: Thank you! And I can't wait to see what people think! Thank you so much for the review!
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