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Review #1, by nott theodore And a Walk

18th July 2013:
Hello there! Wow, what a cute Lily and James one-shot - I can't believe that it only has one review!

This was so adorable that I'm finding it hard to write a proper review. You've taken a very simple idea and written it extremely well to create a touching and heartwarming story that's a pleasure to read!

I loved the way that you described James's feelings for Lily, the way that he thought about her appearance using only ameliorative adjectives: "with her beautiful smile and brilliant red hair". This is very realistic as James wouldn't be the sort of person to see the flaws in Lily.

My favourite part was probably the way that James had heard about Lily's like for 'The Chipped Cup' and decided to go there. It's perfect characterisation of him, and someone who is head over heels for a girl - trying to find out whatever he can about her through word of mouth, and find any way of meeting her and talking to her that he can. It's really cute and completely believable.

I liked the fact that he began to feel despair as he drank the coffee; it was a very effective technique to use, that the more coffee he drank, the more hopeless he became. I was so happy to see Lily arrive at the end of this one-shot, and the last two words were a great ending to this sweet story. Great job!

Sian :)

Author's Response: Thanks man. I'm really trying to work on my descriptions and stuff, so I'm glad you like the way i did that. Thank you so much for the review! :D

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Review #2, by ohmymerlin And a Walk

29th December 2012:
SQUEEE!

This is ADORABLE! I LOVE it thank you so much! :D

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This is my favourite gift, thank you so much! :D

gdhksfbvkvf I keep squeaking and grinning like an idiot! I really loved this one-shot, thank you so much! :D

84518645198645/10! ;D

Author's Response: Oh geez, this has taken me forever to respond to. I'm so sorry. But I'm happy you liked it!

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