Unusual but hey! I'm not complaining.

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I really love this story, it is very well written and it's very funny. Please keep writing!! Can't wait for the next chapter!
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This is really really good. I love milk. I saw it in the ... Blurb (?) and I was like= I shall read thy story. So I did.

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Hello!

I enjoyed this chapter as well. Like you said, it wasn't as funny as the first but I think you really started developing the characters, particularly Anya, very well. The information about her family (who I already don't like very much) made her seem more real - nobody can get through life without some problems! But Anya doesn't seem like a completely different character here which probably would have been easy to do with a switch to a more serious tone.

Lily is very smart! Putting out a cover story for her date to put her brothers off the scent was clever, and it would have worked, too, if it hadn't been for Al and Anya's date!

Talking of which... I'm not entirely sure but I think Albus does like Anya, she just doesn't seem to realise it yet! So I feel sorry for him a bit, since she just considered it a favour from a friend. And James seems equally hopeless as far as romance and relationships go - as soon as he actually likes a girl, his confidence falls to pieces and he keeps putting his foot in it!

The end of this chapter was hilarious, though! I can't actually believe how completely clueless Anya is when she's kissing Al! Seriously, that girl is absolutely hopeless too!

I'm looking forward to the next chapter, especially seeing what Anya's sister is like when she starts at Hogwarts, and how things are going to change between Anya and Al. I hope you update soon!

nott theodore :)

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Hello!

When I clicked on this story I wasn't quite sure what to expect, but I ended up really enjoying it!

As an opening chapter, I thought you presented your characters well. I love crazy protagonists (maybe it's because they make me feel more normal...) and Anya definitely qualifies for that award! Her weird obsession with milk made me laugh but I'm glad she still has friends in spite of it (the Diary of Dairy was particularly funny).

I liked the way you opened this chapter. Generally, starting with History of Magic information could risk being boring, but this wasn't at all and I thought Anya's ramblings and crazy thought process really brought her to life. I like your other characters as well, who seem quite realistic. It was nice to find something out about them and glimpse the relationships between Anya and the other characters.

I'm particularly interested about how things will go between Anya and Al! You have to love a bit of romance! But I'm a bit confused since in the summary you make it sound like Anya is looking for love and it doesn't seem like she's particularly concerned with it at the moment.

I have a few suggestions for improvement that I hope you don't mind me making. Although I generally love long chapters, I think that this one was a bit too long as an opening chapter, because there is so much information and so much happening. I think if you split it up a bit then it would flow better, and you would come to an ending which seems a bit more natural.

I do really like this story though, and I'm interested to see how you're going to develop it. I've added this to my favourites!

nott theodore :)

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