George's feelings of loss were well displayed in this piece; his thoughts were well presented and written. I could understand George's thought process and could easily sympathise with the character.
A few errors:
'He know he was slowly losing himself' should be 'He knew'
'For awhile he had hated his brother' should be 'For a while, he had...'
'opr the memories of anyone' 'opr' should be 'or'
Aside from that, a good piece of work there :)
Thanks for entering my challenge :) I will get the results out asap on the hall of fame feed. They will probably be up in January, but no later than mid-February.
SophieAuthor's Response: Yeah I was going to go re edit the story once I got my chapter image for it. I wrote it a bit hastily and probably should've went over the spelling 1st before submitting it.
I thank you for presenting the challenge. And soon as I saw it, this story immediately popped into my head and I wrote it. I've never had inspiration that fast or strong.
I can't wait to see the results and thanks for reviewing as well =] Report Review
This is so heartbreaking. You captured George's leftover feelings of his brother very well. I think I saw a grammar mistake or 2 but the story was nothing short of amazing. I'm going to add it to my favorites!!Author's Response: Yeah I was gonna change the grammar mistakes when I got my chapter image for the story. lol
So glad you reviewed this story. It has been my 1st one in a couple of years.
Thank you for leaving me yet another lovely review! Report Review
oh my god. bravo. so heartbreaking!Author's Response: Thank you =] Glad you took the time to leave me a wonderful review Report Review
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