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Review #1, by LadyL8 The Spectrum of Joy

7th July 2014:
Hi There!

Aww, the feels. I don't even like Rolf/Luna that much, but this just got to me. It was so beautifully written.

I liked how Rolf describes Luna. It just seems like he's describing the best thing in his life- or as he says in the story; his greatest find (and that line was brilliant by the way). He makes her seems almost supernatural, like she's out of this world and he feels like the luckiest man on earth for being allowed to love her- to marry her.

It's actually kind of funny, cause when I read Rolf's description of Luna, I thought about this mythical creature we have in Norway's forklore. They are called Hulders, and they're extremely beautiful and captivating. And I somehow connected that to how Rolf describes Luna. Like she is as beautiful and captivating as a Hulder. Weird comparison, though, since the Hulders have tails and trap men in the Underworld, but my mind works weirdly :P

Anyway, the story is constructed really well. I love how you don't know that they're getting married until the end, and I can't believe you managed to write a so good story in only 500 words. The words just flow and your descriptions are flawless. I'm so jealous of you right now, cause you're really talented.

I loved it. 10/10!

- Lotte

House Cup 2014 Review

Author's Response: Aww thank you so much!!

I'm so happy you enjoyed my little drabble... it kind of happened cause i wanted to write about Luna but was too scared to actually attempt writing Luna XD.

That's such an interesting though about the Hulders... I've never heard of that particular myth but they sound beautiful and interesting... I'll have to look them up.

Thank you so much... I really don't know what to say to all this praise: you're so kind!
xo
~Gilly


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Review #2, by Karou_Marauder The Spectrum of Joy

7th July 2014:
Wow. I mean, hello. Let's review.

Characterisation: I think you covered Luna's character pretty well.

...joking. The descriptions were AMAZING. You really captured the essence of Luna, how she's wise and carefree and just all-round herself. The imagery is beautiful. This is just all-round beautiful.

Rolf, though he isn't in it much, is characterised very well too - you just get him in this line: "You have made your greatest find." Rolf is a magizoologist, just like Luna, and it's so sweet how she and him are kinda looking for each other while looking for animals.

I won't talk about description, because I think I mentioned how beautiful it is already, and I won't talk about plot - I'll just say it's a lovely way to begin their marriage.

I didn't notice any typos or anything either. Well done on this amazing one shot in 500 words!!! that summarises Luna entirely.

-Karou, 2014 House Cup Review

Author's Response: Hey Karou,
Thanks so much for your awesome review! I'm so glad you enjoyed this- i put a lot of brain power into these little descriptions and condensing the nonsense into 500 words, and reviews like this make it so worthwile :)

I'm so glad you think i've captured Luna here!
Thanks again,
xo Gilly


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Review #3, by greenbubble The Spectrum of Joy

6th July 2014:
Hey there! I'm here for The House Cup 2014 Event 5.

This is a really beautiful story you know and goodness knows how you actually crammed it all into five hundred words. It has a lovely flow of all different kinds of emotions and feelings. At the beginning the story starts off as quite negative then as it goes on, Rolf realises how he really is lucky to have Luna. I like the sentance 'She floats rather than walks and dances rather than runs' because it really reminds me of how eccentric Luna is. I like your word choice especially and how you have managed to make this a 500 word story. The last sentance is lovely bu the way. I just though I'd tell you :)

Emma

Author's Response: Hey Emma!
Thanks for your awesome review - it's made me so happy to hear from you :)
~Gilly


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Review #4, by nott theodore The Spectrum of Joy

6th July 2014:
Hi, Gilly! What a great story in just 500 words! I'm wondering now why I haven't read more of your work because this was really lovely!

Second person is probably my favourite narration at the moment so I loved that in this story, and the fact that you chose to write about Luna and Rolf, because I don't think I've ever read a story about them before even though they're a canon pairing. The description and imagery in this piece was just fantastic. There was so much metaphor and simile and I think that works so well in a short piece like this, and you chose your words really effectively so that every word really did count. I think it's great that you managed to create something like this and tell the story of Luna and Rolf and capture the way he feels about her, all in such a short story. The last few sentences were just fantastic, as they showed the way that Rolf realised what he wanted in life with Luna. This was great, Gilly!

Sian :)
Gryffindor House Cup 2014 Review

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Review #5, by MissesWeasley123 The Spectrum of Joy

26th October 2013:
GILLY! YOU BEAUTIFUL SOUL!

Seriously, what exactly do I say about this piece? In 500 words, you just created the most beautiful thing I've read in a very long time.

The way you started it was just breathtaking. The use of a butterfly - I don't think there's any other creature that can define Luna so well.

Your use of similes and metaphors were so well done. The descriptions were written so brilliantly, I can't believe at all that this is only 500 words!

You truly did make every word count. This was so breath taking and poetic.

She is a child, a grandmother, an old soul. This one existence, this one attempt at life cannot be her first.

That line was so powerful. You showed that Rolf saw her as so much more, I never would have thought of Luna that way, and that truly was amazing. And then, this:

She floats rather than walks and dances rather than runs.

Like, wow. You put so much beauty and passion into this, I just loved it. It was so well done, I truly mean it.

You also have the best banners lol :P

Author's Response: Nadia! Thank you so much! Oh my goodness, this review makes me feel so warm and fuzzy :)

I'm so glad you liked it and thought it had some substance :) I think this is my first piece that I posted here that I actually edited, so I did put quite a bit of work into it. I'm so happy you appreciated it!

I've always thought of Luna as kind of ethereal, so I just began writing about everything she resembled and it turned into this.

I don't know what else to say except thank you so much!

(I know I'm so lucky with my banner makers :) )

~Gilly


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Review #6, by hpsauce The Spectrum of Joy

27th January 2013:
I love the descriptions in this. The metaphors create beautiful images that make it clear that you are VERY good at descriptive writing.
I can easily tell the character's feelings and follow him along until the final lines.
A few little errors:
'Content to reflect the ight' I think it should be 'light'.
'Words like whimsy and effervescent' I think you don't need the 'like' as I don't think it makes sense with it in there.
Other than that, a beautiful piece that flows really well.
Thanks for entering my challenge :D Results should be up, at the latest, mid-February.
Sophie

Author's Response: Thanks for the review! I'm so glad you liked it :D I will definitely fix those errors asap.
Also, thank you for the awesome challenge, it really inspired me!
~Gill


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Review #7, by slytherinchica08 The Spectrum of Joy

4th December 2012:
So I really liked the description in this alot! I thought that you did absolutely beautifully and found so many different ways to discribe her without actually describing her features! This was a really sweet oneshot about Rolf and his love of Luna and how marrying her was the best day of his life. My only suggestion for this to make it better would be to seperate this one giant paragraph into smaller ones so its not so daunting and easy to lose your place. I found myself skipping a line here and there because they all seemed to run into each other with having just this one paragraph instead of multiple ones. Other than that though, this was a great oneshot and very enjoyable! Great Job!

~Slytherinchica08~

Author's Response: Thanks so much for the review :D
Yeah, I know, the formatting is weird right now, but I will definitely fix it.
Thanks again for stopping by :D
~Gill


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