Hi! Here from the review tag 3.0! =]
I've never read 2nd person PoV before so I decided to read and review this one. And the main thing is, you aren't using the 2nd person PoV because you like to write it, you're using it because it suits the plot. The pov makes it even better. =]
I was a bit confused at the beginning and thought that you're talking about Molly the original, but I went back to your summary and it made things clear. I liked your plot idea. The grammar looks good and the flow is nice too. =]
AshwiniAuthor's Response: Yay! You gave my little piddly story some love! I'm glad you thought that the 2nd person POV was fitting. It's always a little nerve-wracking to post such a story as it isn't often done but I'm glad you liked it.
Yay for flow too! I deliberately made it more jerky than normal, just because I wanted to so I'm glad it worked. Glad you also became un-confuzzled about which Molly I was talking about :P
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I can't say this was your best story but it was definitely worth reading. It was so sweet yet so almost unbearably sad. I have to ask, why didn't you just use Arthur's name? After all that would have made more sense and you could always make it so he gets a new job after their marriage starts to fall apart. Well, either way I liked it.Author's Response: Thank you for reviewing. This wasn't Molly the original, but Molly the daughter of Percy who we don't know who she ends up with except in fanfics :)
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Hey it's hannnahgracr with your requested review.
I really enjoyed this one shot, the 2nd person POV makes it particularly interesting. As does the fact it isn't linear, that is something I really enjoyed actually. I didn't think it was hard to follow hopefully other people feel the same way. I really loved the simply plot line and the whole one shot overall. It was a perfect length and I love the elements that make it unique. You should definitely try another one shot like this.
Sorry I couldn't find any criticisms but I hope you found this review slightly helpful :-)Author's Response: Thank you. I'm glad it was relatively easy to follow and came off okay. It was different for me to write as well as writing while coming off off a very long writer's block so I appreciate the kind words! Report Review
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