I like this one-shot! It caught the feeling of war really well from my opinion anyways. Great job and good luck with school!Author's Response: I'll need that luck. School's a pain. I'm glad you liked this though. It was really different for me, so I'm happy to hear it turned out okay. The war is so hard to write about properly. :/
Thank you again!
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Aahh this was cute, although quite sad. I honestly think you can actually make this into perhaps a multi-shot? Or even a novel :D Cause I think its got potential to be a marvelous story. But that's up to you of course. Anyhow, well done and good job :)Author's Response: Haha, thanks, lovely. :) I'm not sure how I'd make this particular story longer, although the idea has potential for a longer plot, I agree.
Thanks for reading, and I'm really glad you liked it ^_^
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Oh my gosh! Adele, this is such a beautiful piece!I have tears in my eyes! Only moments ago that I was reading a light and fluffy James/Lily one-shot and I was grinning ear to ear, then I read this! Oh my gosh, my mood swings and I.
Honestly, if anyone was to ever bring me to tears (of joy) with a one-shot, it'd be you! You're such a talented writer and I'm so happy you write many James/Lily stories!
I love how the story focused on the war. I like to think that something near to this was what happened to Lily and James. The war constantly took its toll on then, and yet they still battle on. The story was romantic but it wasn't.
I just love love love love this! And I'm checking out the fluffy one-shot since I saw it published already! :D
PS: Sorry for the messy review! I just..IDK. I'm just speechless, I guess. Report Review
There are by far too few stories out about the time after Hogwarts. While the Marauders' Hogwarts years might be the most "romantical", in a sense, the war is equally important, if not more so.
Beautifully written! You described Lily's exhaustion well and I liked the fact that you pointed out things weren't as adventurous and "harmless" as they had expected. And yet, they stand together until the very end :).
Happy New Year!Author's Response: The war is so important, yet so hard to write about (as I learnt with this). We don't really know that much about Lily and James, apart from the few things JKR has mentioned in passing, which is why I figure most people go for their time at Hogwarts. It's what we know most about, and they can adapt accordingly, etc. But yes, I totally agree with you.
Thanks :) This was really different for me to write, both in terms of where it sits on the timeline and the style I used. I reckon there's no way it would have been as harmless as they thought. They were still kids when they joined the order. They were certainly men after a year rolled around.
Happy New Year to you, too! And thank you for the wonderful review. I'm glad you enjoyed :) Report Review
Oh, this was so lovely and bittersweet little one-shot. I especially loved how caring James was and all the small details about their day-to-day life. And the Marauders, it was so sad how Lily called them her lost boys, because that what each one of them really was after all.
This was really emotional story to read. *sniff* I loved how you placed it in the year after they left school, since there are not many stories from that particular time. But let's be frank, there can never be too many James/Lily stories... :)
It was written in very lovely way. Lily's war weariness came through, yet there was still always that little spark of optimism underneath it all. Flow was excellent, maybe you used bit repeatedly the word 'tired' in the last part, but it worked.
Lovely one-shot. I'm glad I could review it.
Your Secret Santa :)Author's Response: Ahh, you're back! Haha, thanks. This was so different for me to write, both the style and the theme I suppose, so it's great to hear that you liked it. ^_^ I used tired a lot on purpose - I wanted the repetition - but maybe I over did it. I'll go back and re-read it.
Lily is to the Marauders as Wendy is to the Lost Boys. That's how I've always seen it anyway. I'm glad you liked the analogy. :)
Thanks for the kind words, and the review. It's really appreciated. ^_^ Report Review
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