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Review #1, by missclaire17 Soldiers

19th July 2013:
Hey! It's Claire from the forums!

What I loved that you did here is that you showed Lily's fatique, not only physically but also mentally. She wasn't just craving for the days that she could sleep uninterrupted, but she was also craving for the safer days in which there WASN'T a war to fight. I think part of her mentality here really shows why she's placed in Gryffindor. Lily has such a clear sense of duty that she had to do this because who was going to fight for the Muggleborns and blood traitors if she doesn't?

This is certainly very different from the other one-shot that I had reviewed on, and I'm glad that I read this! There is a very nice balance that you managed to portray with the bit about James, Sirius, Remus, and Peter. The part when Lily realized that they hadn't grown up yet really spoke strongly to me because it seems to me as though Lily's always trying to mature faster than everyone else (starting when she first came to Hogwarts beacuse at that time, she is a newbie to the magical world), and nearing to the end of their Hogwarts career, she knew that she would have to make a choice between good and wrong. How Lily recognizes that the Marauders have many elements of how people their age should be acting: they haven't quite grown up yet, but there is still that sense of right and wrong and that sense of duty present.

You did a wonderful job of writing Lily going through physical and mental strain in the war! (:

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Review #2, by zelectrodez Soldiers

11th January 2013:
I like this one-shot! It caught the feeling of war really well from my opinion anyways. Great job and good luck with school!

Author's Response: I'll need that luck. School's a pain. I'm glad you liked this though. It was really different for me, so I'm happy to hear it turned out okay. The war is so hard to write about properly. :/

Thank you again!
- A. :)


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Review #3, by Lovegood Soldiers

9th January 2013:
Aahh this was cute, although quite sad. I honestly think you can actually make this into perhaps a multi-shot? Or even a novel :D Cause I think its got potential to be a marvelous story. But that's up to you of course. Anyhow, well done and good job :)

Author's Response: Haha, thanks, lovely. :) I'm not sure how I'd make this particular story longer, although the idea has potential for a longer plot, I agree.

Thanks for reading, and I'm really glad you liked it ^_^

- A.


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Review #4, by CloakAuror9 Soldiers

6th January 2013:
Oh my gosh! Adele, this is such a beautiful piece!I have tears in my eyes! Only moments ago that I was reading a light and fluffy James/Lily one-shot and I was grinning ear to ear, then I read this! Oh my gosh, my mood swings and I.

Honestly, if anyone was to ever bring me to tears (of joy) with a one-shot, it'd be you! You're such a talented writer and I'm so happy you write many James/Lily stories!

I love how the story focused on the war. I like to think that something near to this was what happened to Lily and James. The war constantly took its toll on then, and yet they still battle on. The story was romantic but it wasn't.

I just love love love love this! And I'm checking out the fluffy one-shot since I saw it published already! :D

~Izzy

PS: Sorry for the messy review! I just..IDK. I'm just speechless, I guess.

Author's Response: Oh, no! Don't apologize! I'm just thrilled that you liked it so much. It was a request over on Tumblr, so an angsty Jily one-shot, and I had no clue what I was doing, but this was the result, and the fact that people like it still really confuses me.

I'm positively thrilled that you enjoyed it so much, and hopefully the fluffy one-shot helps you recover!

Thank you, thank you, thank you, for such an amazing review!
- A. ^_^


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Review #5, by Kristina1990 Soldiers

1st January 2013:
There are by far too few stories out about the time after Hogwarts. While the Marauders' Hogwarts years might be the most "romantical", in a sense, the war is equally important, if not more so.

Beautifully written! You described Lily's exhaustion well and I liked the fact that you pointed out things weren't as adventurous and "harmless" as they had expected. And yet, they stand together until the very end :).

Happy New Year!

Author's Response: The war is so important, yet so hard to write about (as I learnt with this). We don't really know that much about Lily and James, apart from the few things JKR has mentioned in passing, which is why I figure most people go for their time at Hogwarts. It's what we know most about, and they can adapt accordingly, etc. But yes, I totally agree with you.

Thanks :) This was really different for me to write, both in terms of where it sits on the timeline and the style I used. I reckon there's no way it would have been as harmless as they thought. They were still kids when they joined the order. They were certainly men after a year rolled around.

Happy New Year to you, too! And thank you for the wonderful review. I'm glad you enjoyed :)


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Review #6, by Secret Santa Soldiers

31st December 2012:
Oh, this was so lovely and bittersweet little one-shot. I especially loved how caring James was and all the small details about their day-to-day life. And the Marauders, it was so sad how Lily called them her lost boys, because that what each one of them really was after all.

This was really emotional story to read. *sniff* I loved how you placed it in the year after they left school, since there are not many stories from that particular time. But let's be frank, there can never be too many James/Lily stories... :)

It was written in very lovely way. Lily's war weariness came through, yet there was still always that little spark of optimism underneath it all. Flow was excellent, maybe you used bit repeatedly the word 'tired' in the last part, but it worked.

Lovely one-shot. I'm glad I could review it.

Your Secret Santa :)

Author's Response: Ahh, you're back! Haha, thanks. This was so different for me to write, both the style and the theme I suppose, so it's great to hear that you liked it. ^_^ I used tired a lot on purpose - I wanted the repetition - but maybe I over did it. I'll go back and re-read it.

Lily is to the Marauders as Wendy is to the Lost Boys. That's how I've always seen it anyway. I'm glad you liked the analogy. :)

Thanks for the kind words, and the review. It's really appreciated. ^_^


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