So firstly I'd like to say thank you for reviewing the chapters of my story. It really means a lot (and I'm sorry the next few won't be as regular as the first, i've got exams at the moment and i'm sososo busy.)
Anyways I'm glad the names helped, I know they were random but I really liked them and thought you might.
Just some (hopefully) helpful critisism; I think you need to explain who each character is, for example "Astrid, my older sister," or however it goes.
Also if a child got kidnapped by Voldy I think the mum would be a little more stressed out, maybe you could have Fawn woken up in the middle of the night being called home by Dumbledore, rather than just an Owl Message? I don't know.
Otherwise it's great, well done, you should be proud. Keep up the good work and Happy Writing.
~CharAuthor's Response: Thanks so much for reviewing!! I will keep that in mind.
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